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    Self Struggle

    Self Struggle - By: Mic S

    Amber Alert!
    I'm taken back to my youth
    where thoughts have been kidnapped,
    memories trapped hostage,
    & my trust thoroughly violated.
    Gloomy nights try to place
    broken pieces together where the stitching
    has ripped apart;
    the strings still attach where ethic
    has been destroyed.
    These scars are paralyzed,
    the surface textured, but
    the wounds bear no significance.

    I choose not to be a victim!
    Searching for dysfunction, to
    feel wedged in a group that is incomplete,
    to fit in.
    Virginity catapulted, hoping,
    that giving it away
    would complete the loneliness I seek to rid.
    This nectar was squeezed from love
    as it was over-used; never meant in
    its proper form.
    I quickly became transparent to attachment.

    My innocence was taken early in age;
    the road to redemption is vulnerable.
    A journey is merely an experiment
    with consequence; the assessment
    to define your soul.

    Every man/woman must fend for thyself.
    The quest is never easy; the answers
    tough to swallow.
    Relying on others without finding
    the confidence in yourself will only
    lead down a dark, selfish, isolated fantasy.

    Discovery only comes from with-in
    before others can notice
    your true worth.
    I know I'm a smudge,
    in a grunge background,
    which impairs any distinction from the similarities
    caused by natural selection. I camouflage
    in this mask of skin, still lost and insecure.

    Amber Alert!

    I've failed to find myself.
    I'm withering away, knowing any day,
    I can be taken without an identity.


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    Re: Self Struggle

    Ohhhhhhh wow, this was dark, psychological and thought provoking.... Loved the entire vibe from this.

    My innocence was taken early in age;
    the road to redemption is vulnerable.
    A journey is merely an experiment
    with consequence; the assessment
    to define your soul.

    Really, REALLY good writing here. You didn't need much to make a world of impact, you know?
    I'm a depressed happy cunt. Don't fuck with me. I love you, but I'm crazy.[/I]


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    Re: Self Struggle

    Quote Originally Posted by 'phX View Post
    Ohhhhhhh wow, this was dark, psychological and thought provoking.... Loved the entire vibe from this.




    Really, REALLY good writing here. You didn't need much to make a world of impact, you know?
    thank you! glad you thought so -


    nice sig btw


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    Re: Self Struggle

    upping 1 time before i drop something new tomorrow.


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    Re: Self Struggle

    I agree with phX, it's a strong piece that resonates.
    You've got some great descriptions, dark paths and sunless emotions.
    There's dismal, gloomy atmosphere built, and a tone that's down hearted and desolate.
    And you're able to carry that air of sorrow from start to end.

    thoughts have been kidnapped,
    memories trapped hostage,
    Gloomy nights try to place
    broken pieces together where the stitching
    has ripped apart;
    the strings still attach where ethic
    has been destroyed.
    Searching for dysfunction, to
    feel wedged in a group that is incomplete,
    to fit in.
    ^^^that's great.

    I quickly became transparent to attachment.
    A journey is merely an experiment
    with consequence
    I know I'm a smudge,
    in a grunge background
    ,

    which impairs any distinction from the similarities
    caused by natural selection. I camouflage
    in this mask of skin, still lost and insecure.
    ^^^Soooo friggen good. Especially what I put in bold. Love it.

    Amber Alert!

    I've failed to find myself.
    I'm withering away, knowing any day,
    I can be taken without an identity.

    Nice outro.

    Mic s, I'm so impressed with this piece.
    I loved reading it. I must have read it four times so far.
    Appreciated the self reflection/struggle you speak about.
    Appreciated the way you told this story.

    I really enjoyed this mic s. Good stuff.

    Top Read.


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    Re: Self Struggle

    This is an amazing work, your story is bold and spoken.

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