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I shell out lifetimes

Belting outcomes to withered actions

You make the best in me rest

Testing my resolve to solve an uncommon question


"What's for dinner in your mind?"

[graf-x]

hmm unsure of the 2nd line in this piece...
other than that - this was simple and overall unsure as a reader where this was going.. maybe explain and tag me, so i better understand.............

some may say this is common sense... but what sense is common when each mind has a different thought process---

[Emily]

...some may say this is common sense... but what sense is common when each mind has a different thought process---

So true. I like the way you talk.

[Emily]

I shell out lifetimes
Belting outcomes to withered actions
You make the best in me rest
Testing my resolve to solve an uncommon question
"What's for dinner in your mind?"

Nice. Short, sweet with sass.
This to me shows strength of character. It shows someone who gives so much but it's
not reciprocated, nor respected the way it's expected.
Not giving a little bit, but a lifetime. And not one, but many.

You make the best in me rest

^^^ Love that bit. Seems like you've given up. The 'best' has flat lined and is waiting for revival.
I can almost hear the clock ticking. The silence in the air.
Your patience wearing thin. Your heartbeat.

"What's for dinner in your mind?"

King Midus, you've got that golden touch. That last line is great.
It leaves a taste lingering and me wondering, 'what's on her mind?'
But I loved the way you phrased it.
Simply stunning.

'What's for dinner in your mind' is sexy as hell.
This little piece shows how it doesn't take many words to draw a whole lot of emotion.
It just takes heart and soul.
You're stacked with that.

I like it.

Great Read.