Things about me

[Andrewert]

So after listing to chris webby it inspired me to write this, the way i have written is different then normally so tell me what you guys think. Id also like to known if this is the kind of things that are HOF worthy

Things about me

I'm so lyrical, very hypercritical, able to pull off a miracle
not a sacrificial, Not empirical, when I See people I'm satirical
kinder than a super sain, softer than when its rainin, Able to go through pain an..
Not a person who's insane; Made fun of for my membrane; Sweeter then champagne
More used than a television, Able to make a quick decision, Neva needs a revision
Hard to learn like division, never needing provision, wishin for recognition
going like it's arbitrary, Knows more words then a dictionary, Stronger then military
more praised than a monastery, This story is very necessary, so no need for commentary
smarter then a smart phone, no matter what I'm in the zone, Gona be crowned to the thrown
except I'm to unknown, so my show will be postponed, and I'll be at my party alone

uhm some words in there you may not know just look em up on google and then they will not make sense
How ever you watch DBZ then you will know what a super sain is

[Andrewert]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...137/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...000/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...109/index.html

[Andrewert]

Uppp

[El Chapo]

the words and multis are dope, BUT it really is just a flow. Not really an open mic sense that it has a subject. You're just rapping.

This is more of a cypher than an open mic.


Come up with a concept and use that same wordplay and you will be doing great.


Go check out #BaseBoyz we can help each other.


And check my om out.

[Extinctor Draconis]

first and foremost, none of the words you used should require a dictionary, unless you're an idiot or jayohe(same thing)

2nd of all, saying that you're going for HoF is a biiiiiiiigggggg deterrent from having people read your work.


focus on writing well and for yourself, and you'll get in.