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@Joe Boston vs @E Tha Real
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Verses due Monday, Feb 23rd 2015 11:59PM EST
10 - 16 lines.
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@Joe Boston vs @E Tha Real
Check ins due by Wednesday, Feb 18th 2015 11:59PM EST
Verses due Monday, Feb 23rd 2015 11:59PM EST
10 - 16 lines.
ALL FL RULES APPLY
Last edited by Massaker; February 16th, 2015 at 11:54 PM
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@Joe Boston @E Tha Real
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@Joe Boston
@E Tha Real
Verses due tonight
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I'll do it all for my country with this blade im beheading ya
I'll snatch his Guilianis like he had the audacity to say Obama hated America
Your not clever bruh with those wits u wont be bagging a winner
Think ur Tailor Swift but cheesy as fuck like Kanye when u take a bitch to dinner
Your just a beginner in this text shit so why attempt to post up shop
In this league your not where ur Post to Be like an Omarion and Breezy flop
I let your bitch ride on top after Im done she cleans me up proper
Need to control ur Bird, Man cuz the performance she puts in the bitch deserves a oscar
Your wordplay needs a doctor try to chance me ur falling flat
Everyone sick of Etha n ol the whack shit he spits we just hope he dies digesting that
Could let ur brains splat here or follow direction and put ur hands up
Try to be that man with Hart you'll be dead before he reaches The Garden to do his standup
Every realationship u had erupts badly you never create that chemisrty
So a Real Chance Of Love? is wishing you a horrible death like that Celebrity
You have no longevity text battling has never been your pedigree
So if they think the Champ is more EThan Allen their just fags who love retail therapy
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The champ clearly doesn't see your babble & jokesOriginally Posted by Barcotic
Ur Mechanics are off, engineer overlooked every battle post
Unspittable & long winded lines all filled with bull
WTF @ We can go 16 lines each & you have 700 more syllables
Here's a phrase said no one ever "your flows work"
Fags impersonating David Spade to perfection... We all know Joe Dirt
10 LLL weeks, 3 wins w/ 1 by no-show fill-up your empty banner
Losers total wins only show 2-legit as Mc hammer
llunatic & fanboy got AK verses on wheeties boxes of cereal
Just cause you a knightrider, doesn't mean you have HOF material
Nosy instigator with the IQ. of a kingox simply a dumb fuck
If Joe Budden one more time; your face.. My fist'll bump it up!
FL trying to give me competition, but you'll lose to me
Only time you shaving points is helping Lenox through puberty
You lay a beat down on a record? Stop acting fake son
He can't lay a beat down...but his loss column shows he can take one
Joe- this wasn't the best I've seen from you. you're very formulaic and predictable at times. basically, your whole verse was a reference to some current event using some type of celebrity name-play reach. you didn't come direct at your opponent enough and imo you're punches weren't very harsh or insulting. no real quotable bars and flow was choppy.
E- your verse was a better read and had some nice bars. knightrider was cool, could have been nicer if you referenced the show somehow (if you did, I missed it). your closer was the LOTB imo. nothing else was quotable per say, but some of your misses were near hits like your name-play attempts. I've read a handful of your battles now and I think you're at your best when you stay away from cliché, pop culture related concepts and focus on bars like your closer that are simple but clever.
vote E for having more quotable bars and better misses
I'll do it all for my country with this blade im beheading ya
I'll snatch his Guilianis like he had the audacity to say Obama hated America
What are you talking about?
Your not clever bruh with those wits u wont be bagging a winner
Think ur Tailor Swift but cheesy as fuck like Kanye when u take a bitch to dinner
Wasn't feeling this.
Your just a beginner in this text shit so why attempt to post up shop
In this league your not where ur Post to Be like an Omarion and Breezy flop
Another mainstream artist reference. Every bar so far has been a simile. I'm not a fan of similes because for the most part, if worded badly, it has no type of effectiveness or impact, IMO.
I let your bitch ride on top after Im done she cleans me up proper
Need to control ur Bird, Man cuz the performance she puts in the bitch deserves a oscar
Another mainstream artist reference, bro. This one was A LITTLE better, tho.
Your wordplay needs a doctor try to chance me ur falling flat
Everyone sick of Etha n ol the whack shit he spits we just hope he dies digesting that
Terrible reach.
Could let ur brains splat here or follow direction and put ur hands up
Try to be that man with Hart you'll be dead before he reaches The Garden to do his standup
Had potential, but wording killed it for you.
Every realationship u had erupts badly you never create that chemisrty
So a Real Chance Of Love? is wishing you a horrible death like that Celebrity
Wasn't feeling this.
You have no longevity text battling has never been your pedigree
So if they think the Champ is more EThan Allen their just fags who love retail therapy
This had potential as well. Fell flat as is.
OVERALL: Chill w/ all the mainstream references bro. 85% of your verse was a poorly worded simile, as well. If you're going to use a simile, make sure the concept is dope and make an impact before you break out "LIKE" WHATEVER it is and/or message you are trying to get across, man. I've definitely seen you come WAY better then this. I took it as, you rushed some shit together just to show up.
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The champ clearly doesn't see your babble & jokes
Ur Mechanics are off, engineer overlooked every battle post
Weak.
Unspittable & long winded lines all filled with bull
WTF @ We can go 16 lines each & you have 700 more syllables
Weak.
Here's a phrase said no one ever "your flows work"
Fags impersonating David Spade to perfection... We all know Joe Dirt
This was ok. Could have been worded better, but decent as is.
10 LLL weeks, 3 wins w/ 1 by no-show fill-up your empty banner
Losers total wins only show 2-legit as Mc hammer
Didn't like this.
llunatic & fanboy got AK verses on wheeties boxes of cereal
Just cause you a knightrider, doesn't mean you have HOF material
What are you even talking about?
Nosy instigator with the IQ. of a kingox simply a dumb fuck
If Joe Budden one more time; your face.. My fist'll bump it up!
Cool concept, horribly worded.
FL trying to give me competition, but you'll lose to me
Only time you shaving points is helping Lenox through puberty
Lol, basic but cool.
You lay a beat down on a record? Stop acting fake son
He can't lay a beat down...but his loss column shows he can take one
Flip on a very old/played concept.
OVERALL: E's got the mechanics of battling down. If he can only come up with more effective concepts, he'd be straight. A lot of his verses are off the top key ups so I'm not mad at him. No much I can say other then what has been said already. Just some stronger concepts needed. Wording is ok.
I got E taking this. Joe was all over the place and the majority of his material fell completely flat. I mean, I see where you were trying to go, but you got lost in your transitions. Insult your opponent with jokes and/or witty concepts. That's battling guys.
v/E Tha Real
I'll do it all for my country with this blade im beheading ya
I'll snatch his Guilianis like he had the audacity to say Obama hated America
miss
Your not clever bruh with those wits u wont be bagging a winner
Think ur Tailor Swift but cheesy as fuck like Kanye when u take a bitch to dinner
not feeling
Your just a beginner in this text shit so why attempt to post up shop
In this league your not where ur Post to Be like an Omarion and Breezy flop
decent set up
I let your bitch ride on top after Im done she cleans me up proper
Need to control ur Bird, Man cuz the performance she puts in the bitch deserves a oscar
ok birdman flip with movie being fairly new couldve been better
Your wordplay needs a doctor try to chance me ur falling flat
Everyone sick of Etha n ol the whack shit he spits we just hope he dies digesting that
lil forced
Could let ur brains splat here or follow direction and put ur hands up
Try to be that man with Hart you'll be dead before he reaches The Garden to do his standup
has potential
Every realationship u had erupts badly you never create that chemisrty
So a Real Chance Of Love? is wishing you a horrible death like that Celebrity
simple couldve been better
You have no longevity text battling has never been your pedigree
So if they think the Champ is more EThan Allen their just fags who love retail therapy
creativity there but lil forced.
vs
The champ clearly doesn't see your babble & jokes
Ur Mechanics are off, engineer overlooked every battle post
soft but a personal at that
Unspittable & long winded lines all filled with bull
WTF @ We can go 16 lines each & you have 700 more syllables
not feeling
Here's a phrase said no one ever "your flows work"
Fags impersonating David Spade to perfection... We all know Joe Dirt
Better Flip Decent Nameplay
10 LLL weeks, 3 wins w/ 1 by no-show fill-up your empty banner
Losers total wins only show 2-legit as Mc hammer
wasnt feeling the attempt
llunatic & fanboy got AK verses on wheeties boxes of cereal
Just cause you a knightrider, doesn't mean you have HOF material
nothing hard hitting
Nosy instigator with the IQ. of a kingox simply a dumb fuck
If Joe Budden one more time; your face.. My fist'll bump it up!
creativity there but lacks finish
FL trying to give me competition, but you'll lose to me
Only time you shaving points is helping Lenox through puberty
humorous
You lay a beat down on a record? Stop acting fake son
He can't lay a beat down...but his loss column shows he can take one
simple played personal but its a personal at least
v/E Tha Real he had actual landing punches and personals and the misses he had had potential
3-0 E
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Joe- wasn't feeling ur opener. Wasn't feeling ur second bar either. 3rd bar I felt was really weak tbh. Nothing harsh about it.4th bar was worded like shit tbh. And didn't really get this. Bar 5 ethanol was a scratch man. U know better. Bar 6 was cool. Could have a different approach tbh. Bar 7 was wack and closer was a cool concept but fell short
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E - first two bars I felt were weak tbh. Nothing real clever. Joe dirt was aight. Set up could have been better. Didn't like mc hammer. Thought knight rider was nice tbh.joe budden was aight. Something was off. Lenox through puberty was dope and closer was aight
Overall. I didn't feel much of hoes verse. Felt he had to much current events. While e brought some clever site related material which hits harder for me tbh. And his wording and misses both better.
Vote e
I let your bitch ride on top after Im done she cleans me up proper
Need to control ur Bird, Man cuz the performance she puts in the bitch deserves a oscar
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Here's a phrase said no one ever "your flows work"
Fags impersonating David Spade to perfection... We all know Joe Dirt
Not a great battle here. I've got it tied at one quote a piece, but I think E tha Real had a couple better attempts. Joe I've seen u come much better than this. You usually have good concepts but your wording is fucked most of the time. Trty to drop more like u did in LLL this week n you'll be straight. E what can I say you did what u neded to do to win. I was expecting more from u but u still got this.
v/E
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