music is an art.

[.Nell.]

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(verse 1)
i sit back and remnisce when rap didnt exist /
in my soul or my heart and i was pessimistic /
the message id missed it, confessing this shit /
never thought id start and be a blessing to this
just ask yourself why theres no motivation /
whats the definition of a life with no inspiration /
dont look up to figures that you can believe in /
i say look up to bigger, with what you can suceed in/
music bruising and bleeding and losing it meaning /
its usually gleaming but it's confuisng when seeing /
what it used to be, and what its turned to now /
its like the realness left, and your no longer proud
because in this scene theres never to much loves
keep elevating yourself just to rise above
to prove others wrong and some to prove right
with the correct mindframe you can do it all tonight

(verse 2)
i got music in my heart and music in my head
as long as that remains how can you say musics dead
my whole content expressed as views are said
if you got it hard be thankful your clothed and fed
i put in so much work what am i suppose to get?
a real legit story or should i boast instead
just see it as a dictionary based on your opinions
make your opinion stand out from all the millions
be uniques, take the wrong paths to get you there
elevation comes from mistakes, it's left you where?
in a place or relisation, to improve your craft
within that place of misery it can move you fast
no knowledge on something, dont be rude just ask
bring with music with a passion through this task
you got a fully formed heart and if you put on
into what you do, how can you expect it to live on

(verse 3)
call me dope for reason not emotions your feeling
while i start concealing motive behind meaning
allow you voice and lyrics to go merge as one
you'll only understand it when you've heard it son
dont let people bring you down from what your working on
till all drops on my shoulders, where's this burden from
words are non-explanitory you have to put them together
be a perfect wordsmith or else you'll look on forever
for what it wasnt or worse, what it could of been
and get those spine chilling moments when you studder G
but everybody is allowed there own point of view
and yes some of those views will be views on you
musics based on decisions and all that you choose to do
haters are only inside your head, try an lose a few
and you may not be able to withstand what you hear
but you can always rely on what got you here

[WhyLie]

not to bad man abit long haha alot of verses..good flow was happening there and nice scenery..good piece man next time drop it down abit haha

[The Gwapfather]

^lol word.. way too long and you needed to add some pics jp lol.. naw but to the feed.. this had a pretty strong flow through out, that was the strength, but at times it could have been worded better, and at other times things were just rhyming to rhyme, with not much meaning behind it, lines like:

"music bruising and bleeding and losing it meaning /
its usually gleaming but it's confuisng when seeing /"

^music bruising and bleeding? doesn't make a ton of sense homie, confusing when seeing? that sounds awkward, the concept of the line was solid, but it just wasnt worded very well at all, don't force things just to flow, if you have to hold back on flow a bit, do so.. or otherwise mess with the way you word it, so you can put in multis/etc that aren't forced..

Overall though you had nice messages through out, your lines just need to be worded better to bring the concept(s) to life a bit more and really pull your reader in, still a solid lil drop dude, 1..

[SoulWriter]

I thought it was really meaningful throughout. I dug it. Maybe a bit repetitive in some parts, but it's almost there.

[.Nell.]

^ thank's for the feedback guys, appreciate it. and upping.

[<SamPle>]

i dont know what the guys above are talking about! too long??

im asuming this is a completed song right? if so 3 verses is just right
great flow throughout and consistant message...

put a good chorus on this and you got yourslef an audio my friend

[.Nell.]

^ thats the idea lol, beat i wrote it too already had a hookm so yeah, thanks for the feedback.