10 Lines
due in 30 mins.
Get at it son.
10 Lines
due in 30 mins.
Get at it son.
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alrite
yup. check
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Originally Posted by Celph Taut
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Ima Rapper Fuck if you like it, I give a fuck
He Tryna play pac Ill Hit em Up
I mean literally throw uppercut
lift ya up a couple inches chump
Im from cali im really good in the hood
you can bet ya life
he aint in the hood you know why?
he LEFT 2 WRITE...
If i drop first he'll prolly no show and run
watch him tryna play my name havin
oh so much fun
say it out loud in ya rap
you'll just be talkin bout that old ho i fuck
servin you puttin butter on ya breakfast
im high but this was gona be a dope line
sumthin bout the butler on the fresh prince... lol fuck it keystyle
Its obvious this dude is whack just look at his structure,
Im gunna Hot Dog this shit, i don't need to KETCHUP, hes fuckin mustard,
That was a quick drop from someone who desperately needs help,
You need your mom, shes the only one who can help yourself,
Im just going along this battle, writin whatevers in my head,
I could read you a bedtime story but at least my mommy doesn't tuck me in bed,
Lets talk about food, cherries? bread? your mom sucks my pickle good,
You think im choppin trees early, but naw thats you gettin morning wood,
8 more lines? mmmm im thinkin, what could I really say?
R.I.P. My mom....at your grave.. Bright and Early up on memorial Day
I really wish this fool could be cool and relate,
too bad hes down for everything, A.T. at least taught me to elevate,
I'm down for battlin anyone, but this fool is nothin'
His mom had a party in her mouth, i was the only one cummin,
Whatsamesa sayin? Sorry MyMom, your more worse than Jar Jar Binks,
you know this fools weak, when he doesn't give 3 feedback links.
HA!
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V//My Mom.
Mom:Structure was A little off. Im assuming you also use wordpad lol.
This was nice,"you can bet ya life
he aint in the hood you know why?
he LEFT 2 WRITE..."
Jeff:I didn't see any punches,also you didn't give
feedback links either.
Correction, you literally just did it.
cool, you can get off my jock now.
uppin
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all them views nd no votes lol
^hehe.
this was not a battle i liked readin to be honest. only thing i seen from my mom that made me believe u put some thought into it was the left 2 write little personal/punch.
everything else was filler with no set up or punch to it.
this ur first battle so imma let u know that u should be aimin all punches at jeff, not throwin some weak rhyme scheme that shoulda been recorded on a track instead of a rap battle.
jeff u prolly assumed already he was gon write some garbage so u didnt try all that too much. the ketchup wordplay has been abused but the mustard reference to me was irrelevant. well, i get what u mean but it doesnt go with the punch.
i didnt really see u throw any punches but besides those cats u had em in flow, structure, nameplay...nd so on.
so not based on punches am i givin my vote to jeff but for an overall better polished verse when it came to the categories.
vote - Jeffry
heres a link
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...348/index.html
D Block: Humble But Hungry by Large Amount
Jack Riches ft. John Stock & P. Body - No Talkin'
track #11
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wtf hes on your friends list that vote shouldnt count
1st thing - STOP Swaying votes.Originally Posted by My Mom
2nd Thing - He is everybody's friend, evrybody likes john j.
3rd thing - UPPPPP
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john j is garbage im not swaying votes retard
My Mom: No hate but i didnt see any punches thrown at ur opponent u need to elevate a bit on the battling category.
Jeffrey: hands Down u took this battle u had the hardest of the punches need i say your the only one who had punches.
v/Jeffrey
No hate My Mom but u need to stick to directing punchlines towards the opponent using personals and creativity.
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