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    eyes of god.

    topical from another site.

    the irises of a deity...will act as a beautiful chassis.
    bows of an angel, tied in their usual laces.
    its the brutal phases that refutes their placement.
    we dispute their presents... but reuse their faces.
    abused by hypocrites in the truth of essence
    used in increments, the books lose their message..
    then your pupils, will draw the truest sketches.
    through this lesson, a higher power knew ur destine.
    your point of view, his conjoined in you.
    while we enjoy the view,..... the evil voices grew.
    that view, is taboo, no one wants to believe the facts.
    the angel in her eyes, only in your dreams it lasts.
    cause the devil in your sight,... cleans the past.
    when god takes over those senses u need a match.
    a battle vs evil, is what you're leaving to clash with.
    the demons in ur backlit, reason for grief in ur absence..
    scatterbrained,.. as the shadows, creep in your attic.
    I keep following the same path thats deep in the ashes.
    the whole world is in his hands, my eyes is his universe.
    black patch to hide my soul till I realize the truth that hurts.
    if I sign off late, you can still see him in my eyeclops state.
    one eye, imagery of saints, awakened as my eye drops hate.
    permanent time off - safe, n the mirror…”my eye” god waits.
    it aint bitter to face the truth, if what u swallow is an odd taste.
    the shallowest trace,... or a burning wire in your projections.
    you left on the dark-side and returned tired of confessions.
    no religion n ur direction, u learned an acquired the connections.
    lifted by the depths of good, the mirror inspired ur perfections
    the entire world is a book, - fact, in yours you can push back.
    if god is in our eyes, I bet he despises what hes forced to look at..

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    Last edited by Stranger; April 24th, 2014 at 04:00 PM

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    Re: eyes of god.

    This is classic Dia right here. I remember the first time I saw you write like this.
    You were the best underrated writer in SS at the time. No one was paying homage

    Lush rhymes with complexity and fluid transitions. This is what Dia does well.
    Not fat doodoo lines trying to fit a novel in a verse lol.

    Rhythm 9/10 Flowed very good, which is a change from your latest work

    Rhymes 8.5/10 Multis were on point

    Emotion 8/10 I like the challenging tone of this verse

    Storytelling 6/10 This felt like, to me, more of a spoken word rant

    Signifying 8.5/10 Metaphorical content was precise and clean

    if I sign off late, you can still see him in my eyeclops state.
    one eye, imagery of saints, awakened as my eye drops hate.
    Creativity 8/10 The creativity was alright, I wasn't stunned by anything

    Heavy rhyming and literary elements are what make a Dia verse. Not to mention maintaining decent flow throughout it. That's a tough job to pull.

    Professor Frost stamps this OM with the fourth ProFro Official Review.

    48/60

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    Re: eyes of god.

    dia wow i never read your material and im sure im to begin kicking my own ass for that. poetic landscape multis wordplay vivid images damn i love the elements. wow i would love to here this audio reminds a bit of b dolan and sage francis

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    Re: eyes of god.

    Quote Originally Posted by Professor Frost View Post
    This is classic Dia right here. I remember the first time I saw you write like this.
    You were the best underrated writer in SS at the time. No one was paying homage

    Lush rhymes with complexity and fluid transitions. This is what Dia does well.
    Not fat doodoo lines trying to fit a novel in a verse lol.

    Rhythm 9/10 Flowed very good, which is a change from your latest work

    Rhymes 8.5/10 Multis were on point

    Emotion 8/10 I like the challenging tone of this verse

    Storytelling 6/10 This felt like, to me, more of a spoken word rant

    Signifying 8.5/10 Metaphorical content was precise and clean



    Creativity 8/10 The creativity was alright, I wasn't stunned by anything

    Heavy rhyming and literary elements are what make a Dia verse. Not to mention maintaining decent flow throughout it. That's a tough job to pull.

    Professor Frost stamps this OM with the fourth ProFro Official Review.

    48/60
    yea my long style looks shorter on my screen because I got a 27" wide screen, guess I got to start counting the syllables, as much as I despise god and anything to do with that, I shine in such topics.

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    Re: eyes of god.

    this wa sill no doubt

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    Re: eyes of god.

    do you know how to pronounce chassis?

    the rhyming was decent but this was generally not a good piece of writing. listless. no panache.
    Last edited by English; April 26th, 2014 at 04:30 PM

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    Re: eyes of god.

    Damn!! Yall slept on this piece! Dia, i didnt even know you wrote like this man. This was actually beautiful and extremely well written. i love how you took ordinary measures and brought them out from a godly point of view. it was like a war seen from heavens realm. I really enjoyed this dog. From the flow to vocab to content. Wasnt too long but long enough. Props!

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    Re: eyes of god.

    like English said Chassis was misused, but none the less this was ill-na-na. I've read it twice (horrible about leaving feed, sorry) but you did well on this. Had some awkward rhymes in my opinion but the flow made up for it. your inners far exceeded your ending rhymes i feel, which was peculiar lol. nonetheless great writing bro

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    Re: eyes of god.

    thanks, actually some people pronounce chassis differently, I agree there is only one right way to pronounce it tho.

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