Awkward Moment

[KnowP]

Awkward Moment



Hard to focus on that devastating day
felt I’d levitate away rather than to wait n pray
the signs were simple but all ignored
til my jaw was floored by this flawless whore
like a horror scene ive never crossed before
swallowed my heart n core with the gauze n gore
severe stiff neck mixed in a sick sweat
thoughts were more overboard than a violent ship wreck
angry lips full of death and fiery venom
killing two birds with one stone but no irony in them
darkness of the situation blackens the lights
cooler heads prevail but I cannot fathom this right
its critical to be patient with the speed racin
heroic in a sense but the righteousness seems ancient
Hearing everything die in me and them eyein me
Im filled with the pride of greed and high anxiety
Asking what am I thinking, she decides to speak
my reply is that’s what I pay you for, Im not the shrink

[KnowP]

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[Nohbody]

sick sick sick. . .

perfect structure and the syllables and internal rimes just flow evenly as you can get in a text piece. . this is writing 101 right here. The choice of words were killer, and the visual approach made this very vivid and well detailed. . really great work here fam. Best stuff i seen from you in your last 6 drops or so. . .

[KnowP]

digs that dog. thanks for the compliments. glad you liked it too!

[Fatal.]

First thing i noticed was the great vocab usage, really brought the vividness to the piece. the flow was very smooth. sort of had a poetic feel to it in a way. i could tell that your mind state was around angry or confused imo. this was a small piece but yet complex and it seems that this has bigger/deeper meaning to it then i can really grasp. but good shit bro keep it coming

[SoulWriter]

All I can say is, pretty awesome.

[KnowP]

Thanks Fatal, i was angry by the way... lol

Soul, if thats all you can say.... then thanks!

[Defy-Gravity]

not bad. The ending was akward after all that you was like less talking more sucking lol worded great and complex at times. I like it but more poetry then flow imo

[KnowP]

The ending was akward

*a light comes on*

:noor:

[trajik]

Knowp, this was gooder.

Flow was on point, nice rhyme scheme, I enjoyed the multis and internals used. You were sick with the word choices, this piece just read so hard, a malevolent feel to it. Vivid imagery, nice metaphors, wordplay.

Good stuff here knowp.

[WhyLie]

thats was sick man,that had dope imagery and great vocabs and rhyming..this was a great peice and i was really feeling it man

[MV]

angry lips full of death and fiery venom
killing two birds with one stone but no irony in them
Hearing everything die in me and them eyein me
Im filled with the pride of greed and high anxiety
Asking what am I thinking, she decides to speak
my reply is that’s what I pay you for, Im not the shrink
^^^
my fav parts.
all in all dope read. i thought the exact opposite about the ending i think the way it ended was pretty funny. a bit of sarcasm but worded nicely. i really enjoyed how the internal rhymes spilled over into the other lines in the beginning. it really make for a nice smooth read.
big ups on this one KP.

[.Nell.]

i tend to disagree on the vocab, nothing different / new word wise stood out, but i liked this drop, started alot better then it ended though, so nice multies in there, def make a nice audio piece if you recorded it, flow was consistent throughout, decent read tbh.

[WhyLie]

^^ lol

[Shoemaker]

Ok so Jeff told me you were the shit......
*you're the shit*
This is the shit.
Shit, this shit has perfect structure. Perfect syllable alignment, perfect wording.
Sad part is... You prolly didn't even work that hard on this.
If you can vocally rap then do it man, cuz with These type lyrics you could be the next jcole blowing up, I mean that.
Cuz u can choose better topics to reach more fans, and if your dropping this level of lyrics on these abstractish topics, then you would kill songs about just being good at rapping.
Unbelievable.