Who Cares If They Know...

[CLA919]

Who Cares If They Know


Aaliyah’s HOOK

They all debated the most hated and I was jaded
But you were hardly faded and even though you hesitated
Forgiveness you found in a way that was so profound
When I could barely utter a sound….
Their lies were like ties and in them I was bound
I felt like I was drowning, chained to the ocean ground
Outside I was fierce but inside the pain was mounting
And I think that’s when I crowned you king
Even though you insisted, me and you’d be nothing
I knew there was something more
And in your hesitation I found allure
We’d take 2 steps forward, then like 5 back
But I knew eventually we’d make up for where we lack

Both HOOKs

Every friendship falls into a façade, the battle of will
And even though it damaged us, I wanted you still
Besides the thrill, it really felt like something real
Or at least I thought…
You! The one who held the answers to the questions I sought
The one for which I fought, who taught me thru my insanity
That vanity is so much more then what’s inside or what we see
Yet still, in you I learned to confide,
Even though the end of the candle that burned was on my side
I retreated – But not cause I felt defeated, more so cheated
But just when I go to tell you what’s really been going on
Just like that… you were gone

Ride out…

[CLA919]

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[HighEngineChief]

This was pretty good. The flow was on point for the most part, and meshed well with the song. The story was dope, consistent, and clear. I would have liked to see you flesh out the conflict that caused the breakup, it's like watching an action movie without the climatic final showdown. The rhyme scheme was cool, and the ending sort of explained the lack of climax, but the piece still feels incomplete. Dope drop. Needs showdown.

[CLA919]

@HighEngineChief thank you for the feedback... all points noted!!!

[makengknowcentz]

mi reina bella this is on point and here u say u have writers block everything was here the elements and you getting your game up I see mad respects amor

[CLA919]

@makengknowcentz thank you kidd!!!!! LoL