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    Em-UhTh-Double Guh-Ah MuhThugga's Avatar
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    Little Penny

    Oh, little lost penny,
    You old, dogged penny,
    Hiding from the world
    In your corner of the world.
    Is it solace or shelter
    That you find in the dead of night?
    Offering yourself for a thought
    On the corner of a drawer,
    As though anyone’s opinion
    Is worth the red light’s gleam.

    Roxanne,
    You should know better by now.
    Inside that frame stands
    The tides of a great man,
    Surrounded by the copper that
    You have built into an obstacle.

    Oh, little lost penny,
    You old, dogged penny,
    Don’t let that dollar bring you down.
    He isn’t worth what you think he is.
    Let him talk his game
    And he’ll inflate himself
    Beyond the limits of his own skin
    ‘Til the fateful prick
    Of a patient pin.

    And when his,
    When his bubble bursts
    You’ll see his world come crashing down.
    And when his,
    When his bubble bursts
    You’ll search the remains to find yourself.






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    Last edited by MuhThugga; December 1st, 2015 at 06:52 PM

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    bobericc _Lyrics's Avatar
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    Re: Little Penny

    Muhthugga, im not familiar with your writing, but i loved this piece, this had tons of layers and metaphors and i simply loved it, from the idea to the execution of finding a little bit. Of ourselves in the bigger picture even though what were valued by others isnt clear to us.. This hit deep dude please keep writing

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    Re: Little Penny

    I gotta agree with my friend _Lyrics here, this was lovely.
    What I loved about it the most was the pace and tone.
    It has a stunning flowing effect that is elegant and airy.
    Your msg was clear and made me reflect on 'money can't buy you happiness'
    because of the way you worded the situation here.

    Favourite parts...

    "...Roxanne,
    You should know better by now.
    Inside that frame stands
    The tides of a great man,
    Surrounded by the copper that
    You have built into an obstacle..."


    and

    "...And when his,
    When his bubble bursts
    You’ll see his world come crashing down.
    And when his,
    When his bubble bursts
    You’ll search the remains to find yourself..."

    That outro was spectacular.
    Beautiful way to end this clever, well worded piece.

    Entertaining Read.
    Nice Job.


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