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    Re: Old school love

    dude, i'm so impressed with your lyrical elevation since you stopped doing topicals. well written lyrics dude, could feel the emotion and shit. loved the rhyme scheme. that fucking word play in the final line was dope as shit dude. i could barely hear your vocals though man, normally i don't need to read your lyrics as i listen but it was hardly audible. the beat downs you out. awesome stuff man keep it up.
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    Shit man I like this a lot. The personal aspect come nicely across this. other than your vocals being low this was a cool remix. Like traj said you elevated to some new heights and starting to find that umph that you are comfortable with. Good shit homie..

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    Re: Old school love

    okay, let start by saying the mix is horrible. the lyrics are okay, they sound like topical. you have to work on your delivery and cadence. there isn't enough emotion in this music, plus the quality of the sound is too subpar too take seriously. work on these things and come back
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    Re: Old school love

    Gotta agree man this beat didn't fit u the flow was off a lot man. Delivery wise didn't have much impact on me. Lyrics were cool but u can hear the spots were u had too many syllables in one bar. The mixing on the vocals ive heard better from u. Maybe try a different beat something u can get more aggressive to.
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    Re: Old school love

    Yeah, the vocals are terrible, and the flow is off. I couldn't finish listening.

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    Re: Old school love

    As soon as your vocals came in, I had to turn it off. Quality was beyond horrible


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    Re: Old school love

    Otay....
    Here we go... This singing is okay. I can't understand it though. I now don't think it's you singing after hearing you rap.

    You should tell the potato manning your mix desk that he needs to back to mixing school.

    I don't know man. The mix makes it very very hard for me to understand what you're saying. But I hear you occasionally saying some sort of words... I think.

    You're flow makes me wonder if you wrote the verse for the beat... Or just wrote what sounds like a very rigidly constructed 32 bar and slammed it into this instrumental.

    If rap is something you wish to become better at... Here are my suggestions.
    Get a better mix.
    Experiment more with flow patterns... Make what you're saying sound interesting... Not just be interesting. Savvy?

    I don't know. Conviction or something.

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    Re: Old school love

    hmm...

    I dont know, i sorta like this. Although i do agree the mixing was a bit off, i was digging the lyrics. the beat was dope. The delivery i thought was a little "airy" lol. I felt it was probably done that way to reflect the sentimental aspect of the specific concept. For a first time (first time i've ever heard you), i thought it was pretty good, bro. keep on.
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    Re: Old school love

    @Slayerr.

    Your lyrics are dope. The beat is hot. You put emotion in.

    Let's push the volume on the vocals up and focus on enunciation.

    Other than that, dig it.

    And on some post script, let's not drop it so sudden. Maybe a fade out?

    Good drop bro.

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    Re: Old school love

    Beat i obviously like its a dope original song..

    main thing that sticks out is your voice, you need to find yours still which all comes in time.

    lyrics arent bad, but i think u shouldve tried a diff flow pattern on this beat.

    overall okay track. keep pushing um out fam
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    ups bro, keep getting after it

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    grrrrr. this was terrrrrrrrable, your accent and the beat selection made this a horrible experience for me bro. sry man

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