10lines
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10lines
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"Four letter words or four syllable words won't make you a poet
It will only magnify how shallow you are, and let everybody know it."
-Gil Scott Heron..Infekted Penz.
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.Nightmares.
Check.
And btw, thank you.
"Four letter words or four syllable words won't make you a poet
It will only magnify how shallow you are, and let everybody know it."
-Gil Scott Heron..Infekted Penz.
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.Nightmares.
ur welcome lol check
This retard battling Joe man whats wrong with ur head
Someone need to tell Louch his verses are like the LOX they've been dead
This muthafuka still wets the bed
So changing his sheets only way he gonna have a widespread
U wanna Rump wit me Boi u dont know about me dread
cuz the the only pounds ur holding is the ones you need to shed
When it comes to pussy u know this dude aint settling
So when u see Louch sucking dick for money he'll tell ya "Its all about the Benjamins"
Say ur big in the streets but this dude get frowned upon
Only time Louch seen a ruffrider is when his boysfriends strappin them on
Check it,im a bad mofo,approach cautiously while you can still step with them feet
Any sudden movements,ill kick ya kneecap backwards,grab ya neck snap it in three
Take your neck bones,make a souvenir necklace,wear it even when I sleep
Even after ive gone and done all that^..you still wont be considered neck n neck with me
My fists land quick one hit and your face fucked,gory shit
Not to mention,I always did want to facefuck a foreign bitch
Never been in gymnastics, but I do know how to do some backflips and shit
He couldn't pull a good flip with his verses, even with the word acrobat in it
I said thanks in the check in for 2 reasons, 2 reasons only
1 for giving me my next win and 1 for offering to be my beaten opponent
"Four letter words or four syllable words won't make you a poet
It will only magnify how shallow you are, and let everybody know it."
-Gil Scott Heron..Infekted Penz.
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.Nightmares.
nice drop man will have links soon lets get some votes in
Bar for Bar breakdown:
JoeBoston
This retard battling Joe man whats wrong with ur head
Someone need to tell Louch his verses are like the LOX they've been dead
Concept is there but the execution is mediocre. weak punch
This muthafuka still wets the bed
So changing his sheets only way he gonna have a widespread
you really didn't try hear, did you?! not good
U wanna Rump wit me Boi u dont know about me dread
cuz the the only pounds ur holding is the ones you need to shed
nah, wasn't feelin it
When it comes to pussy u know this dude aint settling
So when u see Louch sucking dick for money he'll tell ya "Its all about the Benjamins"
who's not settling?! you or him? and if you ment him, why is he sucking dick in the next line? the concept is cool, coulda been good but the wording messed it up
Say ur big in the streets but this dude get frowned upon
Only time Louch seen a ruffrider is when his boysfriends strappin them on
again the concept was there but the wording messed it up again
Joe- I'm mad at you man, I know you can do way better but this one was not good at all. Gotta concentrate a bit more on one battle instead of doin six at a time. still it's all luv
LeLouch
Check it,im a bad mofo,approach cautiously while you can still step with them feet
Any sudden movements,ill kick ya kneecap backwards,grab ya neck snap it in three
Take your neck bones,make a souvenir necklace,wear it even when I sleep
Even after ive gone and done all that^..you still wont be considered neck n neck with me
I give you props for using multis right here but all that neck shit is not working for me. a simple one-bar punch for that neck to neck thing would have been enough, this just stretched it out and weakend it
My fists land quick one hit and your face fucked,gory shit
Not to mention,I always did want to facefuck a foreign bitch
second line doesn't hit sounds like a statement to me...shoulda made it more personal
Never been in gymnastics, but I do know how to do some backflips and shit
He couldn't pull a good flip with his verses, even with the word acrobat in it
had an idea here but the execution was weak, not good
I said thanks in the check in for 2 reasons, 2 reasons only
1 for giving me my next win and 1 for offering to be my beaten opponent
weak closer, the wording was wack. sorry
Louch- just like Joe you had a couple concepts but the wording just messed it up.
Overall: I don't see either one taking this one, both came pretty weak eventhough I know for sure that they can do better. seems a bit rushed.
Vote- Split decision. I'm sorry but I can't give neither one the W. It's a draw
This retard battling Joe man whats wrong with ur head
Someone need to tell Louch his verses are like the LOX they've been dead
This muthafuka still wets the bedbad wording, so it hits weak
So changing his sheets only way he gonna have a widespread
U wanna Rump wit me Boi u dont know about me dreadmehh
cuz the the only pounds ur holding is the ones you need to shed
When it comes to pussy u know this dude aint settlingok
So when u see Louch sucking dick for money he'll tell ya "Its all about the Benjamins"
Say ur big in the streets but this dude get frowned uponmehh, weak hit
Only time Louch seen a ruffrider is when his boysfriends strappin them on
vsok
Check it,im a bad mofo,approach cautiously while you can still step with them feet
Any sudden movements,ill kick ya kneecap backwards,grab ya neck snap it in three
Take your neck bones,make a souvenir necklace,wear it even when I sleepdidnt rhyme and weak
Even after ive gone and done all that^..you still wont be considered neck n neck with me
My fists land quick one hit and your face fucked,gory shitok
Not to mention,I always did want to facefuck a foreign bitch
Never been in gymnastics, but I do know how to do some backflips and shitnah weak
He couldn't pull a good flip with his verses, even with the word acrobat in it
I said thanks in the check in for 2 reasons, 2 reasons onlyok concept, kinda weak executioner. it was creative tho
1 for giving me my next win and 1 for offering to be my beaten opponent
v/ j, cause if lelouch rhymed better and executed one or perhaps 2 bars better he'd be taking this, but he dint so thats why i give this one to joeweak
Take a Look at my Life
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...544/index.html
^poll your vote Lelouch...
U wanna Rump wit me Boi u dont know about me dread
cuz the the only pounds ur holding is the ones you need to shed
Say ur big in the streets but this dude get frowned upon
Only time Louch seen a ruffrider is when his boysfriends strappin them on
vs
Take your neck bones,make a souvenir necklace,wear it even when I sleep
Even after ive gone and done all that^..you still wont be considered neck n neck with me
Never been in gymnastics, but I do know how to do some backflips and shit
He couldn't pull a good flip with his verses, even with the word acrobat in it
This was a very close battle. you both had some off wording to really take the sting out of some of ur lines. some of you guys' lines didn't rhyme that well. for punches, there wasn't many in this battle that stood out. but overall i honestly think that Joeboston had the better verse by a hair.
v/JB
uppin if u can VOB poll ur vore for louch 2-1
This was a weak battle tbh... your lines were so simple/elementary. wording was off. and the punches had no cleverness to them. dissappointing battle and seemed like rushed verses. the battler that i thought had the better verse was Joe. Both heads had terrible wording and weak lines. Joe had less weak IMO.
vote=Joe
Ups
Drop links..
"Four letter words or four syllable words won't make you a poet
It will only magnify how shallow you are, and let everybody know it."
-Gil Scott Heron..Infekted Penz.
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.Nightmares.
yo louch make sure u get ur 3 links
Here we go guys
This retard battling Joe man whats wrong with ur head
Someone need to tell Louch his verses are like the LOX they've been dead
lol, i got the concept but your wording was a bit off, so eh
This muthafuka still wets the bed
So changing his sheets only way he gonna have a widespread
this didnt really make sense to me, the wording was off again, no
U wanna Rump wit me Boi u dont know about me dread
cuz the the only pounds ur holding is the ones you need to shed
lol this was kinda funny, good concept, a little played but if your wording was better you couldve flipped it. okay punch
When it comes to pussy u know this dude aint settling
So when u see Louch sucking dick for money he'll tell ya "Its all about the Benjamins"
na this didnt really make much sense man to be honest, i get what ur idea is but your didnt execute it correctly
Say ur big in the streets but this dude get frowned upon
Only time Louch seen a ruffrider is when his boysfriends strappin them on
LOL that was kinda funny, again the wording is way off, but it was a punch so, okay
JOE- Aight man your verse was okay. Not hot but not too shitty ya know. You had 2 punches I would say, the other lines were more filler or statements. You have some decent concepts man, some funny shit, you just have to work on wording it a little better ya dig? but that'll come over time my man, so don't worry. keep it up
vs.
Check it,im a bad mofo,approach cautiously while you can still step with them feet
Any sudden movements,ill kick ya kneecap backwards,grab ya neck snap it in three
this was just a dumb statement, no real punch in here at all or concept you can work with. so na
Take your neck bones,make a souvenir necklace,wear it even when I sleep
Even after ive gone and done all that^..you still wont be considered neck n neck with me
i kinda get the concept, but this was strecthed. try to work on wording man. i say no punch
My fists land quick one hit and your face fucked,gory shit
Not to mention,I always did want to facefuck a foreign bitch
lol this was kinda funny, you worded it a little off but i would maybe give you a half punch
Never been in gymnastics, but I do know how to do some backflips and shit
He couldn't pull a good flip with his verses, even with the word acrobat in it
i see the concept but you didnt word it right so i wouldnt consider it a hit, good attempt tho
I said thanks in the check in for 2 reasons, 2 reasons only
1 for giving me my next win and 1 for offering to be my beaten opponent
this was self glory, nothing here that really hit hard. so na
L- aight your shit wasnt to hot... i saw some okay concepts, maybe like one but overall you gotta work on being creative man and work on the concepts. also, the one punch you could of had was worded wrong, so it was a lame attempt.. no worries th, keep writing and youll get it
OVERALL - i felt like joe got this . he actually came with a couple of punches, some decent concepts.. i just think he has to work on his wording a bit. but overall not to bad. L you were eh, i felt like you have to come more creative and work on wording your shit. come up with some better concepts. ok battle
v/ - JOE
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