in the same boat

[_Lyrics]

Today I met the devil
He was a determined old fisherman
Barring an uncanny ressemblance
To a honest man, in the same boat.

He told me how hell works
handing me one of his fishing rods
"There's a technique to this
their souls, become mine", he said

"First you must sacrifice"
He pushed a worm on the hook
Dark burgundy trickled off into his words
"Gotta be something they want"

He casted the bait out
And almost immediately he reels in
The catch was huge
But he left it in the water and cut his line.

"Its all in the technique
The first lives to show the others
It will be ok if -they too- bite"
He said smiling, casting out again

Bites follow right after another
As he was reeling in many large fish
He kept throwing them in this blue bin
So many fish, there couldn't be more room

"Last fish, its always the one i began with
It still believes it will be ok"
He ripped the fish up from the water
I couldn't help but stare at the bin.

"The biggest key is making sure
They don't see your the one pulling the strings.."
I opened the giant ice box to see
My dead body next to the heads of my comrades

I shouldn't have made that deal..

[Emily]

_Lyrics,

I don't have time to feed this properly. But I wanted to let you know that I've been 'looking at it' a few days running now.
Just having another little read lol. ... quickly ..... lol

My favourite line:

"The biggest key is making sure
They don't see your the one pulling the strings.."

That applies in life.

also:

"Last fish, its always the one i began with
It still believes it will be ok" ----------------- kind of, you know, creepy. Love it. "It still believes it will be ok" yep, love that.

The last two lines were kick ass.

I liked this. Sorry I couldn't do a proper run down of it. Just thought, in case I don't get around to it, I should at least let it be known,
that, I LIKE THIS.

Have a good day.
lol

[Android]

lol This was good, surreal almost. The extended metaphor was interesting and it had good imagery. Glad to see you still around Bob. Anyways, my favourite lines of the whole piece were;

"Its all in the technique
The first lives to show the others
It will be okay if -they too- bite"

I mean... that part was just clever I thought and I liked how you revisited this part toward the end. Overall this was an interesting read... weird, but worth it. That plot twist at the end had the opposite effect on me though. xD I read it and smiled just because I didn't see it coming. Then I felt like a jerk. And now i'm cool again. Anyways, solid piece, keep writing and I'll keep reading.

[Truth Iscariot]

I really enjoyed this. I'm feeding because I need and a link and this was posted on my birthday lol. I dug the story a lot, the twist was awesome. Had perfect imagery imo, I could see the story very clearly in my mind. This was a very solid piece. It carried a light hearted tone until it's morbid ending. This poked fun at society a little here and there. I dig this piece.

[Karaoshi]

First thing... "an honest". Sorry, had to get that out of my system lol. Man, this piece had a really strobg sense of direction the whole way thru that a lot of pieces tend to lack. Really nice to see someone take one concept, one extended metaphor, and make a whole poem out of that. Loved how you ended it with you in the bucket, that really brought the message home. Some slight grammar issues here and there, but overall one of the most concise pieces I've read on here. Brilliant, should be nommed for HoF.