self reflection

[_Lyrics]

Self reflection

most people have a mouthful
to say about others,
But there's no set of eyes
That speak more than your own..

We seek what we can't find
looking into anothers eyes
Hoping they can pair into ours
And give us a value we didnt see

Some eyes can decieve
With indifferent perpectives
Projecting their visions of us onto us-
Broken headlights on a dead end road..

decide for yourself to take that route
Give me a good look in the mirror
And ask me if thats your only choice
Instead of at least trying to turn it around

When the eyes looking back
Are from a past
That made this regrettable future
It only blurs the promise of purpose..

not a damn thing I wouldnt give
To get you to see that image clear
That if nobody will
Ill be there, I still care..

[Emily]

Lyrics, I haven't noticed you in the poetry section before.
I hope you post more.
I love that pic. It's stunning.
As for this poem, I like the direction you took with it.
Its no frills approach talks to me.
I like the ideas and reflection you have here.
I'm not big on the doubling of words in too close proximity (the word eyes)
in saying that, your msg is good. And I like pace of this piece.
I also really like your outro....

"not a damn thing I wouldnt give
To get you to see that image clear
That if nobody will
Ill be there, I still care.."

Yep. That's good.

Keep dropping _Lyrics.
Good to have you around.

[Fatrick Swayze]

this was cool bro nice of you to post your poetry for us to read.

i like how this first took off i thought your imagery was onpoint and it felt like
you had something going and the piece was going somewhere. tbh i felt like you focused
evrything on "eye". you mentioned it in every stanza i believe...i understand the topic theme
but i feel like you could more examples or themes that related to eyes. felt like it was one
dimensional, i need some layers son lol.

good post though please continue to post more! and feel free to join the poetry league

[Rock girl]

This was a very good piece, your imagery was on point. Its full of emotions towards each other.

[Ntalek.]

First off wut up my main man Boberric long time no see..

I personally dug the tone of this piece it was subtle yet still had a bit of impact to it..I thought you chose your words wisely and kept it simple enough to let the truth and emotion shine through..I thought you played this moreso toward understanding than trying to figure out what the piece was about..to me it seemed as though you were displacing your value or the characters into some falsified vision of being what someone else wants you to be instead of realizing the truth within your own viewing of yourself...idk if im right or not but that just how this piece came off to me..

Some eyes can decieve
With indifferent perpectives
Projecting their visions of us onto us-
Broken headlights on a dead end road..

decide for yourself to take that route
Give me a good look in the mirror
And ask me if thats your only choice
Instead of at least trying to turn it around

this was my favorite part of this piece really hit me with a "aint the truth" type of factor..and i also found your closing two stanzas to be substantial to this pieces overall body..good write nice read...idk if i've ever seen you do poetry but not so bad bruh not so bad at all...looking forward to more reads from you my dude..100

[Tempest]

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