Jeffry (1-2) vs. JoeBoston (1-2) jeffry wins

[Token]

LLL Season 15, Week 5

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[#PrimeTime]

chek. go 16

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...ml#post8303535

[Joe Boston]

ahhhhhhhh shit check

[Joe Boston]

jeff coming out swingin?better off letting rickie weeks take a crack at it
if i ever had ur record id hide for years like anne frank did in the attic
reppin the sewers of rb aint that were the rats hang
ever since arch stopped holding u up youve been suffering from severe back pain
see im dicking ur girl,bitch dont wanna get rid of me
when it comes to jeff getting pussy been like fl lately extreme lack of activity
called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time
you dont wanna war with joe im sending shots to ur dome
have jeff making the same decision obama made sending the fukin troops home
so many shots down ur bitches throat she aint even consuming liquor
so when we say his girl giving memory u know she aint matching pictures
how the fuk u expect to get in my zone,offense aint even moving
the way joe blowing out tennesee youd think they got beaten twice by houston
making my mark in rb peep the lacerations on backs
the way ill whip jeff no snm while this fag still bumpin rihanna tracks

[#PrimeTime]

we know he a sucker for a career break he'll do anythin cuz he blows
if i wanted to be as fake as you, id turn on the white rapper tv show
so many rappers here from boston: nahlidge, per$onal..then u right?
u dead last, they in their prime, urs was dead & fallen since u joined the site
Kids lyin through their teeth, they musta forgot bout flossin'
cuz if kids wanna be a 31-year old no body, they'd be the next joeboston
but honestly ill neva take this seriously, he a confused fellow
i never seen someone act outa place since C.Wrighter thought he was ghetto
Had zero parental guidance, dad left, ma had guys have their way with her
he was asked who influence him, he didn't answer, he was the only 1 in the family picture
your worlds expandin more ways than one, hater
niggas so fat had a heart attack before openin the mail to get the newspaper
im literal, convential, u livin in that blue state, but i aint political
but honestly this joe biden is a jackass, and the symbol for the liberals
he said hed be a great dad, but he sucks n blows almost every man
him a great parent? nah, he'll end up like the dad of lindsey lohan.

[#PrimeTime]

vote niggas

[Slowhands]

joe boston

jeff coming out swingin?better off letting rickie weeks take a crack at it
if i ever had ur record id hide for years like anne frank did in the attic
- no relevance, just two seperate statements
reppin the sewers of rb aint that were the rats hang
ever since arch stopped holding u up youve been suffering from severe back pain
- ok kinda
see im dicking ur girl,bitch dont wanna get rid of me
when it comes to jeff getting pussy been like fl lately extreme lack of activity
- nah
called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time
- 1st line made no sense, weak
you dont wanna war with joe im sending shots to ur dome
have jeff making the same decision obama made sending the fukin troops home
- what? doesn't make sense
so many shots down ur bitches throat she aint even consuming liquor
so when we say his girl giving memory u know she aint matching pictures
- nah
how the fuk u expect to get in my zone,offense aint even moving
the way joe blowing out tennesee youd think they got beaten twice by houston
- ok
making my mark in rb peep the lacerations on backs
the way ill whip jeff no snm while this fag still bumpin rihanna tracks
- meh

overall - you were all over the place, just not effective or hard hitting. some of your punches didn't make sense AT ALL and it seems like you tried connecting irrelevant shit to your opponent, which didn't work. keep it simple and think of content to put in your punch that has relation to your opponent


jeffry

we know he a sucker for a career break he'll do anythin cuz he blows
if i wanted to be as fake as you, id turn on the white rapper tv show
- meh
so many rappers here from boston: nahlidge, per$onal..then u right?
u dead last, they in their prime, urs was dead & fallen since u joined the site
- nah
Kids lyin through their teeth, they musta forgot bout flossin'
cuz if kids wanna be a 31-year old no body, they'd be the next joeboston
- weak + statement ish
but honestly ill neva take this seriously, he a confused fellow
i never seen someone act outa place since C.Wrighter thought he was ghetto
- meh
Had zero parental guidance, dad left, ma had guys have their way with her
he was asked who influence him, he didn't answer, he was the only 1 in the family picture
- what?
your worlds expandin more ways than one, hater
niggas so fat had a heart attack before openin the mail to get the newspaper
- corny funny, far from dope
im literal, convential, u livin in that blue state, but i aint political
but honestly this joe biden is a jackass, and the symbol for the liberals
- could of made ALOT more effective, weak
he said hed be a great dad, but he sucks n blows almost every man
him a great parent? nah, he'll end up like the dad of lindsey lohan.
- nah

overall - you had somewhat better punches, but they are still simplistic with no original content, some times even a played concept can be decent with an original flip on it, you had potential there so next time take longer to construct your punches, then read them again and keep changing it and explore different word placement. it'll help



vote - i got jeffry taking this with an overall better verse, i'm hoping both opponents elevate and start working on coming up with more original concepts and staying away from corny-type lines.

[Fatal.]

jeff coming out swingin?better off letting rickie weeks take a crack at it
if i ever had ur record id hide for years like anne frank did in the attic
ehh alright opener
reppin the sewers of rb aint that were the rats hang
ever since arch stopped holding u up youve been suffering from severe back pain
liked the flow, but it was ok
see im dicking ur girl,bitch dont wanna get rid of me
when it comes to jeff getting pussy been like fl lately extreme lack of activity
cool
called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time
haha pretty good
you dont wanna war with joe im sending shots to ur dome
have jeff making the same decision obama made sending the fukin troops home
mehh
so many shots down ur bitches throat she aint even consuming liquor
so when we say his girl giving memory u know she aint matching pictures
aright
how the fuk u expect to get in my zone,offense aint even moving
the way joe blowing out tennesee youd think they got beaten twice by houston
ehh
making my mark in rb peep the lacerations on backs
the way ill whip jeff no snm while this fag still bumpin rihanna tracks
decent closer

vs

we know he a sucker for a career break he'll do anythin cuz he blows
if i wanted to be as fake as you, id turn on the white rapper tv show
alright opener
so many rappers here from boston: nahlidge, per$onal..then u right?
u dead last, they in their prime, urs was dead & fallen since u joined the site
decent
Kids lyin through their teeth, they musta forgot bout flossin'
cuz if kids wanna be a 31-year old no body, they'd be the next joeboston
pretty good
but honestly ill neva take this seriously, he a confused fellow
i never seen someone act outa place since C.Wrighter thought he was ghetto
mehhh
Had zero parental guidance, dad left, ma had guys have their way with her
he was asked who influence him, he didn't answer, he was the only 1 in the family picture
ok
your worlds expandin more ways than one, hater
niggas so fat had a heart attack before openin the mail to get the newspaper
lol
im literal, convential, u livin in that blue state, but i aint political
but honestly this joe biden is a jackass, and the symbol for the liberals
mehh
he said hed be a great dad, but he sucks n blows almost every man
him a great parent? nah, he'll end up like the dad of lindsey lohan.
okk

both heads had their strong bars but they also had their misses. i thought this was a close battle IMO, but i'm gonna have to give it to Jeffry, he edged it out with slightly more consistancy.

v/Jeff

[ArchDevil]

jeff coming out swingin?better off letting rickie weeks take a crack at it
if i ever had ur record id hide for years like anne frank did in the attic
^ ehhh, no

reppin the sewers of rb aint that were the rats hang
ever since arch stopped holding u up youve been suffering from severe back pain
^ lol this was nice

see im dicking ur girl,bitch dont wanna get rid of me
when it comes to jeff getting pussy been like fl lately extreme lack of activity
^ ehh, works a bit, not bad

called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time
^ lol cool personal jab

you dont wanna war with joe im sending shots to ur dome
have jeff making the same decision obama made sending the fukin troops home
^ miss

so many shots down ur bitches throat she aint even consuming liquor
so when we say his girl giving memory u know she aint matching pictures
^ ehh not feelin this

how the fuk u expect to get in my zone,offense aint even moving
the way joe blowing out tennesee youd think they got beaten twice by houston
^ okish

making my mark in rb peep the lacerations on backs
the way ill whip jeff no snm while this fag still bumpin rihanna tracks
^ no

vs.

we know he a sucker for a career break he'll do anythin cuz he blows
if i wanted to be as fake as you, id turn on the white rapper tv show
^ ehhh, a bit harsh though

so many rappers here from boston: nahlidge, per$onal..then u right?
u dead last, they in their prime, urs was dead & fallen since u joined the site
^ not feelin this

Kids lyin through their teeth, they musta forgot bout flossin'
cuz if kids wanna be a 31-year old no body, they'd be the next joeboston
^ ok personal attempt but it could've been done a lot better imo

but honestly ill neva take this seriously, he a confused fellow
i never seen someone act outa place since C.Wrighter thought he was ghetto
^ ehh, no...random mention

Had zero parental guidance, dad left, ma had guys have their way with her
he was asked who influence him, he didn't answer, he was the only 1 in the family picture
^ ehh, okish at best

your worlds expandin more ways than one, hater
niggas so fat had a heart attack before openin the mail to get the newspaper
^ no

im literal, convential, u livin in that blue state, but i aint political
but honestly this joe biden is a jackass, and the symbol for the liberals
^ could've had sumtin here but not feelin it in the end

he said hed be a great dad, but he sucks n blows almost every man
him a great parent? nah, he'll end up like the dad of lindsey lohan.
^ dad twice kinda throws it off, punch was mediocre also


i dont know how to vote here tbh...both had problems in delivery/set-ups imo...both had some personals thrown in there, slight advantage for joe on this category for the severe back pain n battlin mac, which were cool...i think in the end, joe had just one more quotable worth mentioning, even though both struggled a bit with concepts and executin em, i felt joe was better in those categories aswell, by a HAIR...
vote - joeboston

[Vinzr]

called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time

vs

Had zero parental guidance, dad left, ma had guys have their way with her
he was asked who influence him, he didn't answer, he was the only 1 in the family picture

Both came kinda weak, but made it a close one. I think it comes down to the two quotables...in which case, I'm going with Jeff for having the better punch.

v/ Jeff

[Joe Boston]

nice drop jeff uppin

[Skully Hendrix]

jeff coming out swingin?better off letting rickie weeks take a crack at it
if i ever had ur record id hide for years like anne frank did in the attic
lol weak
reppin the sewers of rb aint that were the rats hang
ever since arch stopped holding u up youve been suffering from severe back pain
nah
see im dicking ur girl,bitch dont wanna get rid of me
when it comes to jeff getting pussy been like fl lately extreme lack of activity
lol weak
called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time
corny
you dont wanna war with joe im sending shots to ur dome
have jeff making the same decision obama made sending the fukin troops home
ehh
so many shots down ur bitches throat she aint even consuming liquor
so when we say his girl giving memory u know she aint matching pictures
what? giving memory?
how the fuk u expect to get in my zone,offense aint even moving
the way joe blowing out tennesee youd think they got beaten twice by houston
nope
making my mark in rb peep the lacerations on backs
the way ill whip jeff no snm while this fag still bumpin rihanna tracks
nahh
vs


we know he a sucker for a career break he'll do anythin cuz he blows
if i wanted to be as fake as you, id turn on the white rapper tv show
corny
so many rappers here from boston: nahlidge, per$onal..then u right?
u dead last, they in their prime, urs was dead & fallen since u joined the site
bad wording
Kids lyin through their teeth, they musta forgot bout flossin'
cuz if kids wanna be a 31-year old no body, they'd be the next joeboston
lol
but honestly ill neva take this seriously, he a confused fellow
i never seen someone act outa place since C.Wrighter thought he was ghetto
dissing somebody else
Had zero parental guidance, dad left, ma had guys have their way with her
he was asked who influence him, he didn't answer, he was the only 1 in the family picture
bad wording
your worlds expandin more ways than one, hater
niggas so fat had a heart attack before openin the mail to get the newspaper
bad wording
im literal, convential, u livin in that blue state, but i aint political
but honestly this joe biden is a jackass, and the symbol for the liberals
gay

v. jeff-had the one only decent needed punch needed to win this battle
he said hed be a great dad, but he sucks n blows almost every man
him a great parent? nah, he'll end up like the dad of lindsey lohan.

[C.Wrighter]

vote niggas

Lol at me being ghetto... People laughed at you on that cause I never said that, shows how much of a hater you are though.

You must think you are screaming the word nigga in every forum you in.

Anyway, here's my breakdown.. Since I'm no hater.


JOE

see im dicking ur girl,bitch dont wanna get rid of me
when it comes to jeff getting pussy been like fl lately extreme lack of activity
called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time


V.


JEFF

we know he a sucker for a career break he'll do anythin cuz he blows
if i wanted to be as fake as you, id turn on the white rapper tv show
so many rappers here from boston: nahlidge, per$onal..then u right?
u dead last, they in their prime, urs was dead & fallen since u joined the site
Kids lyin through their teeth, they musta forgot bout flossin'
cuz if kids wanna be a 31-year old no body, they'd be the next joeboston


V/ jeff .. Won it in the being of his verse, but everything down was wack is shit, other then the newspaper line.

[Godwasheeeeeeeeeeeeere]

i thought this was wierd you both lack creativity i mean u got ok cocnepts but ur execution is horrid it could be the wording i dont know but i got joe wit the houston line bein ok but thats it and i got jeffry wit the biden one rofl wow this battle was off bad u both need to pick up or wording n ur cocnepts

rofl the family picture line im still trying to understand

v/jeffry

[CatasTrophy]

jeff coming out swingin?better off letting rickie weeks take a crack at it
if i ever had ur record id hide for years like anne frank did in the attic
no..
reppin the sewers of rb aint that were the rats hang
ever since arch stopped holding u up youve been suffering from severe back pain
now this is funny
see im dicking ur girl,bitch dont wanna get rid of me
when it comes to jeff getting pussy been like fl lately extreme lack of activity
lol..
called so many dudes out it left u down to ur last dime
better off being a competitive eater the way he battling mac all the time
i get it..
you dont wanna war with joe im sending shots to ur dome
have jeff making the same decision obama made sending the fukin troops home
okish
so many shots down ur bitches throat she aint even consuming liquor
so when we say his girl giving memory u know she aint matching pictures
nahh..
how the fuk u expect to get in my zone,offense aint even moving
the way joe blowing out tennesee youd think they got beaten twice by houston
no
making my mark in rb peep the lacerations on backs
the way ill whip jeff no snm while this fag still bumpin rihanna tracks
no..

vs.

we know he a sucker for a career break he'll do anythin cuz he blows
if i wanted to be as fake as you, id turn on the white rapper tv show
lol
so many rappers here from boston: nahlidge, per$onal..then u right?
u dead last, they in their prime, urs was dead & fallen since u joined the site
coul've been good but came off as a statement
Kids lyin through their teeth, they musta forgot bout flossin'
cuz if kids wanna be a 31-year old no body, they'd be the next joeboston
no.
but honestly ill neva take this seriously, he a confused fellow
i never seen someone act outa place since C.Wrighter thought he was ghetto
nahh..
Had zero parental guidance, dad left, ma had guys have their way with her
he was asked who influence him, he didn't answer, he was the only 1 in the family picture
worded strangly but lol..
your worlds expandin more ways than one, hater
niggas so fat had a heart attack before openin the mail to get the newspaper
nope
im literal, convential, u livin in that blue state, but i aint political
but honestly this joe biden is a jackass, and the symbol for the liberals
noo..
he said hed be a great dad, but he sucks n blows almost every man
him a great parent? nah, he'll end up like the dad of lindsey lohan.
ok

The punches here were unmatched. Joe had some good lines. The back pain, fl activity, and mac lines were good compared with Jeffry who scored on the family picture punch. Jeff had potential to overturn this battle but fell short by weak concepts. Joe had some concepts that were'nt that good but the one's that i like were more and enough to pull off a victory here. Lines were just harder in my eyes.

vote-JoeBoston