Cont: Untold. 6-2 Vs. Per$onal 3-0 -Vote-

[Tim]

Lethal Lyricist League Week 10

Due Times
Check in due Thursday 11.59pm EST.
- if you don't check in by this time, you WILL be Dqued
Verses due by Friday 11.59pm EST.
- 2 hour grace period, if used -3 votes
-Max. Extension = 24 hours, to be granted by your opponent.

Line Limits
10 min and 20 max…If no line limit agreed, second battler to post must match first battler. But ultimately, first battler gets to set the line number by how much he posts.

Links
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[Untold.]

Check

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...254/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...242/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...253/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...243/index.html

[Per$onal]

check

[Untold.]

how is personal in the contenders, when i beat him he was 0-4 now hes magically 3-0?

lets just say that wasn't really me at the beginning of the season

lol, good one brah


anyways, to the people who are actually relevant, I was just really busy with school and wasn't putting effort in, and was either no showing or not trying...i than signed out, and a few weeks later tim said that I could come back with a clean slate now that I had a little more free time. Not a big deal

0-4 to 3-0? i guess pers n tim perused each other
cuz goin from a negative to a positive means u n tim should'a used a rubber
so u took a vacation from txt learnin some ill writtens
funny thing bout u comin back tho, is that ur skills didn't
u was droppin wack since day 1, plz don't speak tool
u said it wasn't the same guy as before? u got me n the league fooled
congrats on contendors but u'll get raped n its fact
cuz if its me>you, even you know you'll get ate in this match
quit u whore. ur not even average so u'll get ripped n torn
ur so below the bar, u could turn playin limbo into an olympic sport
im bashin this germ. but he might win if hes bad wit his words
u pullin it out at the last minute? is somethin ur dad should'a learned
luck got u here, so wit ease i'll collect the win
cuz my token of appreciation.. is facin this loser instead of him
while i study biology, i see this shit is kinetics
cuz this genotype of gangsta even if it was in his genetics
p, ya broke as fuck. prolly have to hawler for some change
but persona wack image that looks as cheap as the dollar in his name
im bankin on the win! while u peep profiles in hope for 1 punch
bitch i bet ur checkin accounts cuz u lack the funds to open one up

[Per$onal]

inspires me to get back in the gym and work out. can't say i've been able to do half the stuff your doing here, but i know at my peak, i could'a caught on quick.

you've been a failure at text...so honestly this would be a heavy mistake
cuz if you didn't workout here... WTF makes you think you'd do better with weights?
you see I joined the league after you...now I'm undefeated so that's the best part
and yeah may be a front runner..... but only cuz true losers get a head start
trust me ya girl's always over... you can best believe that i've tossed it
cuz im the type'a dude to muff lure.. now you know why she's always feelin exhausted
i'll admit the bitch is cute tho.. the type where you just wanna take'er to dinner
and since opposites attract... it's no wonder why you're dating a winner
no one believes your phony lies..... we just disregard that shit by the batch
but we will say, "yeah, un believable"..to the thought of you winning this match
so of course i'll come out on top.. this is a voting decision at it's clearest
n' ya cries won't fall on deaf ears... so we'll just tell you to stfu when we hear it
I got the weapons I promise... so trust me you'll be gettin demolished
cuz I'm the type to fill a buster with bullets like I'm holding senaters hostage
your textin is weak... expect to see this dude told dead in the street
i'll never be beat...so i'll leave un deafeated cuz there's no way your endin my streak
i got fists that are cocked back...and you shouldn't doubt that they're steady
cuz I've got so many punches for told.... it's like we knew the outcome already
pers'll tout the mechette... come commando style, decked out wit blades n' a shotty
n' my attention for this'll be undivided<= which'll lead to that bein the state of ya body

[A.T.]

0-4 to 3-0? i guess pers n tim perused each other
cuz goin from a negative to a positive means u n tim should'a used a rubber
decent flip, I like the concept
so u took a vacation from txt learnin some ill writtens
funny thing bout u comin back tho, is that ur skills didn't
I've used a similar concept, takes away from the hit a little but this was good.
u was droppin wack since day 1, plz don't speak tool
u said it wasn't the same guy as before? u got me n the league fooled
decent
congrats on contendors but u'll get raped n its fact
cuz if its me>you, even you know you'll get ate in this match
ok-ish
quit u whore. ur not even average so u'll get ripped n torn
ur so below the bar, u could turn playin limbo into an olympic sport
decent hit
im bashin this germ. but he might win if hes bad wit his words
u pullin it out at the last minute? is somethin ur dad should'a learned
ROFLMAO... good hit!
luck got u here, so wit ease i'll collect the win
cuz my token of appreciation.. is facin this loser instead of him
decent
while i study biology, i see this shit is kinetics
cuz this genotype of gangsta even if it was in his genetics
not really feeling this one, bro
p, ya broke as fuck. prolly have to hawler for some change
but persona wack image that looks as cheap as the dollar in his name
ok...
im bankin on the win! while u peep profiles in hope for 1 punch
bitch i bet ur checkin accounts cuz u lack the funds to open one up
eh... ok-ish closer

vs.

you've been a failure at text...so honestly this would be a heavy mistake
cuz if you didn't workout here... WTF makes you think you'd do better with weights?
decent
you see I joined the league after you...now I'm undefeated so that's the best part
and yeah may be a front runner..... but only cuz true losers get a head start
eh... this was worded kinda funny... but ok-ish
trust me ya girl's always over... you can best believe that i've tossed it
cuz im the type'a dude to muff lure.. now you know why she's always feelin exhausted
ok-ish, I like the concept, though
i'll admit the bitch is cute tho.. the type where you just wanna take'er to dinner
and since opposites attract... it's no wonder why you're dating a winner
lol... good hit
no one believes your phony lies..... we just disregard that shit by the batch
but we will say, "yeah, un believable"..to the thought of you winning this match
decent
so of course i'll come out on top.. this is a voting decision at it's clearest
n' ya cries won't fall on deaf ears... so we'll just tell you to stfu when we hear it
decent
I got the weapons I promise... so trust me you'll be gettin demolished
cuz I'm the type to fill a buster with bullets like I'm holding senaters hostage
good
your textin is weak... expect to see this dude told dead in the street
i'll never be beat...so i'll leave un deafeated cuz there's no way your endin my streak
too simple
i got fists that are cocked back...and you shouldn't doubt that they're steady
cuz I've got so many punches for told.... it's like we knew the outcome already
Good hit... I like the nameplay
pers'll tout the mechette... come commando style, decked out wit blades n' a shotty
n' my attention for this'll be undivided<= which'll lead to that bein the state of ya body
not really feeling the closer, tbh

I got Personal taking this one with a few better punches. Untold had the LOB, but it
wasn't enough. Pers was just too consistent

vote- personal

[Raydeoh]

0-4 to 3-0? i guess pers n tim perused each other
cuz goin from a negative to a positive means u n tim should'a used a rubber
Lol
so u took a vacation from txt learnin some ill writtens
funny thing bout u comin back tho, is that ur skills didn't
Decent enough
u was droppin wack since day 1, plz don't speak tool
u said it wasn't the same guy as before? u got me n the league fooled
Not feelin'
congrats on contendors but u'll get raped n its fact
cuz if its me>you, even you know you'll get ate in this match
See where you're going.. this is ok I guess
quit u whore. ur not even average so u'll get ripped n torn
ur so below the bar, u could turn playin limbo into an olympic sport
Decent
im bashin this germ. but he might win if hes bad wit his words
u pullin it out at the last minute? is somethin ur dad should'a learned
Decent
luck got u here, so wit ease i'll collect the win
cuz my token of appreciation.. is facin this loser instead of him
Nice
while i study biology, i see this shit is kinetics
cuz this genotype of gangsta even if it was in his genetics
You called him a G before saying he's not a gangsta.. that killed this for me
p, ya broke as fuck. prolly have to hawler for some change
but persona wack image that looks as cheap as the dollar in his name
Ok
im bankin on the win! while u peep profiles in hope for 1 punch
bitch i bet ur checkin accounts cuz u lack the funds to open one up
Ok I guess

vs

you've been a failure at text...so honestly this would be a heavy mistake
cuz if you didn't workout here... WTF makes you think you'd do better with weights?
Ok I guess
you see I joined the league after you...now I'm undefeated so that's the best part
and yeah may be a front runner..... but only cuz true losers get a head start
Ok
trust me ya girl's always over... you can best believe that i've tossed it
cuz im the type'a dude to muff lure.. now you know why she's always feelin exhausted
Like the idea.. and even tho it seems slightly forced this was still decent
i'll admit the bitch is cute tho.. the type where you just wanna take'er to dinner
and since opposites attract... it's no wonder why you're dating a winner
Lol
no one believes your phony lies..... we just disregard that shit by the batch
but we will say, "yeah, un believable"..to the thought of you winning this match
Ok
so of course i'll come out on top.. this is a voting decision at it's clearest
n' ya cries won't fall on deaf ears... so we'll just tell you to stfu when we hear it
Decent
I got the weapons I promise... so trust me you'll be gettin demolished
cuz I'm the type to fill a buster with bullets like I'm holding senaters hostage
Nice
your textin is weak... expect to see this dude told dead in the street
i'll never be beat...so i'll leave un deafeated cuz there's no way your endin my streak
Decent
i got fists that are cocked back...and you shouldn't doubt that they're steady
cuz I've got so many punches for told.... it's like we knew the outcome already
Decent
pers'll tout the mechette... come commando style, decked out wit blades n' a shotty
n' my attention for this'll be undivided<= which'll lead to that bein the state of ya body
Not feelin'.. too many "Un" punches anyway


I have Per$onal coming slightly more consistant here.. good battle to both

Vote: Per$onal

[Untold.]

votes?

[The Archetype]

0-4 to 3-0? i guess pers n tim perused each other
cuz goin from a negative to a positive means u n tim should'a used a rubber
quit u whore. ur not even average so u'll get ripped n torn
ur so below the bar, u could turn playin limbo into an olympic sport

vs

i'll admit the bitch is cute tho.. the type where you just wanna take'er to dinner
and since opposites attract... it's no wonder why you're dating a winner
your textin is weak... expect to see this dude told dead in the street
i'll never be beat...so i'll leave un deafeated cuz there's no way your endin my streak

hmm... i only picked the very best from both... a lot of almost quotables... like the filibuster, but that's an old flip... both had some stretches and a couple of bad concepts, but imo, Per's verse was cleaner overall w/ misses that were better... but not bad from either....

vote Personal

[$pitacular]

0-4 to 3-0? i guess pers n tim perused each other
cuz goin from a negative to a positive means u n tim should'a used a rubber
so u took a vacation from txt learnin some ill writtens
funny thing bout u comin back tho, is that ur skills didn't
u was droppin wack since day 1, plz don't speak tool
u said it wasn't the same guy as before? u got me n the league fooled
quit u whore. ur not even average so u'll get ripped n torn
ur so below the bar, u could turn playin limbo into an olympic sport

vs

trust me ya girl's always over... you can best believe that i've tossed it
cuz im the type'a dude to muff lure.. now you know why she's always feelin exhausted
I got the weapons I promise... so trust me you'll be gettin demolished
cuz I'm the type to fill a buster with bullets like I'm holding senaters hostage
your textin is weak... expect to see this dude told dead in the street
i'll never be beat...so i'll leave un deafeated cuz there's no way your endin my streak
i got fists that are cocked back...and you shouldn't doubt that they're steady
cuz I've got so many punches for told.... it's like we knew the outcome already


to me this was really close.. I really felt a nice section of your verse Untold, that shit was like a chunk of fire.. but then you fell off completely IMO toward the end.. Per$onal you didn't have the same momentum, however you stayed consistant.. your misses weren't the entire second half of your verse, they were intermittent which kept the verse entertaining, while with yours Untold I was hell yeah.. then wha? then nah.. and you lost me at the end making the whole verse's impact wane pretty bad.. plus I think Per$onal got the upper hand on the creativity.. edged it out IMO

v/ Per$onal

[SmokaJoka]

u was droppin wack since day 1, plz don't speak tool
u said it wasn't the same guy as before? u got me n the league fooled
im bashin this germ. but he might win if hes bad wit his words
u pullin it out at the last minute? is somethin ur dad should'a learned


vs.


trust me ya girl's always over... you can best believe that i've tossed it
cuz im the type'a dude to muff lure.. now you know why she's always feelin exhausted
your textin is weak... expect to see this dude told dead in the street
i'll never be beat...so i'll leave un deafeated cuz there's no way your endin my streak


Vote - Personal, more consisntent...Untold still comes with some gayness that shouldn't even be written sometimes tbh

[Aeral]

0-4 to 3-0? i guess pers n tim perused each other
cuz goin from a negative to a positive means u n tim should'a used a rubber
im bashin this germ. but he might win if hes bad wit his words
u pullin it out at the last minute? is somethin ur dad should'a learned

V.

i'll admit the bitch is cute tho.. the type where you just wanna take'er to dinner
and since opposites attract... it's no wonder why you're dating a winner
your textin is weak... expect to see this dude told dead in the street
i'll never be beat...so i'll leave un deafeated cuz there's no way your endin my streak
i got fists that are cocked back...and you shouldn't doubt that they're steady
cuz I've got so many punches for told.... it's like we knew the outcome already

V/ Pers got this. decent battle. untold had lotb with his opener. nice personal, pers had the overall better verse and less misses.