Crumble

[Jukon]

Crumble.

The mailman was the enemy, planting seeds in my memory,
letters that would never come, feeding myself with misery.
Blind visionaries paint pictures with words on the post mark,
I always pray for strength, beg it's enough when hopes aren't.
I remember her face when she dove into the pages below,
Her satin tears smear the voice while the spaces reload.
And I cannot fathom, corroding away between the words,
it's different when your life rests beneath your ripped t shirt.
A thumping heart that palpitated when the running starts,
and through the numbing scars, your pain runs n departs.
Rips in my jeans strain my wits and the genes I wear; thin
Like a tight rope balancing act, I'll wish for strength again.
Powered down by sinner's gin, whiskey and tonic chaser,
Betting on sobriety, known for making a chronic wager.
Indebted to you, I was never one for sweating the truth
but the way your legs bend with your morals is crude.
and your promiscuity is true, whorin' 'round to pay your dues.
When did karma surface? just a word created to hurt us,
now you're feelin worthless?
..no price on what you're doing, just your life & pride
watching it all crumble while you quietly die inside.

kind of old but never posted it here so i figured why the fuck not

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...951/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...908/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...953/index.html

[Cap4]

very strong.i like it and feel it.

[Solidus]

The mailman was the enemy, planting seeds in my memory,
letters that would never come, feeding myself with misery.

Thats one helluva opener, Folk. Very strong, & gave room to breakthrough into the meat of the art. Very nice.

Powered down by sinner's gin, whiskey and tonic chaser,
Betting on sobriety, known for making a chronic wager.

Another strong catchpoint.

There's not much I can pinpoint in solitude, but as a whole its an outspoken message along the lines of Huey Freeman. Nicely done.

[Jukon]

Appreciated.

[Just Skan]

The mailman was the enemy, planting seeds in my memory,
letters that would never come, feeding myself with misery

rediculuos opener i first read it and honestly was like damn lol

Blind visionaries paint pictures with words on the post mark,
I always pray for strength, beg it's enough when hopes aren't.

honestly im only gonna quote these two lines caz i cant pick what else to quote lol.. dope piece man, every line carefully placed and every rhyme carefully placed... imagery off the charts emotion was insane... i love this i think its crazy loll good job man keep it up


check this out
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...140/index.html