Drones

[Truth Iscariot]

Drones



Where was violence birthed? In the wicked & twisted heart of man
Mother Earth bellows a curse to our nature - feeding Hate with fickle hands
We have fought wars throughout the ages instigated by both fools & sages
Egged on by burning rage which is untainted by cries of innocent anguish
Nowadays the politicians game is blatant and their skirmishes aimless
There is no end in sight & long gone are thoughts of wrong and right
More important is Military conquest and the growing want to fight
America reigns down on its “enemies” with the diplomacy of plight
Kids are marked for death due to their location; much to Obama’s delight
How much ‘Terror’ is there left when bombs are bursting over the blameless
How could we as a country become so jaded? It’s no wonder we’re so hated
Globally – We are totally out of control, Stars of The War Crime Honor Roll
We keep our weapons aplenty and our Lies bright and bold…
If you yell a mis-truth loud enough no one will ever know…
You’re lying

All the while Children are dying and for the coroner we keep supplying
More & more bodies – so sloppy, our attempt at 'National Security'
When the winds shift and an ill backlash hits with a righteous fury
We will have no room to complain, play the blame game, or moan
The hell we will have wrought will have been brought about by Drones

[Truth Iscariot]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?475109-Galil
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-mentally-lost

[Emily]

This is a little bit full on isn’t it?
You got your SBS worked out.
Your current affairs worked out.
Your politics worked out.
Your emotions worked out.

You’ve got your impressive words spinning tunes in my ears.
Listen to this…

“How could we as a country become so jaded? It’s no wonder we’re so hated
Globally – We are totally out of control, Stars of The War Crime Honor Roll
We keep our weapons aplenty and our Lies bright and bold…
If you yell a mis-truth loud enough no one will ever know…”

I liked your intro too.
It was dominant and it’s msg wasn’t shy to show its face straight up.

“More important is Military conquest and the growing want to fight
America reigns down on its “enemies” with the diplomacy of plight
Kids are marked for death due to their location; much to Obama’s delight”

How’s that flow doing it for you? Does it for me.

Your imagery is, very visual. Pictures in front of my eyes.

Your atmosphere is dense in this piece.
You sound like you know and are passionate about what you are writing.
For the reader, that confidence is gold, because we can hear it when someone ‘puts it on’ or ‘pretends’.
This comes natural. As does your writing.
Top stuff.

Good read.

[KnowP]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?475109-Galil

need one more man

[Truth Iscariot]

You closed half the threads Mr. Mod man, give me 20 I'll get the other lol

[KnowP]

You closed half the threads Mr. Mod man, give me 20 I'll get the other lol

lmao... i'll give u 21

[makengknowcentz]

some bars are stretched or even seam like your reaching to format to rhyme scheme.

We have fought wars throughout the ages instigated by both fools & sages
Egged on by burning rage which is untainted by cries of innocent anguish
Nowadays the politicians game is blatant and their skirmishes aimless

seams like the scheme was lost and not recouped....with that said ... this was an ill read your concious state is obviously the strongest part. excluding some minor flaws your wording amplified each bar and the picture you painted is a slap of reality. reminds me of some lost children of babylon lyrics which they are one of my top 5 so this is a compliment. there is no perfection but you can come very close with some minor touches. i want to read more.

[Godwasheeeeeeeeeeeeere]

How much ‘Terror’ is there left when bombs are bursting over the blameless
How could we as a country become so jaded? It’s no wonder we’re so hated
Globally – We are totally out of control, Stars of The War Crime Honor Roll
We keep our weapons aplenty and our Lies bright and bold…


thought that was really nice,,good visuals nice structure and it read really well

content was the best part tho