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    Intro to Mic rap

    Hey all! Here is my intro to mic rap, hit me with your thoughts! Enjoy!

    whats the word on the street, bstylz
    his raps are more covert than the x files
    rhymes, lyrical masses that go on for miles
    so goony hes undergoing 2 trials
    leave you broken after a battle, nine one one he dials
    got a big house and a car, marble floor tiles
    huge kitchen, might as well be grocery store aisles
    spends one night with these girls, next morning he exiles
    he slithers out the door, like reptiles
    if he were an animal he'd be a snake
    a broken leg he will fake
    just to get a 2 day break
    at home he's gonna start to bake
    I'm not talking about a cake
    taking so many hits, lungs start to ache
    needs a glass of water, more liquid than a lake
    BANG BANG BANG, police at the door knees quake
    bstylz gone thru the back door, police making a stake
    on his way to mexico, the border hes gonna make
    si senor, " I am drake"
    drops a rhyme or 2, border patrol gives him no shake
    impersonating drake might as well say yolo
    drop by lacoste cuz he needs a new polo
    girls coming up to him, they want a photo
    but he already know tho, that these girls gonna blow doe
    and he gonna give it slow, whoa
    coming to mexico was the best decision ever, yo
    down below hes the status quo
    every night a different hoe
    living the life, buried in snow
    every day it's a whole different show
    knowing someday he might have to go
    might have to hang low
    but for now he drinks his bordeaux
    and like a good neighbour, his lawn does he mow
    undercover for months, like a pro
    mexican police even lets him grow
    algorithmic trading, need to restructure that code
    made $38 million in high volume trading, lighten the load
    proprietary program in his mind? what a chode
    parties everynight, oh the champaign and beer flowed
    some say he's playing life on hard mode
    money, drugs, alcohol a simple life in his humble abode
    but not maintainable, ready to implode
    BANG BANG BANG, DEA at the door
    picks up his gat, ready to reload
    no way out of this, it was a good life he rode
    shots being fired straight into a DEA's head
    but Bstylz body isn't taking any lead
    oh he's lasting longer than most, upping his street cred
    told him to get down on the ground, turned around he said
    no way, then ran out back to the shed
    Wishing he took his morning med
    because now all he starts seeing is red
    fading to black, looks like he's dead

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    Re: Intro to Mic rap

    @goonyrapper see the rules son. get those links in.


    i'll leave this open longer since you're new.

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    Re: Intro to Mic rap

    Flow was all over the place.....you need to tighten that up badly...maybe put 2 of your lines on one or something...I see you were kind of telling a story here but still it seemed scattered...your rhyme scheme was a simple as it gets, try to bring some complexity to it...Something to wow people because all of the thing your saying are kind of bland...Keep writing man

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    Re: Intro to Mic rap

    agree with sik here though I have to point out when the images come in it reminds me a bit of kool g rap on roots of al evil.....

    leave you broken after a battle, nine one one he dials
    got a big house and a car, marble floor tiles
    huge kitchen, might as well be grocery store aisles
    spends one night with these girls, next morning he exiles
    he slithers out the door, like reptiles


    if this was clene djust a bit this was kool g all the way. none the less if you were garbage id say that but im not cause all the potential is there and the more you write the more you will tap that potential.

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