Chipset Dreams

[_Lyrics]

Chipset dreams.

I loved this place so much
I wanted to change the world
Then the world woke me up
all it wanted was to change me..

Computer board of cold gray buildings
Skraping the sky of its darkest cloud
You may hide your dreams inside
Only if your Professional-presentable

What qualities qualify a human
When hearts tick to a hand on their wrist
And people that enjoy their company
Employ them themselves.

I lost my passion, replaced by lithium
hunger nourished by a processor
Vein pumped gas on bones of nanotech
My mind now, is only a chipset

I loved this place so much
Weve both changed..
We're Another product thats sold
Packaged pretty, used, and disposed..

[143]

I dig this.. The whole play on the introspect of dreams vs reality in a computerized form is dope. Even the wording that you could come up with different views like the "Computer board of cold gray buildings". the questioning aspect of this really pushes the mind and soul to answer it soundly. You did a good job on it and the pics is dope....keep dropppppppiiinnnnnnggg

[_Lyrics]

Thank you so much 143

[Aero]

This was dope. Beautifully written.

[_Lyrics]

Thanks for checking it out Aero

[CleverWordz]

Yes, I agree this piece was a revolutionary monument. The process of a human mind triggering the molecules of what reality can perceive.

A twist of Inception with Minority report confronted.
Good drop man. Dazzling!

[Rock girl]

dope poem, you stayed on topic. Nicely done

[SELF ACTIVATE]

This was really dope.

For one because of how you wrote it and for two because It's exactly on the same train of thought I've been currently riding for the last couple weeks or so. I have a piece in the OM titled The Pinocchio Complex. Check it out -- I'm positive you'll dig it.

I loved this place so much
I wanted to change the world
Then the world woke me up
all it wanted was to change me..

^Damn, that's heavy and a great way to open this all up. Athough, it comes across simple at first glance it's actuallyanything but. Those four little lines pack so much retro and introspection it's crazy. I'm not gonna try to over analyze it. Instead, I'm just gonna soak It in let it define it's meaning without force.

I could quote basically this entire poem. The problem is there are no slopes or dropoff of point to distinguish a separation in consistancy. The fact of the matter is that it stays sound and consistent the entire legnth of the read. Thus, I have no real critic for you other than to simply expound on this concept. Transhumanism..a weird and plausibly possible issue in The decades to come. I enjoyed this read for both it's subject matter as well as it's poetic aesthetics. Really good drop my dude. Impressed. Peace.

[Emily]

This criss cross of artificial intelligence and the human brain,
have merged in this well written piece.

"...What qualities qualify a human
When hearts tick to a hand on their wrist..."

Chased by time and chasing our own tails, keeping up with the Jones's, we're constantly struggling for a
way of life that still allows conversations but...not if they're not on some electronic. How sad.

"...I lost my passion, replaced by lithium..."

You have single sentences that pose a whole story and allow the reader to fill in so many
gaps in their imagination. Good job there.

"...I loved this place so much
Weve both changed..
We're Another product thats sold
Packaged pretty, used, and disposed.."

Wow. Great ending.
Discarded people.
Abandoned emotions.
Destroyed dreams.

Beautiful writing _Lyrics.
I really enjoy reading your work.
It's always refreshing and brings something
new to the table because of the unique talent you have
for connecting with the reader.

Another entertaining read Lyrics.

Thank you.

[Lenox]

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