Ignorant/Raw shit

[Potent Poetry]

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Just me joking around..this isn't really what I'd usually rap about..but I'm kind of new to rap, listened to some instrumental and this is what I came up with.

let me know if you think I've overdosed on the multi-syllables towards the end.


flip like parkour more than a partial flawed
im raw to sammo hung ill bring the martial law
glass jaws shatter as a matter of fact
attacking the raps battering the wackest of cats


im a wicked guy saw a midget tried to kick his thigh
missed him by a distance and i hit the victim in his eye
such a vicious mind ripping guys in triple time
jack for your kindle i dont read but that shit is mine

ive been assaulting kids all the way since orphanage
hit them with the sort of bricks that leave them in the morgue and shit
an assortment of gorgeous chicks youngest one is forty six
she's a naughty bitch only been to please.
taken so dick that her clit hangs like wizards sleeve


Also if anyone can give me any help in terms of bars....like is a bar just a sentence/line?? Im a little confused

[Spoken]

you need links sir post em or get closed

[Potent Poetry]

you need links sir post em or get closed

What are links?

[Soule]

Feed three other pieces and post the URL links to those pieces in here.

[Krae]

Very dope, think you were in a fooling-around mood. The multi syllable rhymes were great, really dig those. Sometimes it looked like you lost the number of syllables you were rhyming on, but it's not much of a problem.

Bars are lines. My most recent piece of work, Hell: The Sequel, that's 12 bars.

[Potent Poetry]

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