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    Vibrant

    Vibrant darkness, engulfed pupils
    Radiant emptiness to the cuticles
    Crowded freedom in abundance
    The walls distant with redundancy
    Consitant hypocracy
    The ceilings full of comedy,
    Laughter riddled paint chips
    Smearing colorless hues
    Windows covered in rainbows
    Still i soak in the rain poured
    Life on repeat. Groundhog symptoms
    Waking up to the same old darkness
    Wishing for a shade to rest my eyes on
    But the soot billows beneath my iris
    An eternal blink, sinking between eyelashes
    Pupils drenched in black
    Hope drowning in the undertow
    Countless mirrors holding my relfection
    Though i forget who i am
    Lost in the translation

    But...

    With finger tips for a nose
    I touch the aromas of the day
    The breeze dancing along my hair line
    Tingling the roots until my brain waltz'
    As i collapse within the rhythm
    Tasting the trees
    I get tongue tied within the leafs
    I know the grass is green
    Between the shadows
    I know the flowers seed
    The subtle whisp of the crowds reverberate
    Along the walls of the sky walkers
    The city comes alive
    And my darkness dances with the sun
    And my eyes flutter in the dark
    Staring at the sounds...

    ...wishing i could see it all.








    "In our endeavors to recall to memory something long forgotten, we often find ourselves upon the very verge of remembrance, without being able, in the end, to remember."
    -Edgar Allen Poe

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    Landed Emily's Avatar
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    Re: Vibrant

    This has so much imagery Fatt.
    The first stanza especially is full of pictures that are painted clearly and worded well.
    The blackness/blindness situation evokes emotion that's not easily stirred, but you
    bring such description that you take us into that world and immerse the reader to such an
    extent that sounds start happening, and stills start flickering and it all just comes alive.
    I feel sorry for the character in the first stanza, but by the second I get his strength coming through.
    The way you show us how he understands his world is really beautiful.
    But then...by the last line...you've broken my heart again.
    You're such a talented poet Fatt.
    I think this piece is lovely.
    Nice addition with the Edgar Allen Poe quote at the end too. Nice touch.

    Beautiful read.


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    Re: Vibrant

    Thanks cutie pie lol

    I got you later today @Emily

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    No links. Closed.

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