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    Drugs run my life

    Theres always Copious amounts of opiates in my mouth
    Slowly count dollin it out while Im smoking a pound
    Stakin out for job interviews, prolly missed a few
    But I need a business dude before I end up pigeon food
    But all I know is bad drugs and I gotta fess up it isn’t cool
    got offers to drive mac trucks and I guess I’m trippin fool
    With heroin in the tires and Im like damn… fuck
    25-life but then again I really want my fast funds
    Shit I gotta find a way to turn my mutha fuckin gas on
    but I got this passion for blazin a bunch of cash crops
    I’m crossin state lines with a big bag of ecstacy sittin next to me
    Whats a few more charges pounds of sensimi and a pistol case they mess with me
    Booger sugar pusher with kush yes my pockets gonna swell lots
    I don’t like coke see homie I really just like the smell a lot
    Hell is hot but this world is so damn cold
    stick up a dealer take his rocks, knot and his teeth if they flash gold
    Im an asshole, a nihilists wet dream whether laughter or screams
    Human beings must be lackin atoms cuz people don’t matter to me
    Maybe one day I’ll have an epiphany
    Till then I guess drug dealer is simply what I’m meant to be
    Last edited by TangibleThoughts; March 30th, 2014 at 10:24 PM Reason: missed a mistake duh

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    Re: Drugs run my life

    ok for a beginner. and I'm assuming with your broken rhymes you may be from a place that has a heavy accent of some sort. anyway, didn't quote any bars because I didn't see any dope multi layered segments or thought provoking lines. drugs/life is pretty much cliché in the art of writing these days but if done creatively, you can make it a dope piece. Next time just try to be more creative with wordplay and metaphors for typical concepts like this. keep at it though.

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    Re: Drugs run my life

    OMG I LOVED this http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...gs-run-my-life - I read it fine, caught the flow but if it's like me personally I hear it better then I speak it and my challenge is how to relay it out in punctuation cause our flows are complicated. Keep up the good work and check statutes of limitations if you don't wanna live looking over your shoulders (Post 9/11... it's a new day bro LoL)

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    Re: Drugs run my life

    PS... sometimes we're more critical of ourselves then God is... Keep your head up!

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    Re: Drugs run my life

    this was alright. its didnt really paint a picture for me. you should use more metaphors and a some puns. this was just really simple for me.

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