Wordplay/metaphors/punchlines

[Shoemaker]

I don't expect a full break down, I just wanna see which lines u like.
I was fuckin with some new punches n shit
Feed will be returned

I'm a LITTLE EVIL like 666 midgets.
Riggedy nitwit, fidget like quagmire in angelina's twit pic.
Ashin blunts cuz I'm rash n' blunt.
Gotta Pack of runts Stashed n' front.
Of fags n punks iv Stacked n' trunks.
If u started at the top then the glass is half empty now.
But starting at the bottom lookin' at that glass is simply wow.
Rap's entity child talented, wild n' relevant with infinity style.
This wordsearch is a crossword for your ear.
Toss me a beer, I'm santa clause with the fear.
Randy moss, I'll get your career lost in a year.
I'm dealin with nothin but lyrical killers who nuckle up.
So toughen up, or get split like the middle of a dress shirt..
Yeah homie get buttoned up.
Chuggin' 44 4lokos so I'll be morgued by half of that.
Thats 22 but take six cuz 16 lines in this fuckin rap.


Links in 24

[<SamPle>]

I'm a LITTLE EVIL like 666 midgets...
i think your meant to say 'little devil'

Riggedy nitwit, fidget like quagmire in angelina's twit pic.
alright, flowd well too

So toughen up, or get split like the middle of a dress shirt..
Yeah homie get buttoned up.
Okay. it think it would better if u said " or get split like a sluts legs, or the middle of dress shirt button up".

Randy moss, I'll get your career lost in a year.
good

[6feetdeep]

Meh, nothing special but its ok. SOme lines were mediocre and some not very strong at all, maybe just spend some more time writing it, seems a little rushed in places where you could of used better vocabulary and also helped it flow.
peace