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Thread: Life in the HOOD :: hot drop ::

  1. #1
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    Life in the HOOD :: hot drop ::

    Break of dawn arrises this Mexican faces the horror of-the-hood//
    mind reacts wanting to shut his eyes only if-he-could//
    should stay home violence around escalating-each-day//
    friends getting layed into thier grave getting killed-in-everyway//
    courage has enough to go to school proceeds puts on his coloured-fitted//
    cries passing the chalk marks his friend lay facedown cold-blooded//
    mind jolts blood-clotted sees the holes from the semi in-his-chest//
    scenario-becomes-perplex thoughts through his head who's-next//
    staring at nobody scans at objects needle from crack fiends looking-for-a-fix//
    family depicts a bad life in this non-caring-matrix//
    arrives at school stunned takes his first steps-in-awhile//
    skipped cause of all the trauma skeptic about life thoughts-in-denial//
    corrupted school another gang fight errupts 9-1-1~to-dial//
    police instigate color profiling begins was 2 caucasians that had-a-brawl//
    Five~0 making coloured people-crawl Hand cuffed pushing us to make-us-fall//
    Fuck them he says We-standing-tall Cops threatens i'mma hurt and jail-y'all//
    Interigation-begins gets the point across causing the ruckus-were-caucasians//
    people point first to inspect crime are blacks-&-mexicans//
    plans for school gets cut short principal suspends for distractions//
    life is filled with-demons they lurk and may end up to be-friends//
    all this transpired in the life of Cliptik flex at days-ends//

    constructive feedback much appreciated....

  2. #2
    Av1r3x
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    nice story-tellin,kinda lost me a few times but overall it wuz dope.Stay ^
    -Avi

  3. #3
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    ^ thanks man appreciate it.....

  4. #4
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    uppin

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    BANNED for biting
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    ummmmmmmm , Ill story tellin , , i Liked ur word choice , your wordplay was Ill as alwayz , some of it was confusin , because ur lines were to long , , , so shorten up some of ur lines , , , , overall i give u a 8/10

  6. #6
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    thanks...... appreciate it uppin

  7. #7
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    ...uppin

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    good stuff, but what hood are u from

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    I felt the piece it was cool. dawg keep postin
    "Streets like a bullet in cancer, it'll swallow you up
    or eat you from the inside and hollow you up."- Beanie Sigel

    "Stare gun in face
    heart flutters dawg it's startin to race
    stuck in my place
    nowhere to turn, nowhere to go
    death right around the corner soon as the gauge exsplode"- Me

  10. #10
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    thanks appreciate the replies . what hood if u knew toronto u'd know rexdale is the pj there and thats where i reside at

  11. #11
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    uppin.....

  12. #12
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    dont sleep

  13. #13
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    ZZZZ

  14. #14
    ŠLipTiK~FleX
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    y'all sleepin on hotness

  15. #15
    SYNOPSIST
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    cries passing the chalk marks his friend lay facedown cold-blooded//
    mind jolts blood-clotted sees the holes from the semi in-his-chest//
    scenario-becomes-perplex thoughts through his head who's-next//
    staring at nobody scans at objects needle from crack fiends looking-for-a-fix//
    family depicts a bad life in this non-caring-matrix//
    arrives at school stunned takes his first steps-in-awhile//
    skipped cause of all the trauma skeptic about life thoughts-in-denial//
    corrupted school another gang fight errupts 9-1-1~to-dial//

    TIGHT ASS BARS DOG, FA REAL THIS ENTIRE PIECE WAS AWE INSPIRING NA MEAN...GOOD SHIT PEACE

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