Voice Box

[thatdudeB]

god left clues to the youth that we blind with booz to the youth
satans weapon's stronger then gods, as a kid i wanted to lose every tooth
as a seed i'd think does our creater even sound a bit human
like jesus is portrayed a certain way, like its a shoe in
but when i got this altered voice in my head the only choice was i bled
now i believe i can hoist up holy bread with the poise of the dead
cuz on these drugs i actually feel free, with invisibility can i steal pleas
before, affection i used to use to heal these feelings, bull used to appeal me's
used to pray for a sign and i used to play for the shine
wanted to hear angels laughter to give me a reason to portray my own mind
cuz i think i'm sane but the pills say when i blink i paint
a schizo trying to hide the link that pain attatches to so shrinks can make
on a crazy scale i'm a motherfucking inifinit category
trying to reverse time imagining my will can turn minutes into story
if you could stick my voice in a box it would roll up like dice
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[thatdudeB]

if my voice had a form it would stroll in dark nights
see i realize i use music to release me, others think i use it to be cheesey
can never be a mecca, in a age where disciplines called abuse it ain't easy

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[Puma1996]

short drop you stayed on topic for the most part
i like how you were able to describe and put a picture in my head each bar..or mostly each bar could of been longer and some bars could of extended but its all with the elvation fam

keeping writing all in all decent drop

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[Jukon]

This was a cool drop, kind of repetitive with some of the word choice especially in the first line you used 'youth' twice and it was noticeable. i dont agree at all with the person above me about lines being extended. they were fine in length but you should have elaborated your DETAILS more, not the line itself. maybe take out the unnecessary words and add more descriptive words. it was a simple piece, didnt really capture me, no hate but i just feel like ive read it before. the angle was cool i just wish it was more creative. but yea..it was a cool read though, keep at it.