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@Wordz AhGod.
Wordz AhGod.
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@Wordz AhGod.
in. g'luck pal.
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Can we bump this to Monday? I'll be gone all weekend and Works gonna be busy tomorrowOriginally Posted by Wordz AhGod.
Sure I had 10 done and the pc at work shut down for an update so I lost it all haha. STAT Again Tomorrow lol
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ahh fuck lol I did that for one of the Tag matches.. Had my concepts all wporded the way I wanted.. And lost it all. I almost round house kicked the shit outta my workplace yo
You don’t get under my skin, your opinions are empty when ur relayin your bars
If I’m ever unleashing hollow points; I guarantee that you’re gonna take it to heart
Stop actin like a bitch n man up, u can’t gain respect by mentioning me son
The only way this manicure himself is if he stops getting those professionally done
I’ll off you on any platform; hell I’ll even outdo you in cursive dawg
So if someone says word-perfect, s’cos thats the program he types his shitty verses on
You’re easily distracted n your stubbornness is much too tough to drill thru
Next time you get sidetracked, we just hope the ditches are deep enough to kill you
I’m light years ahead of ya, ur too lazy to progress n get ur angles right
So while this stupid fuck just laseround, I’m using those to end this faggots life
sorry for the late drop, been working on shit for the site.
ur cheating is real b, u should've been dead in a rat hole
if I followed fresh to the letter.. we'd see em editing polls for that battle.
u drop heat? ok, u'll get tagged n buried, ur team got smashed for actin girly
kids saw what this fireman carried.. n how kp used that to get u thru half the tourney.
truth is, Im in the military nigga.. we do the shit u fakes rap in yo lines
so it's easy to say I'll die with guns blazing.. while ur discharge'll be the vaginal kind.
I mod tourneys n win, u promoted had dudes scratchin their heads, dazed
even then u kept acting rash.. a known side affect of me draggin ur dead weight.
being ill starts w/ an alias, most pick ones that can gain merits
See I was dope from the first scene, it took u 10 years for people to give ur name credit.
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Side tracked, manicure (seen it a lot but it came off clean so it hit)
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Dead weight, vaginal kind
I've got it even in quotes. If I had to look at it overall though, I'd say WAG had fresher concepts n better misses between the two.
V/WAG
Fresh
You don’t get under my skin, your opinions are empty when ur relayin your bars
If I’m ever unleashing hollow points; I guarantee that you’re gonna take it to heart
^^^ played, nice touch on it IMO
Stop actin like a bitch n man up, u can’t gain respect by mentioning me son
The only way this manicure himself is if he stops getting those professionally done
^^^ wording was terrible here like the concept though
I’ll off you on any platform; hell I’ll even outdo you in cursive dawg
So if someone says word-perfect, s’cos thats the program he types his shitty verses on
^^^ bad wording again but i lol'd
You’re easily distracted n your stubbornness is much too tough to drill thru
Next time you get sidetracked, we just hope the ditches are deep enough to kill you
^^^ lol
I’m light years ahead of ya, ur too lazy to progress n get ur angles right
So while this stupid fuck just laseround, I’m using those to end this faggots life
^^^. Cool concept, bad wording
Fresh had some alri bars fresh concepts n personals were bit weak
WAG
ur cheating is real b, u should've been dead in a rat hole
if I followed fresh to the letter.. we'd see em editing polls for that battle.
^^^ lol very forced
u drop heat? ok, u'll get tagged n buried, ur team got smashed for actin girly
kids saw what this fireman carried.. n how kp used that to get u thru half the tourney.
^^^ idk wat this means,
truth is, Im in the military nigga.. we do the shit u fakes rap in yo lines
so it's easy to say I'll die with guns blazing.. while ur discharge'll be the vaginal kind.
^^^ played
I mod tourneys n win, u promoted had dudes scratchin their heads, dazed
even then u kept acting rash.. a known side affect of me draggin ur dead weight.
^^^ lol
being ill starts w/ an alias, most pick ones that can gain merits
See I was dope from the first scene, it took u 10 years for people to give ur name credit.
^^^ light jab
wag had more personals and better concepts
vote Wordz AhGod
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You don’t get under my skin, your opinions are empty when ur relayin your bars
If I’m ever unleashing hollow points; I guarantee that you’re gonna take it to heart
Played concept w/ a SEMI cool twist. I think I dropped this concept last season, as in the season before last and was told "It's played as fuck" but w/e. I've seen a few of these after, but this is probably one of the better ones.
Stop actin like a bitch n man up, u can’t gain respect by mentioning me son
The only way this manicure himself is if he stops getting those professionally done
I've seen a few Manicure/Man'll cure wp's/concepts. This one was basic and simple, as every other one I've seen IMO. No real harm here, other then the concept was executed cleanly. Just the typical, Your a faggot shot, which in reality is done to death here on RB.
A bit of a reach here, and this is why. His name is Wordz. And if you look at the concept from a grammar stand point, it's incorrect. But RB's gotten extremely lazy where every reader/voter let's the writer get away with it and I'm guilty of this as well, but only because I know that I'm going to get away with it. As far as the name play, I liked it. Don't think I've seen this angle thrown at him and I've seen a lot of Wordz name plays. Again, cleanly executed.I’ll off you on any platform; hell I’ll even outdo you in cursive dawg
So if someone says word-perfect, s’cos thats the program he types his shitty verses on
You’re easily distracted n your stubbornness is much too tough to drill thru
Next time you get sidetracked, we just hope the ditches are deep enough to kill you
Same as the whole "Making a Point/Physical Harm" concept. I've seen a lot of these done. And I believe I remember reading one before my most recent haitus. However, this wasn't twisted cool enough for me. A most every Off track, Side tracked, On track, etc has had the "In a ditch" execution a long with it.
I’m light years ahead of ya, ur too lazy to progress n get ur angles right
So while this stupid fuck just laseround, I’m using those to end this faggots life
Again. Seen the concept done before, but not used in the word play as you did. This could have been dope, IMO. I think you go lazy tho. Your basically just saying your going to kill him with a lazer. Ok? What are you, luke skywalker, my man? Just came off corny to me.
OVERALL: I think you have improved greatly Fresh and I will give you that, however your choice of concepts and executions aren't there. Your wording however has improved A LOT which is good. YOu went from Statement's to actually delivering punches. You just have to work on the conceptual aspect of writing now. Try an stray away from the out dated concepts like your 1st bar. And if you're going to use some such as, try and throw in something relevant, like a recent event or tie it in with a personal so that it's more of a clean direct shot, not just another cliche generic word play/double meaning pun that was played back in 2010.
vs
ur cheating is real b, u should've been dead in a rat hole
if I followed fresh to the letter.. we'd see em editing polls for that battle.
Ehhh, concept was choppy here. Cool attempt at a personal, but I think your execution was extremely lazy.
Another personal. This was cool, I think. But just as I said in Fresh's "Word-Perfect Bar", grammatically, it's reaching but w/e. All of you faggots have gotten lazy and accept it now and days so I guess it works.u drop heat? ok, u'll get tagged n buried, ur team got smashed for actin girly
kids saw what this fireman carried.. n how kp used that to get u thru half the tourney.
Lol, cool.truth is, Im in the military nigga.. we do the shit u fakes rap in yo lines
so it's easy to say I'll die with guns blazing.. while ur discharge'll be the vaginal kind.
I mod tourneys n win, u promoted had dudes scratchin their heads, dazed
even then u kept acting rash.. a known side affect of me draggin ur dead weight.
Ok, IMO. I think this could have been executed a lot harsher to land a potential haymaker but based off of what I read so far, it seems you were lazy and really didn't give a fuck whether you win or lose this battle.
being ill starts w/ an alias, most pick ones that can gain merits
See I was dope from the first scene, it took u 10 years for people to give ur name credit.
Nah. Didn't like this one at all.
OVERALL: Not much to say other then this verse was lazy. I can tell. By reading this, I got the sense that you didn't and/or don't care whether you win or lose this battle. But as far as the verse it self, it wasn't too bad. Some solid personals, I feel you could have touched up on for potential haymakers but as I stated previously, you were lazy and took the easiest way out.
This battle's fairly close. I got Fresh w/ the Word Perfect name play and Wordz w/ the Fireman Carry & the Vaginal Discharge was funny and true at the same time. So based off punch for punch, I think I have to edge this one to WAG for the simple fact that, he stayed personal against Fresh approach and trying to string together random concepts. So with that being said,
v/@Wordz AhGod.
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You don’t get under my skin, your opinions are empty when ur relayin your bars
If I’m ever unleashing hollow points; I guarantee that you’re gonna take it to heart
THIS WAS A GOOD CONCEPT, BUT COULDA BEEN EXECUTED HARSHER, STILL GOOD THO
Stop actin like a bitch n man up, u can’t gain respect by mentioning me son
The only way this manicure himself is if he stops getting those professionally done
THIS IS A BIT PLAYED BRO. IF IT WAS PLAYED WHEN I USED IT, IT'S GONNA BE HARD TO GIVE YOU THIS ONE
I’ll off you on any platform; hell I’ll even outdo you in cursive dawg
So if someone says word-perfect, s’cos thats the program he types his shitty verses on
NO PROBLEM WITH THIS ONE, "WORD PERFECT" IS SOMETHING I PERSONALLY HAVEN'T SEEN, SO THIS IS GOOD, OVERALL LINE WAS OK TOO
You’re easily distracted n your stubbornness is much too tough to drill thru Next time you get
sidetracked, we just hope the ditches are deep enough to kill you
THIS WAS GOOD
I’m light years ahead of ya, ur too lazy to progress n get ur angles right
So while this stupid fuck just laseround, I’m using those to end this faggots life
THIS WAS GOOD, AGAIN COULDA BEEN EXECUTED HARSHER, BUT STILL GOOD
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ur cheating is real b, u should've been dead in a rat hole
if I followed fresh to the letter.. we'd see em editing polls for that battle.
THIS WAS GOOD, FRESH PERSONAL. I JUST DIDN'T LIKE THE "RAT HOLE/BATTLE" SCHEME. COMES OFF A BIT FORCED TO ME
u drop heat? ok, u'll get tagged n buried, ur team got smashed for actin girly
kids saw what this fireman carried.. n how kp used that to get u thru half the tourney.
THIS WAS GOOD
truth is, Im in the military nigga.. we do the shit u fakes rap in yo lines
so it's easy to say I'll die with guns blazing.. while ur discharge'll be the vaginal kind.
THIS WAS GOOD
I mod tourneys n win, u promoted had dudes scratchin their heads, dazed
even then u kept acting rash.. a known side affect of me draggin ur dead weight.
THIS WAS ANOTHER GOOD PERSONAL
being ill starts w/ an alias, most pick ones that can gain merits
See I was dope from the first scene, it took u 10 years for people to give ur name credit.
EHH, THIS WAS WACK TO ME
vote W.a.G
Ok, so in my eyes this battle was actually very close. I have it equal in lines that I liked, and both had shit I hated. I wanted to punch fresh in the face for using a manicure line, and wags opener was fuckin trash
Kill a bitch and kill her kid
all depends what her nigga did
-herbo
upp, 1.
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