Flashbacks

[Illustrious.]

Flashbacks

These thoughts are demonic inside
Polyphonic deprived,
These flash backs are chronically supplied
At the end, always keep my honor and pride
Honestly there’s never been an honest lie
Dramatized, Traumatized
Images so vivid from when I almost died
Been trying to unfollow the ties
All the sorrow taking over by bottles of sky
I always felt I was considered an iconic guy
Super-sonic fly, feeling the bombest high
But demons are creeping and demolish and apply
Every bad thought I ever had now I wanna die
I fight these flashbacks, im about to tell ya why..
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It’s hell swirling inside my head
I wish these flashbacks were lies instead
Demons taking over, my eyes are red
I’m high as fuck, but my mind is dead
Blacked out, visuals sputter in my mind
To relax, I go and sniff another line
It’s butter time, melting in my zone
Off the chain, need help with this dome
Episodes by myself in my home
My life turns to hell when im stoned
It’s triggers some type of frantic thoughts
My grammer is off, sitting waiting till the panic stops
When I smoke, that’s when the manic pops
Satanic cops, I’m burning up like volcanic rocks
These demons can get fucked by gigantic cocks
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Fuck em!
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These flashbacks are taking over my process
Laying off these drugs is what it takes for the progress
My thoughts are wreckless, my thoughts are restless
Ripping off my clothes like an awful necklace
Topple records in almost seconds,
Flashbacks coming, how could I not forget this
Twisted pictures are lifted in my views
Feeling nervous like the beginning of interviews
These flashbacks need to leave this dude’s mind
They seem to take over even when my mood climbs
But I spew rhymes, the new times won’t interfere when this dude grinds
Move dimes, pursue crimes, then continue to do lines
I muster up courage to push, puffing up the bubblegum kush
Mind’s corrupted like bush, I must find a way to change
If nothing changes, nothing changes…I can’t stay the same

-Illustrious.

[Illustrious.]

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[Illustrious.]

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[Emily]

Wow. I feel like I've been shot in the middle of my forehead.
Those words were harsh, and full steam ahead, and confident.
And I could go on, and on, and on.
That was amazing. I, really, really, like this.
I'll probably read it too many times. lol.
There ya go. You can feel like a celebrity for a bit. Till your next drop lol Better make it good.
If this is the bar? lol, Hey, shoot me.

Great read.

I couldn't feed this properly the other night, so I'm back for more.
Illustrious, this is such a great piece. Your flow is really nice.
What gets me all cut up though, are those rhymes. Oh, those rhymes.
You do such a good job of those rhymes.
They trickle down, cutting, bleeding, mixing up my mind as I read.
The idea of a piece about flashbacks, is cool. The content is really interesting.
Your wording rocks. Your vocab is so impressive.
Imagery wise, this is up there.
It has an thick atmosphere about it that stays put right till the end.

You have some beautiful lines, like...

"Honestly there’s never been an honest lie
Dramatized, Traumatized
Images so vivid from when I almost died"

I think some of us can relate to that.
It pulls heart strings in strangers you'll never meet.

I thought this was hysterical and really well said...

"My grammer is off, sitting waiting till the panic stops
When I smoke, that’s when the manic pops
Satanic cops, I’m burning up like volcanic rocks
These demons can get fucked by gigantic cocks"

lol Brilliant.

You have a piece full, and I mean full, of internals. I love your rhyme scheme.
What a top job. This is a great piece. I've nominated it for HOF.

Good luck

[Truth Iscariot]

I really liked this Ill. Some shit i can completely relate to. Some lines are very powerful for me, things i've thought and wrote about before. Like your "I'm high but my brain is dead" line. You used your words well, strong vocabulary but you used the words correctly to have an awesome emotional effect. It flowed very well and never really got choppy. I loved the feeling of disarray felt by the reader, the hopelessness and how you expressed memories being a prison. This was a great read, i thoroughly enjoyed it.

[Illustrious.]

thank you so much for both of ur feeds, appreciate it greatly

[Truth Iscariot]

thank you so much for both of ur feeds, appreciate it greatly

Clear your PMs buddy

[Illustrious.]

Clear your PMs buddy

done

[Illustrious.]

upp

[OG Maestro]

This shit was slept on son...

I'll be in here to deliver a Frost review...

Niggas need justice.

[Illustrious.]

@Professor Frost thanks buddy, ill be looking forward to that, i love ur feeds lol & i will also take a look at one of ur pieces in return. bump this.

[OG Maestro]

@Professor Frost thanks buddy, ill be looking forward to that, i love ur feeds lol & i will also take a look at one of ur pieces in return. bump this.

Better be more than 1 motherfucker. .... .... I'M NOT JOKING LOL

Alright, I'll just say it. This is HOF material. This is the Illustrious that "Trip" didn't fully bring out. This is what I've been waiting to read from you. And, I'm proud to review this in a bit more detail, let's get to it.

Rhythm 9/10 The flow was there, it was fucking deadly. The only way to get a 10 is for the syllables to actually match lololol. Or, if read it perfectly smooth. So, this was good as fuck to get a 9.

Rhymes 8.5/10 The rhyme scheming was there man, it wasn't the best I've ever seen but it was above average. Excellent scheming -- here I'll show you what I enjoyed a lot to see.

These flashbacks need to leave this dude’s mind
They seem to take over even when my mood climbs
But I spew rhymes, the new times won’t interfere when this dude grinds
Move dimes, pursue crimes, then continue to do lines
I muster up courage to push, puffing up the bubblegum kush
Mind’s corrupted like bush, I must find a way to change
If nothing changes, nothing changes…I can’t stay the same

It's flowing and it retains the honesty and realness that makes OGs bob their heads up, down.
The lines in red show where it starts to groove swiftly and makes it fun to even spit outloud.
Then, the parts in purple have some assonance usage with the vowel "u" that made it read with fluidity and smoothness. Nice shit.
Plus, the Bush part was funny, and true lol. Which I felt was necessary since you mentioned doing lines and how Bush use to do the same thing, I believe. Nigga snorted coke.
The end is nothing outstanding but it keeps the light and quick hitting multi work you had set up from the beginning.

Emotion 9/10 I'll just show you the emotion of this that brought it together as more unique than the average "I'm high, recovering" sort of verse.

It’s hell swirling inside my head
I wish these flashbacks were lies instead
Demons taking over, my eyes are red
I’m high as fuck, but my mind is dead
Blacked out, visuals sputter in my mind
To relax, I go and sniff another line

Episodes by myself in my home
My life turns to hell when im stoned
It’s triggers some type of frantic thoughts
My grammer is off, sitting waiting till the panic stops
When I smoke, that’s when the manic pops

Storytelling 8/10 The story holds no real weight as a cinematic, philosopher's travel. But, it does hold a pleasant emotional ride to go on.

Signifying 7.5/10 Good metaphors, nothing of high caliber but it hit.

Creativity 8.5/10 This was creative, especially with the topic of choice. People are often dull with it and get too lazy when they write but you PULLED OUT TECHNICALITY. Nothing spectacular, but again, it hit where it was supposed.

But, here's the thing. You're ahead of some cats up on RB. You're bringing emotion and real sentiments to technicality. That's where a great verse comes from. Combining the emotion with the artistry.

Overall, This was a step above the rest. People won't be able to see that until they start looking up and down the block...and realizing they are farther up the road than some. Thanks for sharing this man. It was a solid, dope read.

This wasn't Godly writing but this was meaningful. Best I've read from you and it crept into the 50s on my rating scale.

Professor Frost stamps this OM with the seventh ProFro Official Review.

50.5/60

[OG Maestro]

@Illustrious.

Feed the children my nigga

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...Velvet-Fortune

[Illustrious.]

@Professor Frost i promise i got u in a little bit buddy been busy all day

[OG Maestro]

@Professor Frost i promise i got u in a little bit buddy been busy all day

Don't sweat over it, I'm chillin.