Baby Moms

[AryanAssassin]

You tried but you failed, You thought I wouldn't fight
Only to find out that you can't fight
I'm not a visitor in my son's life, The same way you are no longer my wife
You had a good man who was ya biggest fan, Now all that matters is me and my Lil man
Im Focused on raising him right, while you steady doin shit outta spite
My time wit him is priceless, my time wit you was worthless
You'll never be the parent I am, I'm teaching him yes sir and no ma'am
You tryna be everybodys friend, But I'm a be his dad to the end
While you out doin yo thang, we at home doin our thing
You need to get your priorities in line, And stop tryna ruin what's mine
If u were half the mom you claim to be, Your son wouldn't have tears to see
From his father's eyes weekly
Giving him up for a few days, Damn it Kills me in so many ways
I'm a father first and foremost, Soon enough you'll fade away like a ghost
Me and my son are going places, Like 3 2 1 off to the races
Leaving you and yours behind Like an old figment of our mind
Step up or step out I'm not going away, it’s the dawn of a new day,
My son is my pride and joy, He'll always be daddys little boy
Only time will tell what ur really about, You as a mom raises nothing but doubt
Someday I hope you find your way, And make all this feel like a bad day
But days turn to weeks and weeks turn to years, Failing as a dad is one of my biggest fears
If only you could see what I see, And be the parent i aim to be
Your son might reach out for you, Instead of looking like mom who
I always fill his days wit joy, My fathering is not a ploy
I hope you get to know our son, Cause my advice is about done
Wish I could tell you how to be a mom, But you'll probably end up on facebook.com
looking for likes on pics you post, Acting like he's what means the most
and as he turns another year older, His love for you grows just a little bit colder
There's no one else for you to blame, Being his mom is not a fucking game
Its Time to rise up and do your duty, And stop giving away the booty
Make him be your number 1 man, Give him more hope then lieutenant Dan
This kid means more to me then you'll ever know, I'll reap the rewards of the garden i sow
I'll always do whats best for him while you're in water like a fish that can't swim
Now I have nothing left to say, so I'm a bow my head and pray, that you find your way
its not too late to start new, I know there's a goodness inside of you,
Who wants to be mom of the year, cause losing his mom is our boys fear
Being his dad is what makes me proud, I don't need the praise of a sell out crowd
Ill always stand tall as his dad, being there for him is not just a fad.

[CLA919]

WoW... Deep shit... and I've never seen the subject addressed. I am not going to critique style or anything else other then to say watch your formatting - it appears to be run on lines but in reality, you just need to hit return and start a new one. Style wise I am not going to say shit because the emotion stands out. Perhaps, writing it... then waiting a day or two to critique it may have helped. I think the message is so strong it is something you still might want to consider doing. BUT IDK... up to you!!!

Good Job!

[N.F.M.]

just you and your jit, thats as real as it get, i like how you spit that was magnificent.... i cant stand a fake, or lyin ass snake, but your baby mamas fate is a song i relate to - hate to, have to replay yesterday, hearin you made me wanna find out where she stay - put a gun to her face, put a bitch in her place, from the way you embraced it i so feel your case - and i pray that you keep it as real as today, thats all i can say, now let that shit play...

[AryanAssassin]

Thanks for advice and praisr! I put that together in about 20 mins then added some stuff the next day. Just wanted it out there to see if it was worth pursuing. I'm definitely putting more work into and working on a collab wit my boy who wrote one to his daughter, kinda the same flow! Both straight from the heart. And N.F.M. that's some good shit too!

[AryanAssassin]

Up!

[Spartacus]

Do something new...

[The Great Father]

Baby moms are evil serpents.