The Street Alley

[#PrimeTime]

thanks for the feed guys, appreciate it

[wickedwordpLay]

ok I love readin stories.
but this piece didnt have any flow.
You had no multis, no internals, and only had end rhymes
which isnt enough to maintain a flow with stretched lines
The content was alright, but could use better structure

hit my story up, tell me what you think
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...023/index.html

[#PrimeTime]

alright i can take contstructive criticism