uppin the pen game

[makengknowcentz]

im working hard to learn to step hopefully im getting closer


want to build a flow that age slow like angela basset,
in this guild i my talents an asset,
where i train to master every facette.
till the world know im sick went from hiv to an aids graduate
lyrical prowness is that of a ravenous antagonist
my flem acts as an agonist, fists of cassious
smashes flesh n bone to ashes
snort em through my nasal passages then shit amyphists.
god is my judge hate's my grudge and fans my jury pannelist.
Noncentz released...
that a disease break out!!!
police barracade 95 south,along with detour routes.
people flock,local cd shop, scientific analyist
samples my albums elastic laminate
finding contaminants, of cancerous cells that flip flop
infected listeners conclude finally rap's truly equals hiphop.
tyrant of the mic who beat the feeble with more bars than ireland
rhyme violance over violins..while labels pulling rappers strings,
the mencing demon the game been beckoning
to me threatening is for the week, thats 7 days of reckoning
with unique speech as syllabus for sentencing
indiginous insidious lines murder bring hell like the sins of men
so i muder them their clones mimics and synonymns.
at first they wont feeling him....who?centz...
either they had none or aint know what the name meant,
no pun, chalk outlines paint still life n pavement.
as sure as there is a sun the body of art ive assembled
resemble a statue of david with lyrics engraved in.
mijo i got more flavor than mio, the heart of a leo
qoute me..these rappers sound gayer than nee-yo,
provoke me...leave your grill looking like a geo's.
what you toking?
as a latino my oath's honor the memory of chris rios,
familia, amigos y mi tios, lo prometeido a mis hijos
swear i'll die for my goya peoples.





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[makengknowcentz]

uppin

[MsPush]

This was better then ur last drop. Ur multis n punches r getting better in my opinion. Keep it up

[makengknowcentz]

ty for still reaing I appreciate

[makengknowcentz]

Uppin

[makengknowcentz]

none else

[ARebeL]

I like your vocabulary in this . I just cant seem to figure out what the song is about ? it seems as you just throwing in a bunch of big words and couldn't jumble then to make sense. overall its a good piece of writing just need to brin your thoughts together as 1

[makengknowcentz]

thi sis just a punchline piece nada mas bro no subject just random punches

[makengknowcentz]

anymo

[SiK]

my flem acts as an agonist, fists of cassious
smashes flesh n bone to ashes
snort em through my nasal passages then shit amyphists.
god is my judge hate's my grudge and fans my jury pannelist.

^^^Most felt

overall a real decent piece...The main issue I have is the flow...Your vocab is there, sometimes too much but it works...I can see you becoming a very well rounded writer...keep it up

[makengknowcentz]

help me build I look to elevate