Shunned1 5-6 Vs. Raydeoh 3-4 -Vote-

[Tim]

Lethal Lyricist League Week 13

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[Raydeoh]

Check

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=8095352
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...567/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...95386&posted=1
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...95422&posted=1

[Shunned1]

check

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...568/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...560/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...567/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...565/index.html

[Shunned1]

10

brutality's essential, & for no good reason he's gettin beat on,
see how easily I'm fuckin up rayd...like drunken police squads.
you strike fear into no one, only bringin scorn to the thrills,
raydeoh hasn't broadcasted terror since orson welles did war of the worlds.
ur flow's weak, soft & meek, even w/ lack of sleep I delete vermin,
you got no sting, ray, ur just gettin stabbed in the heart, steve irwin.
basque in ur self-hyped glory, ur not a boss, just a bum actor,
if I'm showin......
........my respects to ray,don, then it just gave this bitch lung cancer.
this is a sure thing, so don't question, or try to act up,
becuz I'm droppin radio quicker than suicide victims in the bathtub.

[Raydeoh]

You get NO pussy.. I'm sure your penis dome's dead..
'Cuz the only bitches who abduction resemble ET & Coneheads
Plus your ugly.. when girls see you they scream & shout..
Your face sets off an alarm that ADT's been havin' wet dreams about
Here since 05? Maybe you are toppin the bouts..
Your skills are off the charts.. in the trash and forgotten about
I'm nice in baseball too.. don't get mad dog..
If I swing once.. your bitch'll be on ma bat quicker than fastballs
I gotta come with force.. because those dubs I have more to get..
So I'll hitchu so direct, Shun.. that your face'll map my fist coordinates

[A.T.]

brutality's essential, & for no good reason he's gettin beat on,
see how easily I'm fuckin up rayd...like drunken police squads.
eh... ok opener
you strike fear into no one, only bringin scorn to the thrills,
raydeoh hasn't broadcasted terror since orson welles did war of the worlds.
decent-ish
ur flow's weak, soft & meek, even w/ lack of sleep I delete vermin,
you got no sting, ray, ur just gettin stabbed in the heart, steve irwin.
ok
basque in ur self-hyped glory, ur not a boss, just a bum actor,
if I'm showin......
........my respects to ray,don, then it just gave this bitch lung cancer.
eh... stretched, took away from the hit, imo
this is a sure thing, so don't question, or try to act up,
becuz I'm droppin radio quicker than suicide victims in the bathtub.
ok closer

vs

You get NO pussy.. I'm sure your penis dome's dead..
'Cuz the only bitches who abduction resemble ET & Coneheads
eh... ok
Plus your ugly.. when girls see you they scream & shout..
Your face sets off an alarm that ADT's been havin' wet dreams about
lmao @ ADT having wet dreams
Here since 05? Maybe you are toppin the bouts..
Your skills are off the charts.. in the trash and forgotten about
nice flip on played concept... good
I'm nice in baseball too.. don't get mad dog..
If I swing once.. your bitch'll be on ma bat quicker than fastballs
decent
I gotta come with force.. because those dubs I have more to get..
So I'll hitchu so direct, Shun.. that your face'll map my fist coordinates
eh, closer

I think Ray took this with better wording, tbh... decent battle

vote- Ray

[Per$onal]

ur flow's weak, soft & meek, even w/ lack of sleep I delete vermin,
you got no sting, ray, ur just gettin stabbed in the heart, steve irwin.
this is a sure thing, so don't question, or try to act up,
becuz I'm droppin radio quicker than suicide victims in the bathtub

vs

You get NO pussy.. I'm sure your penis dome's dead..
'Cuz the only bitches who abduction resemble ET & Coneheads
I gotta come with force.. because those dubs I have more to get..
So I'll hitchu so direct, Shun.. that your face'll map my fist coordinates


shunned i've never read a verse from you before but you're actually pretty good. You've definitely got some potential, you just have to come up with some fresher concepts and not use so many name plays. Raydeoh you also went with a lot of nameplays, but they connected harder, and also your wording was a bit crisper. Good battle, but I've gotta give it to raydeoh

vote-raydeoh

[Untold.]

brutality's essential, & for no good reason he's gettin beat on,
see how easily I'm fuckin up rayd...like drunken police squads.
you strike fear into no one, only bringin scorn to the thrills,
raydeoh hasn't broadcasted terror since orson welles did war of the worlds.
ur flow's weak, soft & meek, even w/ lack of sleep I delete vermin,
you got no sting, ray, ur just gettin stabbed in the heart, steve irwin.
this is a sure thing, so don't question, or try to act up,
becuz I'm droppin radio quicker than suicide victims in the bathtub.

vs.

You get NO pussy.. I'm sure your penis dome's dead..
'Cuz the only bitches who abduction resemble ET & Coneheads
Plus your ugly.. when girls see you they scream & shout..
Your face sets off an alarm that ADT's been havin' wet dreams about t
I'm nice in baseball too.. don't get mad dog..
If I swing once.. your bitch'll be on ma bat quicker than fastballs

damn good battle here. both ya'll came out swinging with no b/s and harsh punches. off top, gotta give both props. but i felt that shun just had more consistency with what i liked in his verse. raydeoh had the some nice bars and a few of the play'd/flip'd lines were cool, but wasn't enough for shun.

v/ shunned1

[Bongkers]

brutality's essential, & for no good reason he's gettin beat on,
see how easily I'm fuckin up rayd...like drunken police squads.
decent
you strike fear into no one, only bringin scorn to the thrills,
raydeoh hasn't broadcasted terror since orson welles did war of the worlds.
ok
ur flow's weak, soft & meek, even w/ lack of sleep I delete vermin,
you got no sting, ray, ur just gettin stabbed in the heart, steve irwin.
played concept, but pretty good nameplay.. so decent overall
basque in ur self-hyped glory, ur not a boss, just a bum actor,
if I'm showin......
........my respects to ray,don, then it just gave this bitch lung cancer.
wasn't feeling this one
this is a sure thing, so don't question, or try to act up,
becuz I'm droppin radio quicker than suicide victims in the bathtub.
lol nice, but I think you over did it with the nameplay tbh

vs.

You get NO pussy.. I'm sure your penis dome's dead..
'Cuz the only bitches who abduction resemble ET & Coneheads
cool
Plus your ugly.. when girls see you they scream & shout..
Your face sets off an alarm that ADT's been havin' wet dreams about
ok
Here since 05? Maybe you are toppin the bouts..
Your skills are off the charts.. in the trash and forgotten about
okish
I'm nice in baseball too.. don't get mad dog..
If I swing once.. your bitch'll be on ma bat quicker than fastballs
ok
I gotta come with force.. because those dubs I have more to get..
So I'll hitchu so direct, Shun.. that your face'll map my fist coordinates
felt the wording was a little forced, cool nameplay/concept tho


Thought shunned was more consistent and had a few more quotables.. no hate ray but I think he edged you out here bro.

[The Archetype]

brutality's essential, & for no good reason he's gettin beat on,
see how easily I'm fuckin up rayd...like drunken police squads.
ok... wording is a bit off...
you strike fear into no one, only bringin scorn to the thrills,
raydeoh hasn't broadcasted terror since orson welles did war of the worlds.
good concept but doesn't rhyme...
ur flow's weak, soft & meek, even w/ lack of sleep I delete vermin,
you got no sting, ray, ur just gettin stabbed in the heart, steve irwin.
decent but i hate the set up...
basque in ur self-hyped glory, ur not a boss, just a bum actor,
if I'm showin......
........my respects to ray,don, then it just gave this bitch lung cancer.
wording is awful... and you don't need all those dots... just 3... and they're in the wrong place... should be after don
this is a sure thing, so don't question, or try to act up,
becuz I'm droppin radio quicker than suicide victims in the bathtub.
eh...

vs

You get NO pussy.. I'm sure your penis dome's dead..
'Cuz the only bitches who abduction resemble ET & Coneheads
eh...
Plus your ugly.. when girls see you they scream & shout..
Your face sets off an alarm that ADT's been havin' wet dreams about
ok...
Here since 05? Maybe you are toppin the bouts..
Your skills are off the charts.. in the trash and forgotten about
eh...
I'm nice in baseball too.. don't get mad dog..
If I swing once.. your bitch'll be on ma bat quicker than fastballs
eh...
I gotta come with force.. because those dubs I have more to get..
So I'll hitchu so direct, Shun.. that your face'll map my fist coordinates
good...

vote Ray... better wording and cleaner verse