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    51/50

    Just a short lil story verse. Could expand to a full length with one or two more verses of similar theme.



    Late night, driving with a 5th of Jack, clutching' a steak knife
    It's raining, and I'm having trouble seeing the break lights
    Stomach ache, quite a mood, feel vicious like a great white
    But they might need jaws of life if I can't drive straight, right?
    Try to crack a smile but I'm silently hurt
    Fighting a curse that's inviting the worst
    Wanna just lie in the dirt, violently burst
    Write in reverse, and take my own life with a verse
    Having dreams all this pain might cause me to snap
    Slight pause and a lapse, then I'm wiped off of the map
    Piece in my right,cockin' it back, alright, poppin' the gat
    And take y'all with me, white-washin' you cats, brraaapppp
    But now it catches my eyes heading through traffic
    Surprise: red and blue flashin, realize I'm jettin' too fast and,
    I'm asked to pull over, fuck my luck, jump out the whip
    Duck out and sprint, cop blocks my way so I punch out his lip
    Too drunk its hard runnin', pigs start gunnin', dump out the clips
    I'm fucked now that's it, caught a couple shells in the cap
    Fell flat, went to Hell and back, hear Devils in my ear yellin crap
    Already fading, that's a glass half empty, looks like I'll pass quickly
    My name is a number now, fifty-one slash fifty

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    Re: 51/50

    Thought this was cool. To me it flowed fine. The wording/content was cool. Solid short topical to me.

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    Re: 51/50

    thanks for the feed brother

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    Re: 51/50

    If there's one thing I want to say to you....your multi's are actually kinda refreshing. It's nice to see new writers be a bit creative.

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