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    Time Decides Fate







    Beginning and the end begins with attention
    Ascended from amended gods with retention
    Decisions to construct an influx of dimensions
    Clash and collide without any intended limits
    Firmly planted on a planet as a stranger
    No emotions in oceans, yet magma shows anger
    curves speak of dangers, anticipation mounts
    inhaling failing as precipitations drought
    lay awaken, stout, courageous at its worst
    stages of magnetic bursts flattening the earths
    bad since birth, matched its girth, all that remains
    are philosophies and ideals, bludgeoned life and stains
    mortals or immortals, is life beyond the stars
    a backtracked evolution, remnants are eons of scars
    seen it in Mars, Venus at large, the best alternate route
    galaxy landscaped for centuries, a road worth carving in route
    starving in doubt, thought the world we once knew
    would never hardened its mouth, yet you see what its come to
    slaughtered a house, place of no return with a burned core
    lifetime of cold wars, you’d ponder a race would learn more
    made it to where we’ve never been, no way to measure it
    time decides fate, and we’ve clocked in with severed wrists





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    Soule
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    Re: Time Decides Fate

    Why does it say legendary? Sorry for the freepost but this wasn't voted into legends.

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    Re: Time Decides Fate

    This is the best flow I've seen from you on a piece. Had a few grammatical errors. I didn't like how two lines side by side ended in route. Good imagery, nice rhyme scheme for the most part although it was simplistic at times. I didn't like your use of ponder, seems to me that Think would have fit better in terms of flow and syllables. This was a good drop though. I thought it could have used another once over but besides that It was really solid. Good job, Know.

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    Re: Time Decides Fate

    Thanks Truth

    Anti, I don't know how that happened. I didn't put it there. Lol fate had decided.

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    Soule
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    Re: Time Decides Fate

    I'll feed this tonight before I go to bed / after work. Won't be on art all tomorrow except maybe a couple minutes after I wake up.

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