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    Short but sweet.

    Dishonesty is possibly the quanity of our economy
    ironically its the quality of our democracies policies
    monopoloies becomeing colonies the comedy of novelty
    a philosophy for monotony is got to be a lie to me
    curiosity killed the U.S.... studying astronomy
    wasting money on rock objects.. has dumbfounded me
    what about our projects?..fucking bureaucracy
    how can the people except... your opologies??

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    Re: Short but sweet.

    some good vocab here... nice ryhme scheme

    although i think if yuo switch the "me" ryhmes with other words it would be better cuz they felt odd

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    Re: Short but sweet.

    Thanks for the feed. I gotch you. Uppin

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    Re: Short but sweet.

    has to be 16lines, mods'll probly close this, jus lettin u kno

    nice vocab/multies tho

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    Re: Short but sweet.

    :/ ...fuck

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    Re: Short but sweet.

    Like How You Kept It On Real Life Issues n' Not Fake/Imaginary Issues... Nice Rhyme Scheme... Nice Drop

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    Re: Short but sweet.

    nice keystyle right there. words roll together overall pretty well.

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