Puppet Master

[Northern Beggar]

I've been trying to do audios the last few days and know there's much improvements to be made so any help, comments or critique is more than welcome. I'm heavily influenced by the 90's sound so it maybe a little different from what u hear now-a-day.

[SC]https://soundcloud.com/northern-beggar/puppet-master[/SC]

[Northern Beggar]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...301/index.html
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...599/index.html

[Nahlidge]

I was expecting something a lot weaker than this based on what you said lol. This was nice duke. Seems like you got a grasp on how to perform your shit on the mic. But keep working on it. I hear a few things in your voice that you can push out a little more that would make it work even better. You have a natural emotional sound imo. If you use it fully I think it would be dope. A few times I heard you drag words to make it fit the beat. I think it sounds weird and would change some words around before dragging a word out. Keep practicing your ad libs too. They weren't bad. But they could use some work.

[Dre Mack Music]

you did well on this
quality could be better, sounds a bit muffled
the mix was decent just low quality
u got bars son, a smooth flow to u and a grim sound
the hooks decent but when i hear it u already know i hear gangstas paradise play in my head for a sec. however, u pulled it off well

pretty much my only issue was the quality. at some points sounds like u forced a few lines, work on that.

-You Win-

[Northern Beggar]

@Nahlidge - thanks for the feed, my dude. really appreciate it.
@Dre Mack Music - ha ur not the first person to reference Gangsta Paradise lol, good looks, dawgie. I owe u a feed.

[EBCB]

I didn't like it. but i don't like anything on this board it seems like.... so good job.

[Northern Beggar]

your "innovative" off-beat techniques are superior to our common musical sensibility, we get it.

[EBCB]

yes im sure you do young grasshopper.

[Marshall WeeBerg]

I like this a lot reminds me of some HOV story telling. I'm just reminiscing that time I got high with these girls I filled up while listening to this track.... This is some pimp shit/gangster shit. Scarface the world is mine type feel. Yeah man I really am enjoying this smoking my loud right now joe. You think we could do a collab? I got some shit on lock that you'd dig man.

[Northern Beggar]

@Marshall WeeBerg , much obliged my brutha. Sure, what do u have in mind?

[_Lyrics]

I like this shit
Pretty dope story and the lyrics were strung nicely. Quality wasn't bad, for someone never dropping any audio this was real good.

[Northern Beggar]

Good loox, my dude. Really appreciate the kind words. I owe u a feed.
@English - i know ur more of a text head but ur my dude, and i'd love to hear ur thoughts on this.

[Mimic]

First off. Thanks for being humble.

I like the style of the beat. It's a very Mysterious/Grimy type beat. I'm enjoying the vibe.

I think you underestimated yourself a little. You have a 'raw' type sounding voice that blended in very well with this beat. Your story-telling is on-point. Got me interested in hearing more. Your flow/presence is dope. The hook is just right also and complimented your verses. The main thing about this WHOLE track is your lyrics. The story telling alone was dope. Your mix was fine for me. Maybe it could of been a little bit more polished but that is the same with 99% of members dropping music here. There's always something to work on. For what this track was though, I thought it was pretty dope. I thought I would come in here and hear a complete rookie who never done anything music related before but you surprised me!

Keep up the good work, bud! You'll be a force!

RTF: http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...969/index.html

[Pair-A-Dyce]

I don't like the track or dark-themed music but I'll give you some pointers cause you don't suck.

You'd sound much more dope with some confidence in your voice. Now I know you're like "wtf" but hear me out, you sound like your rappin to rap. Rap like your tellin a joke to your boys, or your pullin a long con on some trick. It isn't just the tone and sound of your voice I'm talking about the wording the way your pronounce words, make me think I need to believe every ounce. Take a verse you wrote and rewrite it with different words but say the same thing, that's when you know you can pass that story on to someone.

[Northern Beggar]

I don't like the track or dark-themed music but I'll give you some pointers cause you don't suck.

You'd sound much more dope with some confidence in your voice. Now I know you're like "wtf" but hear me out, you sound like your rappin to rap. Rap like your tellin a joke to your boys, or your pullin a long con on some trick. It isn't just the tone and sound of your voice I'm talking about the wording the way your pronounce words, make me think I need to believe every ounce. Take a verse you wrote and rewrite it with different words but say the same thing, that's when you know you can pass that story on to someone.

is this EBCB? if it is then this is the kind of feedback you should be giving people - not dismissive shit like "I don't like it". If it isn't then my apology. Whoever u are, i appreciate the critique and definitely understand what u are saying and am in agreement also.