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    Not a Newbie Nigma's Avatar
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    Fall of the Mind

    Fall of the Mind.

    Although few believe it...

    The haze, it starts to set in.
    My horizons door froze.
    I gaze into the heavens and the skies a lifeless portal.
    Minds of mortals falling like the rain in eyeless storms do.
    And it pains me like a thorn because I plainly tried to warn you.
    They say bravery's a gorgeous thing. Absorb and respect it.
    Crush the flaura and fauna with a mortar and pestle.
    Snort and ingest it, ascend within primordial vessels,
    Or be torn, burnt, and settle, too warped to be rescued.
    Be seen as great, respected, or be lost through the cracks.
    The scenes are stained across the page. I often look back.
    A breed and their forgotten ways, been squandered to black.
    Surreal and somber fables of the monster in man...
    I feel they're false, and maybe there's resolve in that fact,
    Since vision is a prison on the foggiest planet... Yet,
    I've seen the tip of wisdom and eclipsed it's vicious, distant levels.
    Hell I've seen the fallen angels, must assume there's risen devils.
    Saw the blizzard settle, now I'm resting since my breath is fading.
    Slept to see the blemishes invented from the quests I've taken.
    Set me on a bed of razors, rescue me from death and hatred.
    Stressed and I'm depressed and all this medicine perpetuates it.
    Destined to that path in which I'm pointing, like the mast of ships.
    Filtering the poison from the noise before it pass my lips.
    Embarking onto darker waters, dance across the path to it.
    It's black, as if packs of Atlantis transients inhabit it.
    Imagine if the ballads rift was drawn onto the canvas.
    It's synonymous to all of it like knowledge is to glasses.
    Grab the picture, draw a match, watch the photo fall to ashes.
    Draft an almanac of the sunken castles and twisted nations.
    Drift away with the strongest axis whose since decayed,
    And then stick and paste all misplaced pieces and situate it
    Till the picture is repainted and this mist has dissipated.

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    Best in the World Tempest's Avatar
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    Re: Fall of the Mind

    Hmm. Wasn't a hundred percent sure how to feel about this one. In one aspect. I loved the wording and the concept. Thought it came over very smoothly and it was a pretty creative bit of fresh air in the forum. On the other hand, I really couldn't get into the rhyme scheme and that's something I really look forward to in Open Mic pieces. So, I'm torn. Don't think I can nominate this as to me Hall of Fame pieces are near perfect, but I can say I enjoyed it enough to read it to my girlfriend. So keep writing and looking forward to more material from you bro.

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    Re: Fall of the Mind

    This was dope.

    I couldn't feed it as, I ended up becoming your opponent, but I read this - thought it was dope - thought it was a shame for you to get no-showed with such a solid verse - that's why I decided to fill in last minute and make it a battle on an hours notice.

    Much respect @Nigma .

    Criminally slept on over here.

    WTH happened to Open Mic, RB?

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    Re: Fall of the Mind

    This OM is amazing, I enjoyed the imagery and high quality of each line and they contributed greatly to your story of a mind decaying. I am shocked by this, really.

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    Re: Fall of the Mind

    Pretty fuckin good. Tons of dope imagery. Tons of content. Every bar had something to over. Smooth. Creative. And entertaining. There wasn't much I didn't enjoy. I like your style. Dope read.

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