Cry (4-0) vs Knux (4-1) Knux Wins

[The Archetype]

LLL Season 15, Week 6

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Check in due Thursday 11.59pm PST.
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Verses due by Friday 11.59pm PST.
- 2 hour grace period, if used -3 votes
-Max. Extension = 24 hours, to be granted by your opponent.
Voting Ends Sunday 11.59pm EST.

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[Cody Nash]

14-16 sound good?

[Knux]

yessir

[Cody Nash]

extension?

[Knux]

16. I'd rather not but if u need it yeah

[Cody Nash]

smh..



300+ & I'm wastin' him... my experiences are enough to slay the kid
one cry for help & people'll notice you.. look like a bitch that just got raped n' hit
edgin' toward poverty sayin' he's ill, but he obviously can't say it's a thrill
only savings you got is daylight... that ONE extra hour to be late on your bills
this new york native's the biggest pussy, & that lack of wit is appauling
ur 'abilities' are such a riot,
they relocated to ur house & said FUCK occupy wall street
this cunt's burnt after arguements in Chat, yea the faggot aint worth one word
there's more wit in there on Legends members than an entire fuckin' Knux verse
thinkin' you come correct, but honestly? I read a Knux battle & MY GOD ur weak
ur the Ink member wit' 3 accomplishments created by the leader of MONSTERS INK
you been on that big talk, now it's time Cry's cookin' the flames
peeps catchin' lip from Knux for weeks... now here's MY right hook to the face
I aint seein dope verses, just votes that make u seem enlightening
the actual verses are like that awful sig... we can barely read the writing
I really disagree with handicaps.. but at 4-1?? that don't go for you
sooo if you need it, you can try the 5-0... we ALL know Token'll vote for you



16.

[Knux]

Aight Then...

On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
Embed knives in your gut then rock this dike till he drops from strikes
Leavin doctors pullin enough blades out of him to resemble a swiss pocket knife
Watch your mouth cuz I’ll leave u floored when I’m buckin, gored like its nuttin
Talk slick I’ll show up at ur funeral n put 12 holes in ya box like an order of munchkins
Fat fuck wit no bitches can’t find the G or the spot, your seein no twat
So if you ever heard Cry pulled a chick...It’s probably just a marshmallow peep from the box
Been ghost lately, ya style show’s you been tryin but, u known to grind guys butts
Seen ya pics, Its no wonder u feelin like an Outsider…..
…………u been shacked up wit dude for the last 5 months
Fatass can’t hang, kids your size get abused bro…dude eats enough for five dudes so..
If you ever see him take a stand on lines…… its more than likely that the drive thru’s closed
*Sigh*, this fuck stinks…pulled me ina battle? He’ll cry as his luck sinks
Dazed from the 1-2, n follow suit wit a haymaker
……that’ll have him going wita 3 piece like a tie n cuff links

16.

[Slowhands]

thatkidcry

300+ & I'm wastin' him... my experiences are enough to slay the kid
one cry for help & people'll notice you.. look like a bitch that just got raped n' hit
- weak for opener
edgin' toward poverty sayin' he's ill, but he obviously can't say it's a thrill
only savings you got is daylight... that ONE extra hour to be late on your bills
- meh ok ish
this new york native's the biggest pussy, & that lack of wit is appauling
ur 'abilities' are such a riot,
they relocated to ur house & said FUCK occupy wall street
- nah
this cunt's burnt after arguements in Chat, yea the faggot aint worth one word
there's more wit in there on Legends members than an entire fuckin' Knux verse
- meh
thinkin' you come correct, but honestly? I read a Knux battle & MY GOD ur weak
ur the Ink member wit' 3 accomplishments created by the leader of MONSTERS INK
- ok
you been on that big talk, now it's time Cry's cookin' the flames
peeps catchin' lip from Knux for weeks... now here's MY right hook to the face
- ok
I aint seein dope verses, just votes that make u seem enlightening
the actual verses are like that awful sig... we can barely read the writing
- ok ish
I really disagree with handicaps.. but at 4-1?? that don't go for you
sooo if you need it, you can try the 5-0... we ALL know Token'll vote for you
- lol

overall - not bad, but not great. wording took away a lot of the pleasure in reading it.



knux

On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
- nice w.p w/ namefip
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
- i see where you were going, wording kinda ehhhh
Embed knives in your gut then rock this dike till he drops from strikes
Leavin doctors pullin enough blades out of him to resemble a swiss pocket knife
- ok
Watch your mouth cuz I’ll leave u floored when I’m buckin, gored like its nuttin
Talk slick I’ll show up at ur funeral n put 12 holes in ya box like an order of munchkins
- meh
Fat fuck wit no bitches can’t find the G or the spot, your seein no twat
So if you ever heard Cry pulled a chick...It’s probably just a marshmallow peep from the box
- lol
Been ghost lately, ya style show’s you been tryin but, u known to grind guys butts
Seen ya pics, Its no wonder u feelin like an Outsider…..
…………u been shacked up wit dude for the last 5 months
- meh
Fatass can’t hang, kids your size get abused bro…dude eats enough for five dudes so..
If you ever see him take a stand on lines…… its more than likely that the drive thru’s closed
- ok, fat concept getting worn out
*Sigh*, this fuck stinks…pulled me ina battle? He’ll cry as his luck sinks
Dazed from the 1-2, n follow suit wit a haymaker
……that’ll have him going wita 3 piece like a tie n cuff links
- meh

overall - ok verse, you kind hit on the "weight" concept a bit much, still you have some funny lines and the chuckle factor



vote - i got Knux taking this with overall better lines, easy decision imo.

[C.Wrighter]

300+ & I'm wastin' him... my experiences are enough to slay the kid
one cry for help & people'll notice you.. look like a bitch that just got raped n' hit
meh
edgin' toward poverty sayin' he's ill, but he obviously can't say it's a thrill
only savings you got is daylight... that ONE extra hour to be late on your bills
cool
this new york native's the biggest pussy, & that lack of wit is appauling
ur 'abilities' are such a riot,
they relocated to ur house & said FUCK occupy wall street
meh
this cunt's burnt after arguements in Chat, yea the faggot aint worth one word
there's more wit in there on Legends members than an entire fuckin' Knux verse
iight
thinkin' you come correct, but honestly? I read a Knux battle & MY GOD ur weak
ur the Ink member wit' 3 accomplishments created by the leader of MONSTERS INK
iight
you been on that big talk, now it's time Cry's cookin' the flames
peeps catchin' lip from Knux for weeks... now here's MY right hook to the face
meh
I aint seein dope verses, just votes that make u seem enlightening
the actual verses are like that awful sig... we can barely read the writing
lol
I really disagree with handicaps.. but at 4-1?? that don't go for you
sooo if you need it, you can try the 5-0... we ALL know Token'll vote for you
lol


v.


On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
iight
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
lol
Embed knives in your gut then rock this dike till he drops from strikes
Leavin doctors pullin enough blades out of him to resemble a swiss pocket knife
cool
Watch your mouth cuz I’ll leave u floored when I’m buckin, gored like its nuttin
Talk slick I’ll show up at ur funeral n put 12 holes in ya box like an order of munchkins
lol
Fat fuck wit no bitches can’t find the G or the spot, your seein no twat
So if you ever heard Cry pulled a chick...It’s probably just a marshmallow peep from the box
lol
Been ghost lately, ya style show’s you been tryin but, u known to grind guys butts
Seen ya pics, Its no wonder u feelin like an Outsider…..
…………u been shacked up wit dude for the last 5 months
iight
Fatass can’t hang, kids your size get abused bro…dude eats enough for five dudes so..
If you ever see him take a stand on lines…… its more than likely that the drive thru’s closed
alright
*Sigh*, this fuck stinks…pulled me ina battle? He’ll cry as his luck sinks
Dazed from the 1-2, n follow suit wit a haymaker
……that’ll have him going wita 3 piece like a tie n cuff links
iight


v/ knux

better verse overall.

[Lethargic]

Cry didn't really have any quotables IMO. There were definitely a few concepts that could've been quotables, but they way they were worded killed their quality.

vs

On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
Embed knives in your gut then rock this dike till he drops from strikes
Leavin doctors pullin enough blades out of him to resemble a swiss pocket knife
Fat fuck wit no bitches can’t find the G or the spot, your seein no twat
So if you ever heard Cry pulled a chick...It’s probably just a marshmallow peep from the box


Overall Knux just had a more solid verse that came with a LOT more haymakers. Pretty lop-sided battle this go round.

[King]

edgin' toward poverty sayin' he's ill, but he obviously can't say it's a thrill
only savings you got is daylight... that ONE extra hour to be late on your bills
thinkin' you come correct, but honestly? I read a Knux battle & MY GOD ur weak
ur the Ink member wit' 3 accomplishments created by the leader of MONSTERS INK

vs

On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
Watch your mouth cuz I’ll leave u floored when I’m buckin, gored like its nuttin
Talk slick I’ll show up at ur funeral n put 12 holes in ya box like an order of munchkins

cry ur catching lip punch had crazy potential, but it just felt like it was delivered right to me. the accomplishments personal was dope though. Knux, cool verse but u go too heavy on simile's imo. the two i quoted hit well, but could have been waaay harder if u went a different route than a simile. good shit to both though.

vote Knux

[Mafioso]

300+ & I'm wastin' him... my experiences are enough to slay the kid
one cry for help & people'll notice you.. look like a bitch that just got raped n' hit
I see the concept but didnt rlly like the delivery didnt sting to me
edgin' toward poverty sayin' he's ill, but he obviously can't say it's a thrill
only savings you got is daylight... that ONE extra hour to be late on your bills
lmao dont like the opener tho
this new york native's the biggest pussy, & that lack of wit is appauling
ur 'abilities' are such a riot,
they relocated to ur house & said FUCK occupy wall street
no
this cunt's burnt after arguements in Chat, yea the faggot aint worth one word
there's more wit in there on Legends members than an entire fuckin' Knux verse
no
thinkin' you come correct, but honestly? I read a Knux battle & MY GOD ur weak
ur the Ink member wit' 3 accomplishments created by the leader of MONSTERS INK
cry the rhyme scheme and delivery is weak
you been on that big talk, now it's time Cry's cookin' the flames
peeps catchin' lip from Knux for weeks... now here's MY right hook to the face
I aint seein dope verses, just votes that make u seem enlightening
the actual verses are like that awful sig... we can barely read the writing
I really disagree with handicaps.. but at 4-1?? that don't go for you
sooo if you need it, you can try the 5-0... we ALL know Token'll vote for you
idk if im rusty ass hell and should stop votin lol or cry ya verse was extra weak not even close to they cry a cpl yrs ago



...vs

On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
meh for a opener
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
lol
Embed knives in your gut then rock this dike till he drops from strikes
Leavin doctors pullin enough blades out of him to resemble a swiss pocket knife
na
Watch your mouth cuz I’ll leave u floored when I’m buckin, gored like its nuttin
Talk slick I’ll show up at ur funeral n put 12 holes in ya box like an order of munchkins
raw i felt like that stung good
Fat fuck wit no bitches can’t find the G or the spot, your seein no twat
So if you ever heard Cry pulled a chick...It’s probably just a marshmallow peep from the box
meh
Been ghost lately, ya style show’s you been tryin but, u known to grind guys butts
Seen ya pics, Its no wonder u feelin like an Outsider…..
…………u been shacked up wit dude for the last 5 months
meh couldve been delivered a lil better
Fatass can’t hang, kids your size get abused bro…dude eats enough for five dudes so..
If you ever see him take a stand on lines…… its more than likely that the drive thru’s closed
lmao honestly so and closed dont rlly rhyme to me but that was funny



lol its been a min since I voted but i felt like both couldve done better...overll I felt like knux had a smoother verses and his verse stung more so v/knux
*Sigh*, this fuck stinks…pulled me ina battle? He’ll cry as his luck sinks
Dazed from the 1-2, n follow suit wit a haymaker
……that’ll have him going wita 3 piece like a tie n cuff links

[Rupture]

this new york native's the biggest pussy, & that lack of wit is appauling
ur 'abilities' are such a riot,
they relocated to ur house & said FUCK occupy wall street

Cry your concepts are pretty good man but your wording is horrible, shorten up the bars, uses more phrases instead of lots of words. well known urban dialect reads better than simple word after simple word to explain the punchline, get me?

vs.

On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
Embed knives in your gut then rock this dike till he drops from strikes
Leavin doctors pullin enough blades out of him to resemble a swiss pocket knife
Fatass can’t hang, kids your size get abused bro…dude eats enough for five dudes so..
If you ever see him take a stand on lines…… its more than likely that the drive thru’s closed

Not a bad verse, still need to watch them played concepts though i.e follow suit.

v/ Knux, pretty comfortably but if Cry switches up his wording i'd have him winning this battle next time

[Essen]

Cry



300+ & I'm wastin' him... my experiences are enough to slay the kid
one cry for help & people'll notice you.. look like a bitch that just got raped n' hit
^^Wording hurt the punch, this could have been pretty cool. A cry for help and people will notice you.. does not translate into 'taking notice that you have skill'. Therefore, there really isn't a misdirection here, the punch is made that way, but the wording around it doesn't support it.
edgin' toward poverty sayin' he's ill, but he obviously can't say it's a thrill
only savings you got is daylight... that ONE extra hour to be late on your bills
^^I don't see why the 'one' is all capitalized, but this was ok. Wording was cool, kind of a punch followed by a continuation of a punch, but it worked here. Decent jab.
this new york native's the biggest pussy, & that lack of wit is appauling
ur 'abilities' are such a riot,
they relocated to ur house & said FUCK occupy wall street
^^Nah, too wordy, took too long to get the punch. I understand what you were going for, but 'such a riot' is a bit forced when talking about his abilities, at least for me it is.
this cunt's burnt after arguements in Chat, yea the faggot aint worth one word
there's more wit in there on Legends members than an entire fuckin' Knux verse
^^Wit on legend's members? A bit forced there, the concept was ok, but for more of a straightforward punch, the wording hurt it.
thinkin' you come correct, but honestly? I read a Knux battle & MY GOD ur weak
ur the Ink member wit' 3 accomplishments created by the leader of MONSTERS INK
^^This was solid. Cool swag while putting him down with a personal, assuming this is true, this hit.
you been on that big talk, now it's time Cry's cookin' the flames
peeps catchin' lip from Knux for weeks... now here's MY right hook to the face
^^Wording hurt this concept, this could have been real cool. Lip from Knux for weeks/right hook to his lip doesn't really add up, the from Knuz for weeks is a bit awk. worded. They're not exactly opposites or completely related to each other so the misdirection missed a bit.
I aint seein dope verses, just votes that make u seem enlightening
the actual verses are like that awful sig... we can barely read the writing
^^Cool swag, this hit, simple but good wording.
I really disagree with handicaps.. but at 4-1?? that don't go for you
sooo if you need it, you can try the 5-0... we ALL know Token'll vote for you
^^More of a statement, but this was ok.


Knux

On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
^^I wish you could've somehow used his fullname, but nevertheless, this hit. Good wording, cool wordplay, cool punch.
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
^^A bit too stretched for a simple misdirection, the second line needed to be shortened a bit.
Embed knives in your gut then rock this dike till he drops from strikes
Leavin doctors pullin enough blades out of him to resemble a swiss pocket knife
^^A nice change of pace here going a little grimy rather than humor. This was cool, you didn't need the 'out of him', but this was still cool
Watch your mouth cuz I’ll leave u floored when I’m buckin, gored like its nuttin
Talk slick I’ll show up at ur funeral n put 12 holes in ya box like an order of munchkins
^^Not bad, again, a bit wordy in the second line but a decent flip on a gun/box concept
Fat fuck wit no bitches can’t find the G or the spot, your seein no twat
So if you ever heard Cry pulled a chick...It’s probably just a marshmallow peep from the box
^^Heh I chuckled. Not bad for a misdirection.
Been ghost lately, ya style show’s you been tryin but, u known to grind guys butts
Seen ya pics, Its no wonder u feelin like an Outsider…..
…………u been shacked up wit dude for the last 5 months
^^Eh I see the concept, but you're dissing Outsider more than Cry here, but you're really not directing your diss to either of them emphatically. A bit stretched as well
Fatass can’t hang, kids your size get abused bro…dude eats enough for five dudes so..
If you ever see him take a stand on lines…… its more than likely that the drive thru’s closed
^^Take a stand has been done a bunch, this was an ok flip on it.
*Sigh*, this fuck stinks…pulled me ina battle? He’ll cry as his luck sinks
Dazed from the 1-2, n follow suit wit a haymaker
……that’ll have him going wita 3 piece like a tie n cuff links
^^Again, just took too long to get to the punch, a bit too wordy for it to have much sting.


It's close, Knux fell off in the end a bit, but I still give it to Knux. Good read though, pz

[Token]

this new york native's the biggest pussy, & that lack of wit is appauling
ur 'abilities' are such a riot,
they relocated to ur house & said FUCK occupy wall street
this cunt's burnt after arguements in Chat, yea the faggot aint worth one word
there's more wit in there on Legends members than an entire fuckin' Knux verse
thinkin' you come correct, but honestly? I read a Knux battle & MY GOD ur weak
ur the Ink member wit' 3 accomplishments created by the leader of MONSTERS INK

vs.


On a hunt for the throne and with a real verse you’ll get killed first
So at the end of this battle you’ll see Kid come out dead like a still birth
Dude’s the size of a truck.. get some exercise before diabetes blinds this fuck
So when you see my punches put this guy out on his feet…… it’ll be the first time in months
Watch your mouth cuz I’ll leave u floored when I’m buckin, gored like its nuttin
Talk slick I’ll show up at ur funeral n put 12 holes in ya box like an order of munchkins
Fatass can’t hang, kids your size get abused bro…dude eats enough for five dudes so..
If you ever see him take a stand on lines…… its more than likely that the drive thru’s closed

Cry came cool, I like the personal approach you take with your verses dude... it's fresh to today's style which is usually a bunch of flipped cliches, so nice to read. Knux, you took a less personal approach, but your wit skated you by. Wording seems to be gettin' better, but I would work on a bit more straight on punches w/ personal effect, somethin u can learn from cry n most of the older vets. Mix the styles and it'll be dope.

I got Knux on consistency though.