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    Came to be

    [Intro]
    To all my friends..
    I just wanna apologize...
    I ain't been me..
    That stops...NOW.


    [Verse 1]
    Call him Nutz, or crazy, Either way he Lost it all,
    He was in a Rut or maybe, He chose to Drop and fall,
    Either way, to his friends, he wasn't the Guy you knew,
    At this point, It'd been simpler to just Die or lose,
    Why I choose, To dismember my friends emotional health,
    I can't really remember, I just know it hurts my own as well,
    I'm alone in hell, If you heard it, his tone would tell,
    That he's grown to fail, His souls been sold to shells,
    I'm sorry for Using you, and I'm sorry for Abusing truths,
    Its caused me to be Losing dudes, Some who Knew the proof,
    and saved my ass, All I could do was crave to pass,
    I was ,facing that, Facing facts, Chasing rap..
    Think he's abrasive? Yeah,
    I doubt the temptations lack,
    Maybe he just impatient at,
    Rising to the top, He's been waiting back,
    Since 1998, Been trying to climb to the top spot,
    And all he could wish for, was to drop the hot shot,
    And to block the dicks coming up, He wanted to cock block,
    Now look what he's become, He forgot his dream,
    Forgot his homies, He's done, He's not who he seemed,
    Not the guy that leaned, his neck to the side,
    Just to help you in life, He'll never realize,
    What he did was wrong, He'll just regret,
    So he sings this song, Hoping to get death...


    [Chorus]
    And all my friends left me,
    And all my friends gave up,
    Won't be upset see,
    Cause they're done holding B up,
    And He's gonna drown,
    Slowly and painfully,
    The man you see,
    is not who he came to be.

    [Verse 2]
    Now he's alone, coping via Painful regret,
    Hoping to mask it, it left him Brainless instead,
    Now He's just as Insane as a vet,
    Who left the game without a Flame in his head!
    To All my friends, I'm sorry about who I Came to be,
    This is Where I end, Hopefully we'll Maybe see,
    The day I change, The day I remember my name,
    The day fame, Gets ahold of me adn catches ablaze..
    Until then..The lights are out,
    and hate? Just shining down,
    It's thoughts I'm writing down,
    I got to learn to bind my mouth,
    Tie it down, learn when to speak,
    Crying now, Burn them fools that you concevied...
    Anyway...Later y'all.
    I'm back bitches!


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    I'm back bitches!


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    Re: Came to be

    first verse was sick, flowd really well.... few more metaphors or similies maybe

    2nd verse was by far worse, didnt flow very well and wording werent great... felt as if you rushed it.

    improve the 2nd verse and add another verse you got a good potential audio

    KEEP going man

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    Re: Came to be

    gotto agree with SPBennett on the first verse. it was sick, told a story, and had a good flow to it.

    2nd verse was alright, i'd say lengthen it, maybe incorporate the flow from the first verse into the second.

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    Re: Came to be

    Upping.
    I'm back bitches!


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    Re: Came to be

    2nd verse seemed kinda rushed. First verse started off dope. Dug the chorus.

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