Crystal Complex

[Fresh]

Crystal Complex

Looking through glass
I see myself as I reflect
The moments that have passed
Life is done in reps
It's spinning much to fast
A maelstrom of my regrets
Envelops me like a mask
and it takes away my breath

The thunder rages under tasteless sky's while younger faces smile
In this chapter of life the pages blunder by and encumber shapeless guile
No wonder age is vile, because the previous events we see in sequence
The deviance imprints itself tediously hence why expedience is pent
I'm tarnished from the hail that I harness when the carnage is inhaled
Garnished and impaled by the heartless as they harvest every fail
Soon the darkness will unveil what would once shimmer in the light
Brightness hindering my sight now I linger in the night, misery takes flight
Luminous affects cause me to ruminate aspects of life without scrupulous intent
I want to be humorous again at a numerous percent without hallucinogens
Everybody is encompassed by a cloud of comforting convictions
Stuck inside the circumference of a shroud, suffering infliction
But an uplifting depiction can be encrypted from the misery ensued
You can change the shape of history and cut the injury literally in two

A riddle in the form
of geometric shapes
scribbled in a storm
that's taking on my traits
I'm crippled from the thorn
and shaking from the weight
stippled and deformed
from this aura I create

Never have I been stuck inside a cage that made me feel so close to home
Severed from my rambunctious tidal waves that the ocean throws unknown
The water hits the cool air and crystallizes beneath the midnight sky
The breeze is met with some resistance and so the crystals fled right by
And the emotions set upon them will make certain they create
A slideshow of all shapes and sizes not predetermined by fate

At the end of the day
I know why it is I try
because it is true what they say
that beauty is in the eye
of the one who holds the day
and with the time that has gone by
I know I must embrace
the beauty before I die

[Fresh]

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[Truth Iscariot]

This was actually really good.

Loved that rhyme scheme and the flow was nasty. Actually some really good imagery here as well. I liked your small bar bits and how they alternated in rhyme ABAB. You did a nice job here Fresh I was pleasantly surprised.

If you could RTF on Talent

[whitesmoke96]

man this was candy to the ears, the type of piece that you'd want to hear on beat. I did have to read it over a couple times to get a grasp on the concept, it wasn't completely direct but it made me put more thought into listening. Definitely was dope and I think that if it was laid out verbally it'd be easier to comprehend, personally. I couldn't always catch the flow so delivery would probably help a bit. I enjoyed this thoroughly, of course. Looking forward to more like this.

and yo since you were the guy who introduced me to this site you should check out my latest piece "Brainless". I feel I've come along a bit with vocab, rhyme schemes and depth, with the help I've gotten from rb so I have you to thank you for. cheers

[Fresh]

man this was candy to the ears, the type of piece that you'd want to hear on beat. I did have to read it over a couple times to get a grasp on the concept, it wasn't completely direct but it made me put more thought into listening. Definitely was dope and I think that if it was laid out verbally it'd be easier to comprehend, personally. I couldn't always catch the flow so delivery would probably help a bit. I enjoyed this thoroughly, of course. Looking forward to more like this.

and yo since you were the guy who introduced me to this site you should check out my latest piece "Brainless". I feel I've come along a bit with vocab, rhyme schemes and depth, with the help I've gotten from rb so I have you to thank you for. cheers

Thanks for the feed smoke. I'll hit your piece up once I'm at a computer.

[thatdudeB]

This was nice. Better then the other rhyme of yours I just read.

[KnowP]

Luminous affects cause me to ruminate aspects of life without scrupulous intent
I want to be humorous again at a numerous percent without hallucinogens
Everybody is encompassed by a cloud of comforting convictions
Stuck inside the circumference of a shroud, suffering infliction
But an uplifting depiction can be encrypted from the misery ensued
You can change the shape of history and cut the injury literally in two

shooooooo!!! bodied this joint!!!



damn dog. this went hard for real. excellent vocab and imagery. direction took on a form and mind of its own. even ended pretty well. this was extremely well written fam. gotta nom this. good showing.