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    The rotten piece

    once upon a time there lived an evil powerful man
    he had inherited this as prize of his fathers land
    now dad was grand he conquered and then fed
    but his son was bad conquered and left all dead
    now his father was getting old his power lacking
    his son took loves knife and stabbed the back him
    he used persuasion to attain the sole ruler king
    and left his father a slice of land..the rotten piece

    King Adam. cold dread the empires dictator of sense
    killed the conquered women and kids and cared less
    his heart was like a rock but not solid only calloused
    murder his talent feelings nothing but spited malice
    a fascist ironic how his dad was the exact opposite
    his son started war. he lived life just for stopping it
    named King Cassius he was old and ruled a poor land
    infested with people planning to overthrow old man
    his son could have helped but it wasnt what he cared for
    he had his mind set on one thing that is only more war

    now years past and King adams empire vast as the ocean
    the staff for commotion the reason for fathers emotions
    so heavy. he saw and heard of his sons actions and ways
    and his treatment of people and the slaves he has raised
    this wasnt the son he raised. the frail man traveled to see
    the son he once taught. amazed at what hes came to be
    ..father sit please.. but king cassius fell. down to his knees
    ..son i beg of you listen to me. you are the king. only of greed.
    ..not a reflection of thee. i would disown you but you own me
    ..i beg you to free the slaves..free your people ... let them be
    father cant you see..i always hated you.. dont let emotions stir
    because i am a great king .. historical. what you never were
    or will be. now let go back to your place this is what gods will be
    i mean look . i was the student . and my teachers kneels to me
    a true king. i have retaken your lot. father. get out of my face
    back to your quarters. near the shelter with all of the slaves.

    Now no longer king Cassius was a slave encaged to his son
    after all he did for him . he recieved not one ounce of love
    none. he stayed calm. never got anger at his son the hellion
    not for redemption.for his sons own good. he began a rebellion
    must be gods blessin . Cassius had leader skills a sheen one
    and one amazing night . the slaves overtook Adams kingdom
    ..king cassius here he is the king your son. with his children...
    he treated them like shit...may i have the honor to kill him...
    ..NO..with a voice of power..you may leave let gods will be...
    and take his children..leave my son to sit here with me..

    Son adam. your actions have made you a beast they hurt you.
    because it puts you in a bad spot. with this role reversal
    ..kill me father...yea right...you dont have the heart and never did
    i wish to die than be in your control . as king your a piece of shit
    ....BE QUIET... think of life. your wife...think of your kids...
    and realize it takes a heart with love for me to do this....


    king cassius then spoke the words...

    Son here is your punishment..
    Father..mm..wait..

    Son BE QUIET like i said..it would be wise for you to stop to speak
    you will now reside as a slave in my land...to forever Rot In Peace...
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    Omfg...This was the illest dawg...

    im lovin this..sum1 archive this...

    ''i mean look . i was the student . and my teachers kneels to me''--powerful lines ...

    and the ending was blaze...this was more than a good read....illness dunz...props..

    stay up..

    peace
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    ''son i beg of you listen to me. you are the king. only of greed.''--Dope...

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    yes.. this was damned nice....

    sand never seems to disappoint.......

    *wonders why this is sticky*
    aww fuck it..... good thing it is so it dont get buried
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    Sand always drops tha Illest shit.............His my favorite emcee....Lol.................This drop had Ill wordplay in it...............Sand knows how to Roc da mic to da fullest

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    this was the illest piece iv'e ever read, you are one of the best man,keep writin
    Hence Forward.. BURR!
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    extrem dopeness... can someone tel me why this is stickied.

    well anyway im nominate this for legendary open mic.

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    Atetrack define'
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    sticky ill peices so they dont get slept on...seems to work at times....but yeah....ill drop sand,cant say much thte rest havent,the teacher on the knees thing was ill,the last two bars were the nicest finisher out,forever rot in peice...illness....

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    sand, this shit had a good message as usual. Your flow and your wordplay are always ill, especially the Rot In Piece thing. at the end.
    This was complete dopeness.
    best lines:
    his heart was like a rock but not solid only calloused
    murder his talent feelings nothing but spited malice

    that was my favourite, seemed to fit nicely with everything.
    Peace
    wordperfect?
    ..o0Pure0o..

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    eyeopeningmaybeyouhaveathinggoingonintherethatpeop leshouldknowaboutgoodstickysandihopeyougetmadprops forthisonesorrymyspacebarisbrokenonthisonetodayyou knowthelibrarycheepcomputersforfreepeace

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    sand this piece you have done is max dopeness, plot was nice with good ending, some lines that were powerful -

    his heart was like a rock but not solid only calloused

    i mean look . i was the student . and my teachers kneels to me

    Son BE QUIET like i said..it would be wise for you to stop to speak you will now reside as a slave in my land...to forever Rot In Peace...

    lookin foward to seein more of your pieces.
    peace out...

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    how did i manage to spell peace,peice?.............argh.....too tired,3 days up need sleep...pshhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.......lmao at linez...library computers are fucked up haha......shits always broke,the computer at my library snapped i swear,the big thing with all the micro chip shit inside it jsut fell apart one day......yeah.

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    Just one thing...When are you going to do audio so I can listen to you? (If you did like this/how you have been doing, I would surely burn you. And it you got a deal and released a CD, you can bet I'd buy)...

    ...So I guess that means I like
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    well thank you ...
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    yes this is dope! i dont know what else to say. RB legends

    BTW what do you guys expect? sand is from new mexico, its just our nature to be dope

    just watch in the next few years new mexico is going to blow up and the next big rap state

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    lmfao....word new mexico.
    getting on the map. alba
    crazy...lmfao at your unibrow
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