Chinese Conflict..

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It was felt in between the duck sauce...

Melting in the gathering of flavors she design to entrap a wondering soul
Knew that feeding the essence would make amends for the ills rendered
Slendering resistance to an apex
She gathered her clothes and walked out the door

AND HOW COULD I GIN CHUK WITH INTENTIONS AS MALEVOLENT AS HERS
OFFERING PAIN DISGUISING WILLOWED GRASS BLADES
HOW DARE SHE...

Sleepless poses create thought processes that run in continuum
Creating conundrums in one side infinity loops
Regressing the urges to let go

I SAW HER SOUL
TRIED TO HAVE A CONVERSATION OF REASONING BUT IT'S ILLITERATE
WANTS BELLIGERENT TO THE IMMIGRATION OF HER ACTIONS TO CONTROL THE UNCONTROLLABLE
MY MIND IS RIDDLED WITH STRESS FRACTURES

so next chess pieces try to build up the notions that i ran with
carrying payloads that are volatile to its own volition
circulating interactive bio-gens to endorphin igniting a facade of joy......

Yet deep in my soul I am craving that duck sauce....



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Returning some feed 143!!
I liked this a lot. This style of poetry is really light hearted and just has more depth behind that first metaphor, im all about that. It was getting a little hard to identify in the last few excerpts as i got lost in it admittingly, there were some nice examples of some interesting assonance around though that kept it progressive for me. Conceptually i do feel like it couldve been executed a stronger i dont know for sure but it does come off like a heated argument that happened maybe after some fun and dinner lol just wanted to see more situational imagery to bring me around that conflict over the chinese namean, just my depth perception, thanks for the read 143 i enjoyed it

[Emily]

This is strong with imagery at times. Some clear visuals.
This piece sounds like a cycle of torment imo, where she's a good cook, and might take a lil advantage of...
'The way to a man's heart is through his stomach'.

I especially liked these bits...

"...She gathered her clothes and walked out the door

AND HOW COULD I GIN CHUK WITH INTENTIONS AS MALEVOLENT AS HERS..."

"...Sleepless poses create thought processes that run in continuum
Creating conundrums in one side infinity loops
Regressing the urges to let go

I SAW HER SOUL
TRIED TO HAVE A CONVERSATION OF REASONING BUT IT'S ILLITERATE
WANTS BELLIGERENT TO THE IMMIGRATION OF HER ACTIONS TO CONTROL THE UNCONTROLLABLE
MY MIND IS RIDDLED WITH STRESS FRACTURES..."

Continuous chaotic emotions and power in conviction is what I get from this read,
with different scenarios for certain sentences, ie:

"...MY MIND IS RIDDLED WITH STRESS FRACTURES..."

That's really nice imagery.

I also like the oppositional wording in the last two sentences...

"...igniting a facade of joy......

Yet deep in my soul I am craving that duck sauce...."

Interesting read 143.
Interesting angle.