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    Brian! Welcome to WalMart
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    upside your head

    sell drugs, pimp slap a broad, I've never done
    but I'm clever son, just ask me to lecture none
    a general, rap phenom, sad stories, you see mom?
    guerilla type on the one two's, wanna free 'nam?
    I slip its gravy, you slippin we upside your head
    you wanna fight the dead, your pride just fled
    while you highlighting reasons, I chalk your dame
    while you try to run shit I'm on the walk of fame
    nice and easy do it, cut you down try the knees
    I'm too insane says who you? do I look siamese
    not here to amaze, kill em softly, bullet graze
    kids stuck in a maze, acting like its just a phase
    but I'm on my historical hype, deplorable type
    seeing all types of ish, inhale from the oracle pipe
    all over the place in it, replacing facts with instinct
    drink to this, robberies so quick more then two fists
    you want to be a winner, I'm a sinner you know that binger
    carry piff that linger, toke and lifes simpler
    unlike any other I learned to be the best simply
    accolades, ecstasy pats on the back the crest gives me
    parents tried to deter, but still I want to hurt you
    my rules be unwritten, the way I break them like curfew
    a rude boy that disses them from afar dropping lingo
    but never to flashy, throwing rocks at windows

    Most of it, like the first 14-16 lines I wrote to the "Onion Head" instrumental. After that I just felt like keystyling in silence.

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    Re: upside your head

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    Re: upside your head

    This isn't too bad Brian, or BBB. I'm unfamiliar with "Onion Head" but I could feel the flow.
    One thing I have to say for you is that you have nice rhymes but the content could do the rhymes more justice by propelling them into the spotlight.

    For example:
    Oracle pipe, deplorable type, historical hype. 4 syllables each, and they have a nice pattern to vocalize. Thing is, they didn't hit hard because you were just laying them down without foundation behind them. Imagine if there was a hard hitting statement or a witty punchline to back those rhymes up -- suddenly you're a good lyricist just because of those qualities.

    I still liked reading this keystyle, cool stuff my dude.

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