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    Listen..
    With a faint knock,
    Hooves of ceramic landscapes afar,
    cries channeling agony,
    Closer, closer
    Wailing exhausted Fog..
    The end of a Revelation.... But a Clever Word always illustrated.

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    Coal to the furnace Cody Phoenix's Avatar
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    Bob Ross with the Prose @Hypotheses .... damn dude, so little but so much.... nice!

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    Thanks man. I dibble abit with my poetic side.
    The end of a Revelation.... But a Clever Word always illustrated.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hypotheses View Post
    Thanks man. I dibble abit with my poetic side.
    check my ku out when u can "sawyer"

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    Listen..
    With a faint knock,
    Hooves of ceramic landscapes afar,
    cries channeling agony,
    Closer, closer
    Wailing exhausted Fog..


    This was interesting.
    It's almost like I was looking at a porcelain train, on a marble mantel, somewhere in Siberia.
    The imagery is welcome.
    I liked the tone and the mood of this piece.
    I thought you had a good intro and outro.
    For something that doesn't have a huge body to it, it's got soul.
    Nice wording Hypotheses.

    Nice piece.
    Looking forward to reading more.

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    Thanks Emily. I'm usual the topical guy, but I can shed light in other area 51.
    The end of a Revelation.... But a Clever Word always illustrated.

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