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    Consume and adapt



    There were fields of trees, cut down like meals for fiends
    butchered by their own kinds alliance with steel in teams
    the feeling of 'free' now a memory past in mother's dreams
    crying waterfalls and tsunamis which will ravage and seize
    everything back, wrath molten and seething down cheeks
    until endless sheets of smoke rise from the criminal beings.



    Consume and adapt, that's the way it's always worked
    survival of the fittest, now an excuse to rule the earth.
    But what's the worth, the top of the food chain is idle,
    It's not about the strength any more...
    it's more about the intelligence to cover your hide well
    Yet we walk the same ground as predators, the editors,
    who stalk prey by sedative to bind til' they're dead at war.
    The spiders web unravels in the wind, etched between
    towers built to cool things down yet only burn with steam.

    People getting hot under the collar for mountains of dollars
    ... as convenience pours in.


    Shooting holes in the sky, for those dying stars to free fall
    if we ever got our wish, there'd be nothing left to reach for
    and evil is evil, good is good but it proves there's no equality
    when man comes bearing arms there's no time for impartiality
    it's a tragedy, and sad to see the people screaming frantically
    as bullets fly like shattered dreams and pry into their sanctuary
    it's actually the facilities, meant to protect and serve everyone
    gunning down the weak like sheep, stuck in fear of ready tongues



    We will combust, we will destroy, everything that ever mattered
    yet not blame ourselves, consuming resources and growing fatter
    there is no latter we were doomed from the start to the finish
    when there's no choice but to 'upgrade' or watch our lives diminish
    Our minds grow too sharp, piercing through the bone and flesh
    we moan and jest at not doing enough, until our holds are threshed.



    Until we are only left with The End
    ... and wonder where it came from?
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    Why'd they riot in the UK just to take some stuff?
    While the houses of parliament still remained untouched.
    - Mikill Pane

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    Re: Consume and adapt

    This was dope as fuck. I liked the concept. But there were a few times when your rhyme scheme seemed off balance to me. The ending was awesome, leave the reader wanting, I dig it. You didn't have any stretched or out of place lines in terms of format. Except for the aforementioned loose rhyme scheme in a stanza or 2 this was a smooth read. I thought you're use of language was cohesive and an attribute to the piece as a whole.

    Good shit Andy, if you could hit Stuck in The Matrix it would be grealt

    AI

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