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@FoulMonoply & @Joe Boston
CHECK
RIDLEY
"Chrome 4 5 singin cuz they still snitchin
Pools in da livin room, swim to the kitchen"
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10 @Foul Monoply
Your lame so what u expect it's been forever ur sex life's been a wreck
If a bitch saying Poly your a thang she got ur ass out there staining her deck
He's just signing over checks thats what I predicted how his marriage be
He'll hand the ring to the Damien faster then Zimmerman boxing for charity
This ain't a contest for popularity but ur trying so hard to fit
Ur sense of dropping a verse ain't Keen an were all laughing at it like his SNL skits
Your impression to bitches is shit you'll never be able to get the Fanny
Cuz ur version of charm is so rediculous ill smack the fuck out of ya for Alex n Ani
I will bring it to ur family if u really wanna get realistic
Shots will have ur whole hood on fire looking like a scene from The Pacific
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when u type words,it makes me feel pity...god damn ur shitty
cuz ur attempts at wordplay make me cringe more than when u said "ridleys"
bitch please,i'm more than a threat,the reason ur mom gets fucked
i put it inside her ass which causes gas n she jumps like hydraulic pumps
im aimin for the title,u couldnt write godly verses bitin the bible
how u gonna act nice at text, when even dudes on netcees dont like u
u have the worst execution at punches,throwin em off balance,lungin
it comes off wackier than dadiator talkin bout alphas butt bein plugged in
you'll always be average joe, you're piss-po', and it shows often
you claim to run shit in conneticut, but how come u aint a boss then?
"Chrome 4 5 singin cuz they still snitchin
Pools in da livin room, swim to the kitchen"
Flow- FM obviously, joes lines are often stretched, not quite as much in this one, but still, u should try to think of ways to use less words and still get your point across to contribute to your flow. Punches- Joe edged this out, only punch FM attempted was the hydraulic and it was still kinda statementish. Joe, the polyurethane punch was very obscure and you should be more personable with your content, meaning there are only a handful of ppl who know wtf that word means, so your wordplay is lost on them, and the keen an wordplay was strait but i think it couldve been worded better. Personals- def. FM, don't think joe even mentioned his name in the verse.. Metaphors- neither of you used metaphors, period. Overall, this was actually a tough choice for me, both couldve came harder, but imo, punchlines are the main aspect of battles, so for that reason.. v/JB..
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Your lame so what u expect it's been forever ur sex life's been a wreck
If a bitch saying Poly your a thang she got ur ass out there staining her deck
It's actually pronounced "pol-ee-yoor-uh-theyn" - Close enough, I'll give it too you tho. I still think this was very ineffective tho, IMO just was bland, and had no harshness too it.
He's just signing over checks thats what I predicted how his marriage be
He'll hand the ring to the Damien faster then Zimmerman boxing for charity
Not sure what you are saying here, TBH? How is this relevant? Not getting the "Damien" part.
This ain't a contest for popularity but ur trying so hard to fit
Ur sense of dropping a verse ain't Keen an were all laughing at it like his SNL skits
Ehhh, SNL concepts are played as hell dude. I can see you'd rather use a simile then a metaphor. Lot's of "Likes" lol
Your impression to bitches is shit you'll never be able to get the Fanny
Cuz ur version of charm is so rediculous ill smack the fuck out of ya for Alex n Ani
Wtf? No way.
I will bring it to ur family if u really wanna get realistic
Shots will have ur whole hood on fire looking like a scene from The Pacific
SMH, lol... Co'mon Joe...
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when u type words,it makes me feel pity...god damn ur shitty
cuz ur attempts at wordplay make me cringe more than when u said "ridleys"
I see where you were going but you failed to execute it. I think you could have tied forced wordplay in a little better using that concept with the personal twist too it. This really isn't much of an insult and lacks the proper wording to even come off harsh.
bitch please,i'm more than a threat,the reason ur mom gets fucked
i put it inside her ass which causes gas n she jumps like hydraulic pumps
Flow was nice, think you could have executed this concept better. IMO "Mom" concepts are older then "Defeat/The feet" concepts, lol. They are pretty dated, bro.
im aimin for the title,u couldnt write godly verses bitin the bible
how u gonna act nice at text, when even dudes on netcees dont like u
Not seeing how this ties together? I get the text/netcees part but struggling to figure out what you were trying to deliver here. IMO, a miss. No real impact, bro.
u have the worst execution at punches,throwin em off balance,lungin
it comes off wackier than dadiator talkin bout alphas butt bein plugged in
Nah - Think you could have went in a different direction. I'm personally tired of seeing TGF puns. Almost EVERYONE at least once a week, has one of these, lol.
you'll always be average joe, you're piss-po', and it shows often
you claim to run shit in conneticut, but how come u aint a boss then?
Nah, this really lacked everything. Wit/Harshness. I think you could have worded it better. And where did you get CT from? He's from Mass. I read it a couple of times and thought at 1st you were using it as a word play like Connect'a cut which would have been slightly forced, but nah, you didn't.
Overall: this battle was fairly close. A HELL OF A LOT OF MISSES here. Nothing really stood out for me, I think Joe's attempts were bairly ok'ish and FM had the concepts but failed to deliver/execute properly. You both need to work on your wording and execution of concepts. I've seen a lot better from both of you and expected more from the both of you considering you guys were beefing! I was hoping this would have been BOTW, but you guys let me down!!! Lol. Anyways, I have to say Joe edges this one, BARELY! IMO.
v/Joe Beanz
Your lame so what u expect it's been forever ur sex life's been a wreck
If a bitch saying Poly your a thang she got ur ass out there staining her deck
Wasn't really feeling, a bit stretched and the wording could use work.. creative but the wording killed it.
He's just signing over checks thats what I predicted how his marriage be
He'll hand the ring to the Damien faster then Zimmerman boxing for charity
this concept is already played I think lol.. didn't seem to hit hard and it kind of felt like a filler to me.
This ain't a contest for popularity but ur trying so hard to fit
Ur sense of dropping a verse ain't Keen an were all laughing at it like his SNL skits
at this point your killing the word "like".. I never really liked people who use "like" as a shortcut. Saying "You do this like this person does this" doesn't appeal to me.
Your impression to bitches is shit you'll never be able to get the Fanny
Cuz ur version of charm is so rediculous ill smack the fuck out of ya for Alex n Ani
This one could have been a good one but the wording wasn't too good man.
I will bring it to ur family if u really wanna get realistic
Shots will have ur whole hood on fire looking like a scene from The Pacific
There's that "like" again lol. The concept was pretty good to me but that "like" is killing it for me.
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when u type words,it makes me feel pity...god damn ur shitty
cuz ur attempts at wordplay make me cringe more than when u said "ridleys"
hmmm, didn't seem to end as a hard hit but okayish
bitch please,i'm more than a threat,the reason ur mom gets fucked
i put it inside her ass which causes gas n she jumps like hydraulic pumps
it seems like your setup lines are awesome and flow well and the first part of your punchlines are good to but the finishers are whats holding you back.. didn't like this one.
im aimin for the title,u couldnt write godly verses bitin the bible
how u gonna act nice at text, when even dudes on netcees dont like u
This would more hard hitting if you would have said something about how wack netcees was first, not bad though.
u have the worst execution at punches,throwin em off balance,lungin
it comes off wackier than dadiator talkin bout alphas butt bein plugged in
meh, he has nothing to do with this battle but I get the comedy in it.
you'll always be average joe, you're piss-po', and it shows often
you claim to run shit in conneticut, but how come u aint a boss then?
compared to the rest of the verse this bar was a filler, didn't like it at all
ok battle here, I was leaning towards Joe at first but seems like Foul just barely edged it with better wording over all.
v/Foulmonoply
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Your lame so what u expect it's been forever ur sex life's been a wreck
If a bitch saying Poly your a thang she got ur ass out there staining her deck
ok good opener
He's just signing over checks thats what I predicted how his marriage be
He'll hand the ring to the Damien faster then Zimmerman boxing for charity
Good
This ain't a contest for popularity but ur trying so hard to fit
Ur sense of dropping a verse ain't Keen an were all laughing at it like his SNL skits
This was decent
Your impression to bitches is shit you'll never be able to get the Fanny
Cuz ur version of charm is so rediculous ill smack the fuck out of ya for Alex n Ani
seems forced
I will bring it to ur family if u really wanna get realistic
Shots will have ur whole hood on fire looking like a scene from The Pacific
No
Vs
when u type words,it makes me feel pity...god damn ur shitty
cuz ur attempts at wordplay make me cringe more than when u said "ridleys"
should've dug deeper for this personal
bitch please,i'm more than a threat,the reason ur mom gets fucked
i put it inside her ass which causes gas n she jumps like hydraulic pumps
No...thats nasty
im aimin for the title,u couldnt write godly verses bitin the bible
how u gonna act nice at text, when even dudes on netcees dont like u
ok,good personal here
u have the worst execution at punches,throwin em off balance,lungin
it comes off wackier than dadiator talkin bout alphas butt bein plugged in
no...
you'll always be average joe, you're piss-po', and it shows often
you claim to run shit in conneticut, but how come u aint a boss then?
no, closer should've def. Been tougher
V/ Joe... For a more complete verse with less misses. I believe both have potential to drop better. Joe had some good concepts just continue being consistent. Foul needs to dwell on some concepts to increase his impact. A few lines just weren't jaw dropping.
V/
Your lame so what u expect it's been forever ur sex life's been a wreck
If a bitch saying Poly your a thang she got ur ass out there staining her deck
ehh this was slightly forced...
He's just signing over checks thats what I predicted how his marriage be
He'll hand the ring to the Damien faster then Zimmerman boxing for charity
I actually got this but wern't feeling..
This ain't a contest for popularity but ur trying so hard to fit
Ur sense of dropping a verse ain't Keen an were all laughing at it like his SNL skits
ehh okay..
Your impression to bitches is shit you'll never be able to get the Fanny
Cuz ur version of charm is so rediculous ill smack the fuck out of ya for Alex n Ani
eh..
I will bring it to ur family if u really wanna get realistic
Shots will have ur whole hood on fire looking like a scene from The Pacific
ehh nah man.. dope film though
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when u type words,it makes me feel pity...god damn ur shitty
cuz ur attempts at wordplay make me cringe more than when u said "ridleys"
nah..
bitch please,i'm more than a threat,the reason ur mom gets fucked
i put it inside her ass which causes gas n she jumps like hydraulic pumps
funny visual but not hard hitting..
im aimin for the title,u couldnt write godly verses bitin the bible
how u gonna act nice at text, when even dudes on netcees dont like u
no..
u have the worst execution at punches,throwin em off balance,lungin
it comes off wackier than dadiator talkin bout alphas butt bein plugged in
no..
you'll always be average joe, you're piss-po', and it shows often
you claim to run shit in conneticut, but how come u aint a boss then?
no..
I wasn't feeling this battle atall tbh. Joe you do SO much better in your VBL & ABL battles!! I don't know what came over you here bro! Foul also didn't really come with much, he had ahilarious visionary bar but that's all. Wasn't hard hitting. I'm going to go with Joe though because I felt he was slightly more consistant.
V/Joe
I make the type of pieces that make Jesus say God damn - Cole
This was a horrible battle joeboston I've seen you drop way better than this, in fact this is probably the worst I've seen from you. FoulMonoply your verse was horrible too you did way better when you battled me and that wasn't great either. So I think joeboston had the poly ur a thang line which was forced and kinda lame but it was iiight. The zimmerman line was alright too but nothing special. The rest was all missing for me. Foul you had nothing honestly, the average joe line is played and you ended it with how come you aint a boss then? which was awful. I got to give this to joeboston for at least having better attempts than foul.
v/joeboston
Your lame so what u expect it's been forever ur sex life's been a wreck
If a bitch saying Poly your a thang she got ur ass out there staining her deck
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nothing
this was weak on both sides.. i didnnt really wanna quote anything. joe had some dry punches that packed zero sting n it was the same thing with foul. imma give joe the win due to better attempts i guess v/joe
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