Nontitled

[Joe Boston]

SHOEMAKER:

No time for rebuddlin, touching', kissin', or cuddlin'.
Other rappers rap muffin shit, all I do is just muffle it.
Iv had enough of it, now take a dose of this potent shit.
I'm feelin' quite cumbersome, turn ya into cucumbers kid.
Vegetate any weight, heavy or under just for the fuck of it.
Posin' "gangstas" vomit hip hop the way they just throw it up it's shit.
Their rhymes are ass backwards, I call them Mifl-Dunderin.
So I emphasize lyricism mark elevations with astericks.
*Serial criminal writing syllable minimals probably round' eight.
So when I say supercalifragilistic im sayin yo ass ain't.*
It's asinine to me that you could claim to brink me, killin' you is pleasing.
Half of thine masterful rap skill, not even, you can't beat me.
If you never WERE how can you be on top still?
I'm hot still, too hostile, don't fuck with the king.
You got green? I'll hook ya leafy ass from my money tree like Kareem.
I'm hotter than a fire and bitch don't sweat it you're just anti-prespirant to a G.
Be prepared for hip hop's apostle flow to reign on these top-heavy jokes.
Call that lyrical overload.
I overflowed n'went overboard.
Spillin villain lyrics, off my rocker of course.
back n' forward until i tip my boat too forth.
I got Drew in here.
You know Jeff in here.
I got Broke in here.
We ain't no joke in here.
This is boastful fear.
we ain't close... we here.
Don't make me bring andrew.
there he goes, oh dear.
Underground shit like we're coal miners rappin.
We lapped em now I'm laughin while they gaspin n' shit.
Pass it to Joe, he'll kill it while I bask in this shit.

HOOK:

We Swear we killing these Rappers,One hand on the bible
Crossing out names leave em Nontitled
No signs of existance,No time Of Arrival
We travel Long Distance eating up Miles




JOEBOSTON:

Lyrically I pierce through yall till your bones turn frail
Joeboston spit that underground shit bitch, Freedom Trail
Open up your wounds and throw salt on ya, Gail The Snail
The way im licking shots its like im sending bullets by mail
Blow out your brains and leave the DNA exposed, Monica Lowinsky's dress
They can see that im packing more steel than a fucking Iron Press
These rappers putting on acts to see if im impressed
I'll put their verses over ice have em screaming "I Am Fresh!"
Hiphop is my heaven climb the steps I am blessed
Roasting rappers when i spit fire from down below smell the burning flesh
Leave these pussy's stuck and trust me they dont mind the sex
The way we getting killer brains it's like we putting minds at rest
What else do yall expect from us? other then we spittin that raw
Wanna come agaisnt us these muthafukas will never have the Faith like Tim Mcgraw
breaking laws when we packing more tools then Stanley
So When i make a Jaw Break these muthafukas wont be chewing Hard Candy
spittin words that leave dudes in survival mode call em Tom Clancy
Cuz Joe will keep grasping mics Till I break my Fucking Phalanges


Hook:

We Swear we killing these Rappers,One hand on the bible
Crossing out names leave em Nontitled
No signs of existance,No time Of Arrival
We travel Long Distance eating up Miles

[Joe Boston]

LINKS:

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...421/index.html
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...491/index.html
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...427/index.html

[A.T.]

The way im licking shots its like im sending bullets by mail

^ thought this was cool. Best line IMO.

Shoe, your flow was steady, so props on that. You had some ok metas but some of your wording seemed forced. Not badly, but if it was reworded it would help you to incorporate some better multies. Also thought this line was cool, "*Serial criminal writing syllable minimals probably round' eight."
Overall, decent drop.

Joe, your flow suffered at times, tbh. No hate, but the Gail snail line seemed rather forced, IMO. Things smoothed out afterwards though and made for a nice read. In your next drop, the only advice I can actually give to you is to stay committed on a concept and make sure that it is identifiable. Nice read though. Props.

Sorry, couldn't do a line by line breakdown cause I'm on my phone.

[Joe Boston]

Gail the snail is from always sunny in philadelphia thats how i got the concept because they say "Salt the snail" lol

[A.T.]

I know that, it's just the way it was worded. Lol. Nice though!

[Joe Boston]

thanks AT man uppin

[Bos]

I cant give a total breakdown, cause im on my Ps3 lol,
This was a good collab between you and Shoemaker, you guys managed to pull off some really cool drops. The flow was consistent and steady. It was a nice read and overall I think you both you guys deserve some props

Lyrically I pierce through yall till your bones turn frail
Joeboston spit that underground shit bitch, Freedom Trail
Open up your wounds and throw salt on ya, Gail The Snail
The way im licking shots its like im sending bullets by mail

^these were my favorite bars in both verses. Liked the opener and especially the closer. Flow was good sometimes a little forced but overall nice drop here.

*Serial criminal writing syllable minimals probably round' eight.
So when I say supercalifragilistic im sayin yo ass ain't

^ this was a nice drop by Shoemaker, nice worded and I really liked the setup.

Conclusion. I think you guys did a great job here. Nice verses and the flow kept consistent. Good drops from both, keep at it.

[Shoemaker]

Thanks for the feed AT and Bos

[Joe Boston]

Good looks on the feed BOS

[Joedahoe]

Lyrically I pierce through yall till your bones turn frail
Joeboston spit that underground shit bitch, Freedom Trail
Open up your wounds and throw salt on ya, Gail The Snail
The way im licking shots its like im sending bullets by mail
Blow out your brains and leave the DNA exposed, Monica Lowinsky's dress
They can see that im packing more steel than a fucking Iron Press
These rappers putting on acts to see if im impressed
I'll put their verses over ice have em screaming "I Am Fresh!"
Hiphop is my heaven climb the steps I am blessed
Roasting rappers when i spit fire from down below smell the burning flesh
Leave these pussy's stuck and trust me they dont mind the sex
The way we getting killer brains it's like we putting minds at rest
What else do yall expect from us? other then we spittin that raw
Wanna come agaisnt us these muthafukas will never have the Faith like Tim Mcgraw
breaking laws when we packing more tools then Stanley
So When i make a Jaw Break these muthafukas wont be chewing Hard Candy
spittin words that leave dudes in survival mode call em Tom Clancy
Cuz Joe will keep grasping mics Till I break my Fucking Phalanges

i hated shoemakers whole thing ijs.it lacked flow, it sounded like he was tryin to use vocab he wouldnt understand unless he had a dictionary. i agree with A.T about this being the best line "The way im licking shots its like im sending bullets by mail".i cant really say much else cuz im on my ipod but it was pretty good. mad respect.the last line with tom clancy and phalanges was sick too.

[Shoemaker]

Maybe you don't understand my vocab so u automatically assume that I don't?
But I do......
If u don't like it that's cool. Just don't say bs just to make ur feed look longer.

[Voyce Box]

SHOEMAKER:
No time for rebuddlin, touching', kissin', or cuddlin'.
Other rappers rap muffin shit, all I do is just muffle it.
Iv had enough of it, now take a dose of this potent shit.
I'm feelin' quite cumbersome, turn ya into cucumbers kid.

^nice way to start this off, smooth flow.
definitely digging that last bar here, mad dope!

Vegetate any weight, heavy or under just for the fuck of it.
Posin' "gangstas" vomit hip hop the way they just throw it up it's shit.
Their rhymes are ass backwards, I call them Mifl-Dunderin.
So I emphasize lyricism mark elevations with astericks.

^flow still steady, all good so far.
digging the metaphors your using here.
the first bar here, i agree with you 100%, man.

*Serial criminal writing syllable minimals probably round' eight.
So when I say supercalifragilistic im sayin yo ass ain't.*
It's asinine to me that you could claim to brink me, killin' you is pleasing.
Half of thine masterful rap skill, not even, you can't beat me.

^hahaha. loving that supercalifragilistic line, man.
flow still steady and lookin' dope..
a little taste of that lethal vocab, i can dig!

If you never WERE how can you be on top still?
I'm hot still, too hostile, don't fuck with the king.
You got green? I'll hook ya leafy ass from my money tree like Kareem.
I'm hotter than a fire and bitch don't sweat it you're just anti-prespirant to a G.

^not bad but that last bar seemed a little stretched when i spit it.
not a bad metaphor though, digging it.

Be prepared for hip hop's apostle flow to reign on these top-heavy jokes.
Call that lyrical overload.
I overflowed n'went overboard.
Spillin villain lyrics, off my rocker of course.
back n' forward until i tip my boat too forth.

^"overflowed and went overboard", ha!
well put there, man, i like your style.

Underground shit like we're coal miners rappin.
We lapped em now I'm laughin while they gaspin n' shit.
Pass it to Joe, he'll kill it while I bask in this shit

.
^"underground shit like were coal miners rapping"
dope ass simile, man.

i'm feeling this whole verse, man.
and you kept the flow steady, didn't throw me off anywhere.
i liked the metaphors and similes used, very creative.
just one of those piece you gotta let loose, i liked it.

JOEBOSTON:
Lyrically I pierce through yall till your bones turn frail
Joeboston spit that underground shit bitch, Freedom Trail
Open up your wounds and throw salt on ya, Gail The Snail
The way im licking shots its like im sending bullets by mail

^last bar, man, best bar yet!
starting the second verse off nice, too, smooth flow.
i like the metaphors and similes mixed up like they are.
and how you managed to keep it legit.

Blow out your brains and leave the DNA exposed, Monica Lowinsky's dress
They can see that im packing more steel than a fucking Iron Press
These rappers putting on acts to see if im impressed
I'll put their verses over ice have em screaming "I Am Fresh!"

^killer.. digging that iron press bar.
very creative again, you just keep it coming.

Hiphop is my heaven climb the steps I am blessed
Roasting rappers when i spit fire from down below smell the burning flesh
Leave these pussy's stuck and trust me they dont mind the sex
The way we getting killer brains it's like we putting minds at rest

^digging the metaphor in the first bar.
second bar, too, haha, very creative.
i don't think anyone could've worded it better.

What else do yall expect from us? other then we spittin that raw
Wanna come agaisnt us these muthafukas will never have the Faith like Tim Mcgraw
breaking laws when we packing more tools then Stanley
So When i make a Jaw Break these muthafukas wont be chewing Hard Candy
spittin words that leave dudes in survival mode call em Tom Clancy
Cuz Joe will keep grasping mics Till I break my Fucking Phalanges

^more dope lines, especially the Faith and Tim McGraw one.
total knock-out when the second bar hit hard, too.

i don't know what to really say, kinda speechless..
cause both of ya came with some dope ass metaphors and similes.
i won't judge who's verse i thought was better cause that would just be fucked up.
but i will say this, both ya stayed real creative and kept a smooth flow going.
i enjoyed it, dudes, definitely a dope drop.
keep writing and keep ya heads up!

[Obese Chess]

I dig this track, it's a good collab.
Some of it is a little forced-sounding, like you were more concerned with making shit rhyme than saying something. Like

Vegetate any weight, heavy or under just for the fuck of it.

But the Mifl-Dunderin line was funny as hell.
Same with this line:

Cuz Joe will keep grasping mics Till I break my Fucking Phalanges

It makes sense, but it sounds a little forced.
Joe, your references were great. There was some real funny shit in there.

Again, I really dig this track. Good work by both of you.

[Shoemaker]

Thanks for the feed guys, drop a link and I'll return the favor

[Joedahoe]

i wasnt tryna make anything longer.i just didnt like your lyrics.sounded like you used a dic.ijs.my opinion im not tryin to dis you or anything just what i thought.