The Scarlet Soliloquy - Niccolo ft. Nigma

[Nigma]

The Scarlet Soliloquy



To Whom It May Concern:

Nigma
There must be more to this existence than be born and wither
I’m a horrid sinner. Nothing a sorry fixes. It was just like the warning lists it
I’ve seen the horns of dormant figures, enormous conformist insects
They form ‘n live comin forth with more hisses than a swarm of lizards
Their force was mystic. Its war. Sadistic. They bore my limbs, with a jerk, they towed me
.... bestow.. me.. with.. control... please.
I’ve been dragged... so... low. The current pulls me.
My current temperature, exposed, could burn the ocean
I’ve got the urge to fold and to purge emotions
I’d endure the moment if I’d heard an omen, someone surely knows this
Just don’t hold your current vocals turning thoughts to words unspoken
When its your turn to go and the curtain closes youll explode in perfect focus
Truth is, this Earth is growing like vines, rising in height… Sigh...
But a few have oppose us, place a price where our rights lie
Illumined and know the ones who tryin to strike out our minds eye
Polluting the food, we’re losing the likes of our pineal’s hindsight
I’m refusing to go or to come, decide to roll with the wise dice
Our mutual goal was one, most righteous pull of my lifetime

But then again...

Niccolo
The beautiful golden sun brightly glows from the skyline
A gentle breeze, a light atmosphere makes everything feel fine
With such perfection, security, my worries soon fade away
I feel invincible, my world is now colorful, no longer dull grey
The heavy load I once held has finally been lifted
I can now see what I missed as my gaze is shifted
I breathe in, then let it go with all my heart
Maybe this will give me a brand new way to start
I'm free, free, free... that is the song that my soul sings
Now that I've left that place the scars and cuts don't sting
For I'm letting go of my past, and taking on a new view
I really do believe that if I start now. I can start anew.
So I wave goodbye with no regrets
The broken past I plan to simply forget
And although it may still rest inside my mind
I will keep it hidden deep down where no one will find
And eventually that dark past will have seemed to never existed
Disappearing into my subconscious, I'll become again untwisted
Like I was when I was a child, I shall become happy and carefree
Because now without worry, without a doubt, I can be me.

Sincerely Yours

My suicide letter to me....

[ILLunatic]

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[Sho 'Nuff]

Holy flow! Not to throw shade but I liked Nigmas part the best. Mostly because it was written and structured in a way that kept it movin, flowing and flowing, not the mention the rhyming was top notch

Nic's part painted more of a picture for me, I'm assuming he does that pretty often

"And eventually that dark past will have seemed to never existed
Disappearing into my subconscious, I'll become again untwisted
Like I was when I was a child, I shall become happy and carefree
Because now without worry, without a doubt, I can be me."

^ one of my favorite parts of your verse, Nic.

Both were impeccable, solid from both ends, I'd love to read more from both. Either seperate or together.

Stay uppity!

[Emily]

Nigma, well done with the rhymes.
You’ve got them all over the place, start, internals, end, sometimes you’ve got them stacked together, multi’s, I’m loving it.

“I’ve seen the horns of dormant figures, enormous conformist insects
They form ‘n live comin forth with more hisses than a swarm of lizards…”

Nice imagery filling up these bars, giving us lots of information, giving us beautiful
Atmosphere.

“Their force was mystic. Its war. Sadistic….” -- Love lines like this. The flow is great.

Nice pauses, just rolls off the tongue.

The whole, ‘fold and to purge emotions’ was well written. Good way with words.
And that last line in your stanza was interesting. I liked the way it fell.

You described the misery really well and I didn't falter for a moment, I knew where
this person's mind set was, because you take the reader to the exact place of impact.


Niccolo, Your story telling skills shine bright in this piece.
The atmosphere you convey has a soft, gentle approach and
It’s pretty. You paint that ‘invincible’ feeling you speak of with
Wonderful words that complement each other, they add so much
To the imagery of the piece.
It’s ironic that while I read all I feel is a place of peace and a feeling of
Freedom. You did well to translate those feeling s onto paper.
I also loved the fact that this person is finally feeling good, and then
You realize why…it’s a jolt to the system, a shock, and not expected.
Gotta love that type of surprise.

“The beautiful golden sun brightly glows from the skyline
A gentle breeze, a light atmosphere makes everything feel fine
With such perfection, security, my worries soon fade away
I feel invincible, my world is now colorful, no longer dull grey
The heavy load I once held has finally been lifted
I can now see what I missed as my gaze is shifted…”

Your rhymes are soft, touching base and not disconnecting with the
Rest of the bars, but your stanza still works well with Nigma’s, even though
His is jam packed, going hell for leather with rhymes.

Guys, I find the mix of the two stanzas a nice balance.
Imo, it works well. A place of erratic mind before, then
A place of serenity.

Solid piece.
You did a great job conveying this msg and passing on the emotions, which were
Plenty. The imagery was nice. The wording did justice to the atmosphere,
and that picture, well, I thought that was a brilliant touch. Very clever.

“Because now without worry, without a doubt, I can be me.

Sincerely Yours

My suicide letter to me....”

I loved the outro, but I would have preferred a different rhyme at the end, or
In that first line I’ve got above. It was such a strong outro, and ending it with
The same word 'me' in such close proximity softened the outro …you know…middle of the road.
I know you could have picked it up a little bit more with two different words.
That’s pretty much my only negative . Lol.

Loving that style guys.
Top collab.

Great read.

And Niccolo, you were right, I did love it : )

[Nicasso]

Bump

[Rilla]

Very nice vocabulary and flow from nigma. The rhymes there were butter.

"I’m a horrid sinner. Nothing a sorry fixes. It was just like the warning lists it
I’ve seen the horns of dormant figures, enormous conformist insects
They form ‘n live comin forth with more hisses than a swarm of lizards
Their force was mystic. Its war. Sadistic."

Getting some real dark vibes here. Nice.

Nice transition into nicasso's piece. No pun intended. It gave a vibe where they came to terms with what was going on.

"The beautiful golden sun brightly glows from the skyline
A gentle breeze, a light atmosphere makes everything feel fine
With such perfection, security, my worries soon fade away
I feel invincible, my world is now colorful, no longer dull grey"

Nice imagery here. A stand still where everything looks beautiful.


Overall nice read. Both worked well together on this.

[Nigma]

@Sho 'Nuff appreciate the hof nom sir

[Oxymoron]

That was a good read. Loving the vocab and flow of these.

I’ve seen the horns of dormant figures, enormous conformist insects
They form ‘n live comin forth with more hisses than a swarm of lizards
Their force was mystic. Its war. Sadistic.

this bit was smooth to read. Was feeling the style. Overall this was a fun thing to read for me. Was getting an dark vibe of a struggle. Painted some cool images in my head. Nothing bad i can really say about these.

The beautiful golden sun brightly glows from the skyline
A gentle breeze, a light atmosphere makes everything feel fine
With such perfection, security, my worries soon fade away
I feel invincible, my world is now colorful, no longer dull grey

Nics verse painted strong images, i found this to be uplifting for the overall tone of the piece and when i got to the end i was like. oh. I liked how it took a twist for me, I didnt see it coming to be honest. Flow was also quite good. I found nigmas flowed better for me. But yours also had its moments. I also thought yours had thre more direct message overall.

both these were an exelent read. was digging it a lot. Keep up the good work.

[Nigma]

Thanks for the read man. Also, thats one of the dopest sigs ive ever seen.
Salute