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checking in homie gl man
God made Adam and Eve so we all know this Fruit is Forbidden
So When it comes too ballz this fag gives more toungue like he was competing with Gene Simmons
Hang this this bitch out to dry cuz i wet em up and his clothes still Damp
Dreams of becoming FL Champ? Dude couldnt bring fire working fulltime for Hitler in Concentration Camps
Battlin me do u really think its fukin necessary
I'll "slap the taste out ur mouth" like i fed u the Urban Dictionary
Read the Obituaries another dude got Slayed
I'll send Bruno Mars into Cardiac Arrest when i make this bitch bite down on the Grenade
"Be afraid be very Afraid!" like i put the gun to Veronica Quaife
Aspestos flows i'll have slayer digest even the EPA knows im Unsafe
and yo yall dont know who Veronica Quaife is she said that quote in the movie the fly lol
I see you fail at school, your sport record is just shocking
The only time boston comes close to red socks he’s wearing stockings
This bitch has a self curfew because he’s scared of the dark
The only time he’s “checkin in homie” he’s at the trailer park
He’s 30 and a baseboy, that has me in stitches
The ladies think he’s a 3 toed surfer the way he’s hanging 3...inches
This dude is dope…pffft.. You gottsa be shitting me
He makes me look religious the way nun his punches are hitting me
This battle is boring isn’t gonna be very gory
I don’t even need to throw a per$onal the way he ko’ed joe for me
oh ok damn nice drop uppin for votes gl man
joeboston
God made Adam and Eve so we all know this Fruit is Forbidden
So When it comes too ballz this fag gives more toungue like he was competing with Gene Simmons
concept was a little awkward but punchwise its ehhh..almost hittin but needs some raw shit in there
Hang this this bitch out to dry cuz i wet em up and his clothes still Damp
Dreams of becoming FL Champ? Dude couldnt bring fire working fulltime for Hitler in Concentration Camps
stretched the concept a bit buts its semi okay..
Battlin me do u really think its fukin necessary
I'll "slap the taste out ur mouth" like i fed u the Urban Dictionary
nah, didnt get the concept here. no hate, but didnt feel this connect
Read the Obituaries another dude got Slayed
I'll send Bruno Mars into Cardiac Arrest when i make this bitch bite down on the Grenade
ehh, a bit of a forced punch. look at how short your set up is..compared to the execution itself. has the feel to the bar like the sting is forced hella hard in there..
"Be afraid be very Afraid!" like i put the gun to Veronica Quaife
Aspestos flows i'll have slayer digest even the EPA knows im Unsafe
its okish..
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slayerr
I see you fail at school, your sport record is just shocking
The only time boston comes close to red socks he’s wearing stockings
dont see how the wearing stockings line is harsh. but, u had a concept there so ill give u that
This bitch has a self curfew because he’s scared of the dark
The only time he’s “checkin in homie” he’s at the trailer park
wasnt feelin this tbh
He’s 30 and a baseboy, that has me in stitches
The ladies think he’s a 3 toed surfer the way he’s hanging 3...inches
lol, still lackin with a solid punch all the way but the delivery had a bit of humour in there
This dude is dope…pffft.. You gottsa be shitting me
He makes me look religious the way nun his punches are hitting me
its an ok jab. set up could relate more to the punch tho
This battle is boring isn’t gonna be very gory
I don’t even need to throw a per$onal the way he ko’ed joe for me
okay personal...coulda played off with creativity more in this one
verdict
i got slayerr takin this having a better structure of settin up and landin some hits in more than joe. i thought boston did just ok or average throughout but no solid connects i felt that i can quote. no hate but the set ups were bad in comparison with the swing you were tryin to land.
slayerr on the other hand, came more direct. added a somewhat okay personal..just had the edge on this one.
he showed up with the better verse in my honest opinion.
vote-> slayerr
link-> http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...497/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...001/index.html
when both of u got time to peep those links out and return the favor. aight fellas, take it easy and keep elevatin.
INFEKTED PENZ
word uppin thanks phan
So When it comes too ballz this fag gives more toungue like he was competing with Gene Simmons
made me lol but little bit streched
Dude couldnt bring fire working fulltime for Hitler in Concentration Camps
ok concept ,but played
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only time boston comes close to red socks he’s wearing stockings
lol
makes me look religious the way nun his punches are hitting me
cud have been worded better
Both battlers lacked creativty. Kinda weak but Joe takes it for being consistent. props on the red socks line tho .
V- JB
NIGHTMARES
God made Adam and Eve so we all know this Fruit is Forbidden
So When it comes too ballz this fag gives more toungue like he was competing with Gene Simmons
good concept here joe, thing is...your extra wording and line structure killed this punch
Hang this this bitch out to dry cuz i wet em up and his clothes still Damp
Dreams of becoming FL Champ? Dude couldnt bring fire working fulltime for Hitler in Concentration Camps
good concept again, but extra wording killed your punch
Battlin me do u really think its fukin necessary
I'll "slap the taste out ur mouth" like i fed u the Urban Dictionary
wording was off
Read the Obituaries another dude got Slayed
I'll send Bruno Mars into Cardiac Arrest when i make this bitch bite down on the Grenade
extra wording killed the punch here
"Be afraid be very Afraid!" like i put the gun to Veronica Quaife
Aspestos flows i'll have slayer digest even the EPA knows im Unsafe
lol okay closer, try and make your bars/lines as even as possible, if you can make your line structure close to this bar, you will land punches harder. And for the record its spelled Asbestos*
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I see you fail at school, your sport record is just shocking
The only time boston comes close to red socks he’s wearing stockings
really played punch, but good opener
This bitch has a self curfew because he’s scared of the dark
The only time he’s “checkin in homie” he’s at the trailer park
good punch
He’s 30 and a baseboy, that has me in stitches
The ladies think he’s a 3 toed surfer the way he’s hanging 3...inches
lol
This dude is dope…pffft.. You gottsa be shitting me
He makes me look religious the way nun his punches are hitting me
good punch
This battle is boring isn’t gonna be very gory
I don’t even need to throw a per$onal the way he ko’ed joe for me
good closer
Joe you are elevating i can see that from your past battles. You have great concepts, but you fall off with the extra words you put in your lines. Also, try to make your lines structured as even as possible so your setups don't miss with your punches. Slayer had good punches and was flowing well. Slayer won this for more punches that hit. No hate to either of you, keep at it.
v - slayerr
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Hang this this bitch out to dry cuz i wet em up and his clothes still Damp
Dreams of becoming FL Champ? Dude couldnt bring fire working fulltime for Hitler in Concentration Camps
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This bitch has a self curfew because he’s scared of the dark
The only time he’s “checkin in homie” he’s at the trailer park
even match up i thought slayerr's verse was structured better
v.slayerr
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