Nazi Rally response

[Express'on]

Edited with a slightly better video, no lines cut off though...just the images and voice is slightly off...

I posted this on youtube...it messed it up a little and cut like 3 lines, and mismatched my image and voice but whatever.


If you can't see it...

TIme racin', my minds pacing: I gotta go
Benign faces, define hatred; protected so
I lie in waiting', debating if I should make a show
throw a blow to see white faces break a crack'er throat

Smash a mote of crimson blood, in a nazi's mug
Cocky sons of bitches, my niggas done dug the trenches
Come in witness, the armed resistance; milwaukee's finest
Bias we break the spineless, an underlying crisis
Violence we undermine it, with private divided speech
Inciting riots, lying say that they driving peace
Piling the streets, piloting each non-white to speak
Preaching communism, come on! callin' em niggas'
Fuck It! I'm a get em' I'm driven by my aggression
The issue right here pressing; risen through the recession
The message is still neglected, leveraged by misconception
I'm to tempted just let it, remain a gesture of effort
Get up, armed at attention, the tension drawing the question
A second is all we need, to grab a weapon and get em'
The police there to protect em, half of them faggots wit em
Bigots, living in the system, my niggas listen pay attention

The...

Time racin', my minds pacing: I gotta go
Benign faces, define hatred; protected so
I lie in waiting', debating if I should make a show
throw a blow to see white faces break a crack'er throat

A passive foe, calculating all the obstacles
Sitting here plotting, positives not an option though
Caution all the liars trying bargain all the common folk
Neo-Nazis Comi-hoes, walking up in Comi-clothes
These niggas comical, bonds are broken, n pride unfolds
…..Flash mobs come up and the leave paparazzi froze…
Topics sold, for those that don't have the right to vote
I should know, tonight just shows, the divide in minds of those
Minor tones, that seem to decline the ideas of defining most
Mining souls to find the weakest, and try n deny its growth
I provoke, ideas for those steady supplying conscious roles
Not to boast, or bode action for those that act as though
This is an attack at home, blacks react as the threat is posed
poll extract the callused blows, most is lacking attacks on both
Tactics roll under a lapsing scope, the mass in shown


TIme racin', my minds pacing: I gotta go
Benign faces, define hatred; protected so
I lie in waiting', debating if I should make a show
throw a blow to see white faces break as crack'er throat


This is them talking...today...I write about my life...

[ItoldUIwasFat]

dude..i got my connection right now through my phone so i cant see those videos..thats weird cuz if go directly from my phone i can see them fine..w/e lol

this had a crispy fucking flow man

The issue right here pressing; risen through the recession
The message is still neglected, leveraged by misconception

that stood out for me right there duder the depth of this line represents the depth of the overall piece in a great way my man. really deep emotion to this..and i gotta say i relate to it this alot..though im not black i am Latino and i have experienced racism so this hits close to home which is a great aspect of your writing.

the inners in this really made your flow cruise through the words to make a cadence that i really enjoyed reading. The content could of been longer but thats just me being picky..

great vocab in this aswell..bordered the lines of poetic wording but i guess thats something most poets cant escape right lol..
anyway this was really good as soon as i get a better connection ama peep yah video..what i have read though is outstanding..keep posting my duder

Edit; i got the video to work..
dam dude you got a nice delivery and good voice bro..great cadence like i said and the flow def above par..i assume you capable of making a more finished product as far as an audio goes..
great post again man

[143]

I like the flow of the drop, definite good political piece that can be a great audio. You got some good mults and nice wordplay. On a writing standpoint, some parts got a little lazy:

A passive foe, calculating all the obstacles
Sitting here plotting, positives not an option though
Caution all the liars trying bargain all the common folk
Neo-Nazis Comi-hoes, walking up in Comi-clothes

The "option though" line could have sounded better, maybe a different word here because you are trying to continue a thought that has ended there. It worked for flow sake but detracted from the overall feeling starting off this verse, but you brought it back up and finished strong.

I to agree with NFAT and would like to hear a polished audio of this because you have essentially a great song written.

[Express'on]

I original had "not optional" instead of "not an option though" I just kept falling off my rhythm so I changed it. i can't wait until I get a mic and stuff...just these kids expensive...lol I have another piece but its not a political message...Imma post it next I been working on it today. here and there....thank u

[Prophet Margin]

Always like hard political drops.

TIme racin', my minds pacing: I gotta go
Benign faces, define hatred; protected so
I lie in waiting', debating if I should make a show
throw a blow to see white faces break a crack'er throat

Lol dope opener, lots of rhymes packed in there. good way to start.

Smash a mote of crimson blood, in a nazi's mug
Cocky sons of bitches, my niggas done dug the trenches
Come in witness, the armed resistance; milwaukee's finest
Bias we break the spineless, an underlying crisis
Violence we undermine it, with private divided speech
Inciting riots, lying say that they driving peace
Piling the streets, piloting each non-white to speak
Preaching communism, come on! callin' em niggas'
Fuck It! I'm a get em' I'm driven by my aggression
The issue right here pressing; risen through the recession
The message is still neglected, leveraged by misconception
I'm to tempted just let it, remain a gesture of effort
Get up, armed at attention, the tension drawing the question
A second is all we need, to grab a weapon and get em'
The police there to protect em, half of them faggots wit em
Bigots, living in the system, my niggas listen pay attention

Dude i dig the style here, complex rhymes, vocab, imagery and what not, all the strong poetic devices, but at the same time it has that gangsta feel, that aggressive vibe know what i mean? Almost sounds like a verse i might drop, except like better in a way, lol.

Time racin', my minds pacing: I gotta go
Benign faces, define hatred; protected so
I lie in waiting', debating if I should make a show
throw a blow to see white faces break a crack'er throat

Oh i get it now. this wasnt the opening lines, its the chorus. ok, cool. even better haha.

A passive foe, calculating all the obstacles
Sitting here plotting, positives not an option though
Caution all the liars trying bargain all the common folk
Neo-Nazis Comi-hoes, walking up in Comi-clothes
These niggas comical, bonds are broken, n pride unfolds
…..Flash mobs come up and the leave paparazzi froze…
Topics sold, for those that don't have the right to vote
I should know, tonight just shows, the divide in minds of those
Minor tones, that seem to decline the ideas of defining most
Mining souls to find the weakest, and try n deny its growth
I provoke, ideas for those steady supplying conscious roles
Not to boast, or bode action for those that act as though
This is an attack at home, blacks react as the threat is posed
poll extract the callused blows, most is lacking attacks on both
Tactics roll under a lapsing scope, the mass in shown

The superior of the two verses IMO. nice complex, intertwining rhyme scheme, multis and such. stays on topic, just a good verse to read overall, and the flow was pretty tight as well.

Overall: you have strong flow, vocab, and rhymes most def. I like the topic as well, although in some ways i feel this wasnt a true topical (which is fine, i almost never write TRUE topicals)........id like to see what you can do on a more poetic, less hip hop-ish type piece tho, just for fun

PS get this on a beat

Stay up

[Nohbody]

ill shit man, clear message in here and you already know I dig ur style style homie. .

The vocab is pretty much consistent with all your previous work, and the raw emotion was definitely felt.

Politics are touchy. .

From a white mans perspective. .

I dont agree with anything these nazi fucks say, but i do respect that America gives us the right to free speech, even if that protects these morons rights to get in front of a mic and talk their racist shit

I feel in this day and age, ignoring the racism is what takes power away from it. If everyone just truly showed they have no interest in the message then everything they say just falls on def ears.

I would never show up to a rally to protest it. Why give it that much attention?

but wutever. . guess this shit can be debated over a million times over. Anywayz. . good drop as usual man.

[Express'on]

Thanks Everyone! this drop wasnt about proving whose right an whose wrong, because as most of us read we will figure that out but I am against blatant racism, and I lobe my people black and white...i am bith 100% german and 100% Nigerian making me half of each and I have seen both sides...I cannot imagine what my mother and father went through but what I can say is that they beyond what public opinion was believed in love, and the sacrifices that made it possible. I want to thank personallly anyone who gas at least has became willing to listen through my music, or anyone who has says he has had a point, but overall I just want unity above the right and wrong..I just want US...to to live on...